Sasui of the Kumogakure

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Name: Sasui
Nickname: Sasui-san or Sasui-kun
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Clan: Adopted into OmoI and Karui's family (them being cousins)

Looks: He's 5'8 and a half, 130 lbs. He's got short spiky, platinum blonde hair (like Omoi), black eyes, he's got the standard single strap Flak Jacket with a dark blue high collared shirt partly unzipped (mimicking Darui). He wear his black headband around his forehead like Omoi. He's muscular, but not hulk sized. He's got one small circular earring in each ear and carries a black bladed katana on his back in a white and red sheath. He wears the shin guards like Raikage Ei and has his pants tucked into the shin guards. He's got his deceased mother's kanji of her first name going vertically down his right shoulder.

Personality: He's quiet, doesn't speak unless directly spoken to. He may be quiet, but he's no slouch when it comes to combat. He's trained with Darui, Karui and Omoi in the art of Kenjutsu. He's got a medium deep voice and has a strong interest in woman. As a matter of fact, he'd rather save the life of a woman than save another man. This attribute comes from the loss of his mother. He's promised to save every woman he possibly can.

Village Info

Village of Birth: Kumogakure
Village of Alliance: Kumogakure

Rank//Chakra Info

Ninja Rank: Chuunin
Specialty: .
Elements: Raiton & Doton (wants to learn)
Your ninjutsu: Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)

(Ki Nobori no Shugyō) - Tree Climbing Practice
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 5
Damage points: N/A
Description: This is a training method used to gain the basic skills of chakra control. This training involves focusing a fixed amount of chakra to the bottom of one's feet, and using that to climb a tree without using one's hands. If the stream of chakra is too weak, the user will lose their footing on the tree and fall off. If it is too strong, the user will be pushed away from the tree, causing the bark of the tree to break around the point of contact and the user to fall. This technique becomes second nature to shinobi with more practice.
Note: Technique only for use of training methods.

(Suimen Hokō no Gyō) - Water Surface Walking Practice
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 5
Damage points: N/A
Description: This training method is used to gain better chakra control. To do this, the user has to be emitting a constant stream of chakra from the bottom of the their feet and using the repellent force to walk across the water's surface. This technique is more difficult to master than the Tree Climbing Practice, because the amount of chakra that needs to be emitted changes constantly. This technique becomes second nature to shinobi with more practices.
Note: Technique only for use of training methods.
Summoning Contracts:



Background Info

History: At the age 10, his step father killed his mother in the middle of the night. A powerful thunder storm was above the village and enraged at the sight of his dead mother, he used natural lightning to strike his step father, killing him almost instantly. Jounin and ANBU rushed over and Omoi and Karui were two of the Jounin on the scene. The very next day, Raikage Ei allowed them to adopt the newly orphaned Sasui. Ever since then, Omoi, Karui, Darui, Shi and Samui (RIP) have been like family to him. He's got a slight crush Mabui, Ei's assistant.

Other

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Theme Song and Background Music: Return to Destiny by Maon Kurosaki and Danzai no Hana by Kosaka Riyu

Battles

Won: 0
Lost: 0

~Declined~
You...you made the same exact bio 3 days after this one when you could have...you know edited this one?
 
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Uh..............
you didn't follow the template at all.
 

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No. Basic Bio Rules:

Summary:

1. Follow the template:
- If you do not follow the template or something close to it, than you get auto-decline.

2. You cannot have a Kekkei Genkai because you do not meet the requirements. Your first Jutsu is...... You have no training. Pick one Jutsu you want to specialize in.

3. You can have two Bio's.

Bio Approval: Caliburn is our Head Role-play Administrator. He normally approves Bio's. Other Moderators approve them as well, but who, is unknown. Bio approval usually takes up to a week to 2 weeks, if you are lucky, and to about a month if things seem busy. Do not ask about your Bio being approve, however, only if you have questions regarding the template or certain Bio rules. Fair warning:

Might I remind everyone of the fact that the template posted in this thread is the official template and your first priority is following it and not to make your bio appealing? As by now a lot of people just take it for granted that they can mess around the template as they see fit just so that it matches their coding. Till now I was always the one who edited it for them or let it slide when it was very minor. However recently most people started making more and more complex codings for their bio's and started to consider the basic template as something they could freely mess around with and new members just started copying them.

