Poem: Mother

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Hi this is my poem of the day. Feel free to comment change is always welcome is how we learn.

Mother

Mother mother oh mother for nine months we were strangers but you cared and loved me like no other.

Mother mother oh mother the sleepless nights that I caused you've pardoned morning after morning without a sigh.

Mother mother oh mother I did hate out of misunderstanding because of your protection and judgment.

Mother mother oh mother you have become both a friend and a foe but through it all you remained true.

Mother mother oh mother how I wish I could take back all those bitter and twisted words that ever uttered from lips.

Mother mother oh mother if only I had the courage to tell you the truth that I always and will Love You Mother.
 

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Nice, but a little too repetitive.
 

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Nice, but a little too repetitive.

Its the Use of the Literary Device Repetition, But i Agree, it is overused.
 

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Nice Poem By the way!!
 

Yusuke Urameshi

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I thought this was going to be funny.
 
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