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TheObserver

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Im write a "Light Novel". Here is the story so far. Help me out guys, what do you think?

Two hundred years before the start of the main story. In the beginning, when the world was new. Three races inhabited the planet. The Humble Elves, the samurai clan (Man), and the Sorcerer race who were hailed as the most powerful of the three. Until the day of “Ruin”. Thirteen humanoid beings possessing various dark abilities emerged. Each capable of different supernatural feats. A fierce battle between the races took place. Before the end of this battle casualties amounted in the thousands, nearly eradicating the Sorcerer race. Until an alliance between the Elves and the few remaining sorcerers. Together they ultimately annihilated and enslaved the Elder night descents. Imprisoning them within a chamber made ancient Incantations of the Sorcerers and the pure fire of the Dragons. Deep within “The Lost” guarded by two Elder Dragons.
 

Aura

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Its short, but worded well
 

~Dream~

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Seems interesting. O.O
 

Synister.

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Sounds really good :D +rep
 

Tsuki

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I think it's a good idea for a story... imo the main character should be from the enslaved group.
 
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