Henceforth I will decline bio's if they do not follow the template correctly, no matter how insignificant the problem might be and I will keep doing this until people realize again that the fundamental priority is following the template and that any kind of fancy coding is optional and that you take full responsibility for whatever problems that might cause. The only ones I give some slack are the people who made their first bio's, but anyone else who already made bio's should be aware of what the template looks like.

A few days ago I saw someone who just decided to remove their Village Info and only just said Village of Birth under Basic Information. Currently there is a coding going around that has been used in around 6 to 12 bio's and not a single one of all the persons noticed that there is a freaking huge coding error right in the middle of it and I was the one who had to edit it out and because the coding has become so complex, one tiny mistake of my part and the entire bio might look like hell. Originally when I had to edit stuff it was like playing like a child that is trying to get building blocks in the right hole, square in square, triangle in triangle. Now it feels like I'm doing surgery, making my job even harder and exhausting then it already was. A lot of people also stop counting their battles and then just minimize the Battles part of often even remove it =/

I don't care that you place smilies or N/A or whatever in the won/lost part or that you say "see bio" in the pictures part or that you don't actually post a Theme Song or that you even say in the looks part "see bio" or "see pictures"; however I'm sick of it that people's main concern is their coding and not the template.

So hereby you are warned as I'm going to decline bio's that don't follow it correctly, no matter how stupid the reason might appear to you as I'm responsible for all bio's and this is an issue that's occurring in a lot of them.
 
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PHP:
[b][u][size=4]Basic Information[/size][/u][/b]

[b][u]Name[/u]:[/b]
[u][B]Nickname[/B][/u]:
[b][u]Gender[/u]:[/b]
[b][u]Age[/u]:[/b]
[b][u]Clan[/u]:[/b]

[b][u]Looks[/u]:[/b]

[b][u]Personality[/u]:[/b]

[b][u][size=4]Village Info[/size][/u][/b]

[b][u]Village of Birth[/u]:[/b]
[b][u]Village of Alliance[/u]:[/b]

[b][u][size=4]Rank//Chakra Info[/size][/u][/b]

[b][u]Ninja Rank[/u]:[/b]
[b][u]Specialty[/u]:[/b]
[b][u]Elements[/u]:[/b]
[B][U]Your ninjutsu[/U]:[/B]

[SPOILER](Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user. 
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)  

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.  

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.  

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:N/A 
Damage Points:N/A 
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.  

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.  

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).  

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique 

Rank:E 
Type:Supplementary 
Range:Short 
Chakra Cost:5 
Damage Points:N/A 
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)[/SPOILER]

[b][u][size=4]Background Info[/size][/u][/b]

[b][u]History[/u]:[/b]

[b][u][size=4]Other[/size][/u][/b]

[b][u]Picture[s][/u]:[/b]

[b][u]Theme Song and Background Music[/u]:[/b]

[size=4][B][U]Battles[/U][/B][/size]

[B][U]Won[/U]:
[U]Lost[/U]:[/B]

Copy and Paste the PHP code into your bio.
 

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Much better, but take out everything in the 'Your Ninjutsu' section. Put back in the basic E ranks. You get more ninjutsu when you do training.
 

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:eek: this is going to take a long time to get approved...
 

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Hmmm.. I hope i get approved
 

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Don't worry future kage of the Kumogakure. :)
 

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Name Sasui
Nickname: Sasui-san or Sasui-kun
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Clan: Adopted into Omoi and Karui's family (them being cousins)

Looks: He's 5'8 and a half, 130 lbs. He's got short spiky, platinum blonde hair (like Omoi), black eyes, he's got the standard single strap Flak Jacket with a dark blue high collared shirt partly unzipped (mimicking Darui). He wear his black headband around his forehead like Omoi. He's muscular, but not hulk sized. He's got one small circular earring in each ear and carries a black bladed katana on his back in a white and red sheath. He wears the shin guards like Raikage Ei and has his pants tucked into the shin guards. He's got his deceased mother's kanji of her first name going vertically down his right shoulder.

