Riyo Uchiha-Cool Dark

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Riyo Uchiha-Cool Dark
This is a novel,it's probably not what you're used to but it;s what I'm used to.

Riyo Uchiha,someone who was called cool in the academy,and also a genius,sat on a branch of his favorite tree,it was where he would go when he needed to be alone,listening to the gusts of wind and the rustles of leaves,it was a place where he could just focus.He thought about the events that had befallen on him,the Uchiha Massacre,where he was spared by Itachi Uchiha,for being capable of something,but somehow,he didn't get angry,he did at first but let go of it soon,he hated that thing,he was too much of a kid,too gentle.He wanted to be cool,dark,cold,heartless,but he was born that way,and he resented that,he couldn't even hate the slayer of his clan."Riyo,you alright?"Jin,his older brother said.
"Yeah,it's so cool here,you should know,you know me more than anyone."Riyo said.
"Yeah,you're right,cool ,then I'll be waiting at the academy,be there when you're done."
"Right,"Riyo dashed down the tree,"Let's go now."Riyo told Jin.They walked down the road to the academy.Riyo Uchiha was 7 years old,yet,he was cool in Taijutsu,awesome in D to C ranked Ninjutsu,but lacked the potential to use Genjutsu,but nobody saw that as a bad thing,kids at his age weren't even able to use Ninjutsu.Jin,his sibling,was 10 years old,3 years older than him,but yet he wasn't that much stronger than him,it was said many times that Riyo was stronger than his bro,but he didn't accept that,he always thought his brother was always going easy in spars,he saw his only bro in real fights,and he was much stronger.Riyo and Jin were both Genins,and both of them were taking the chuunin exam,Riyo was nervous,but he had no intention of showing that,he admired his brother for being cheerful,but,Riyo didn't like that way of living,always smiling and laughing,he wanted to be emo.He didn't know why,but it's just that......it wasn't his style.Riyo was actually being emo.

Riyo and Jin arrived at the academy,they went inside and entered a room,where the paper tests of the chuunin exam was happening,when Ibiki said go,the participants started the tests.......
 
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Too short, and the character is for me too perfect, I mean it's your character, but don't like it..it's my thought, nothing more...
 

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Not bad, but not the best either. I like the way you write, but it's a little unorganized as Tendo mentioned, but just take your time and put your effort in it and I'm sure you have a good FF right here.
 
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