Riyo Uchiha story continuation.

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I made up a series I think last year, this is a continuation. That was my last chapter, please do not flame.
Note: I said that the characters in this storyline was 7 years old at first, but I now changed it to 13 since I thought 7 year olds would have limitations.

Hayatte Gekko, the third instructor of the Chunin Exam explained the rules. Once everyone was familiar with it the matches started. First up was Ken Vs Katame.

Ken Vs Katame fight!

As soon as the bell was rung and the sound reached their ears, both of them instantly sprinted around the arena.
"This is great! I'm gonna set up traps and- ARGH!!!"
Ken screamed out in pain as Katame struck him from behind.
"You little bastard!" Ken screamed
"Come at me bro..." Katame confidently taunted Ken.
What Katame said infuriated Ken and Ken began to make hand seals.
"Katon!: Fire palm jutsu!"
Ken charged at Katane and hit him, but Katane dodged and Ken missed, but when Ken hit the ground, the fire spread out.
"Nani..." Katane wondered.
Soon enough, the whole arena was covered in fire, Katane was trapped in a corner, as Ken weaved through the fire, the fire split when he approached it.
"Taunting me was a big mistake...!" Ken said as he punched Katane in the face and the opponent glided out of the arena. Jane and Riyo was surprised.
"When did he learn that..." Riyo wondered in his mind.
When Ken got back to the spectator's stand, the next fight had started. The two fighters on the arena was Yani and Adori!

Please comment if you like it and what I could improve on. ALso if I should continue it. THANK YOU!!!
 

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You should always continue writing.

Although not the best, you do seem to have an instinct. You should work more on description and format. Try and include line breaks between your paragraphs and keep your paragraphs to three or more sentences and you'll be doing fine.
 

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You should always continue writing.

Although not the best, you do seem to have an instinct. You should work more on description and format. Try and include line breaks between your paragraphs and keep your paragraphs to three or more sentences and you'll be doing fine.
Yeah I was aware of that but I wouldn't be stuffed. I was in a rush. Sorry next chapter will be better.
 
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