Personality: He's quiet, doesn't speak unless directly spoken to. He may be quiet, but he's no slouch when it comes to combat. He's trained with Darui, Karui and Omoi in the art of Kenjutsu. He's got a medium deep voice and has a strong interest in woman. As a matter of fact, he'd rather save the life of a woman than save another man. This attribute comes from the loss of his mother. He's promised to save every woman he possibly can.

Village Info

Village of Birth: Kumogakure
Village of Alliance: Kumogakure

Rank//Chakra Info

Ninja Rank: Chuunin
Specialty: The ability to pass his Raiton through his Katana.
Elements: Raiton
Your ninjutsu: Taijutsu and Kenjutsu, C Ranked Ninjutsu (in training)
Summoning Contracts: Kuchiyose: Raitoningu Ryouken (Lightning Hounds: Joji, Kibari and Tarui)



Background Info

History: At the age 10, his step father killed his mother in the middle of the night. A powerful thunder storm was above the village and enraged at the sight of his dead mother, he used natural lightning to strike his step father, killing him almost instantly. Jounin and ANBU rushed over and Omoi and Karui were two of the Jounin on the scene. The very next day, Raikage Ei allowed them to adopt the newly orphaned Sasui. Ever since then, Omoi, Karui, Darui, Shi and Samui (RIP) have been like family to him. He's got a slight crush Mabui, Ei's assistant.

Other

Picture: n/a

Theme Song and Background Music: Return to Destiny by Maon Kurosaki and Danzai no Hana by Kosaka Riyu

Battles

Won: 0
Lost: 0

Better guys?


Alright man, I like the story ya got going on, but to get it approved we need to do some more corrected.

everything bold take out, you don't have a specialty yet because you haven't gotten any training. You don't have any summonings yet because you have never signed a contract. The first element you want to learn is Raiton right? Good choice, next to Raiton put (Wants to learn).

Now about the underlined and bold, other i want you to take out what you have since like before you haven't gotten training in those things, so you haven't learned them yet. Instead put these E rank ninjutsu techniques that you get auto for starting the RP.

Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)

(Ki Nobori no Shugyō) - Tree Climbing Practice
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 5
Damage points: N/A
Description: This is a training method used to gain the basic skills of chakra control. This training involves focusing a fixed amount of chakra to the bottom of one's feet, and using that to climb a tree without using one's hands. If the stream of chakra is too weak, the user will lose their footing on the tree and fall off. If it is too strong, the user will be pushed away from the tree, causing the bark of the tree to break around the point of contact and the user to fall. This technique becomes second nature to shinobi with more practice.
Note: Technique only for use of training methods.

(Suimen Hokō no Gyō) - Water Surface Walking Practice
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 5
Damage points: N/A
Description: This training method is used to gain better chakra control. To do this, the user has to be emitting a constant stream of chakra from the bottom of the their feet and using the repellent force to walk across the water's surface. This technique is more difficult to master than the Tree Climbing Practice, because the amount of chakra that needs to be emitted changes constantly. This technique becomes second nature to shinobi with more practices.
Note: Technique only for use of training methods.

copy and paste those, and put them where the underlined stuff is.

Kumo is where you want to be huh? Well, you can join the one in our RP if you like. I saw your RP post in Konoha town, the rp here isn't like that but it's still fun to play.

If you want to join Kumogakure, hit me up via VM and I'll tell you the steps or you can try to go to the Raikage himself XD

Link to the Raikage page (yes, he's a jinchu xD)
 

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:blush: aww your bio is so simple. Its nice actually
 

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Hope I get approved! I'm eager to start my training!:yay:
 

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I'm closing this thread. I've fixed up my bio a TON.

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