Omar Ares Bane a.k.a Razor (rewrite)

[AntiHero]

Biography

Basic Information

Name: Omar Bane
Nickname: Razor
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Clan:
History: Omar is his parent’s eldest son and child. His father died his when he was seven, making him the man of the house. His mother could nt go on missions, and therefore can’t take care of her for kids. Omar always extremely busy and almost never has time for himself. How he manages to go to train and go on missions is beyond his mother’s comprehension. Though Omar does all things for his family he resents them because he never got to have a childhood of his own. Omar’s resentment for his family has manifested itself into what Omar likes to call, Jashin (Demon of the Heart).
After graduating the Omar begain training inorder to find the one responible for his fathers death. He choose to leave his birth place and everything he holds dear to become a on a quest for revenge. For year rumors and wispers of his fathers killer sent him to many lands over the years. Now he is making his way home...

 

[Igneel]

add some pics!!!!!

 

[Korra.]

You Shuld Use The Creator Your Own naruto Character On Deviart

 

[Caliburn]

I would really appreciate if you actually would bother reading the rules.

1) Follow the template, you left things completely out and put other things in it -_- Every single title has to be in there. You removed looks and even your history and then add something like battle styles.

2) Remove the clan, you can't have a custom clan unless you're an official sage and your clan got approved.

3) Remove all your specialties. You haven't had any training so how is it possible that have specialties?

4) Move those fighting styles to the "other" section and edit them. Something like an "ultimate skill" has to be submitted in the CJ thread.

5) You're a genin, those can only learn up to max 1 element, so why are you saying you know fire and wind? You can only place the first element you want to learn in your first bio.

 

[AntiHero]

I would really appreciate if you actually would bother reading the rules.

1) Follow the template, you left things completely out and put other things in it -_- Every single title has to be in there. You removed looks and even your history and then add something like battle styles.

2) Remove the clan, you can't have a custom clan unless you're an official sage and your clan got approved.

3) Remove all your specialties. You haven't had any training so how is it possible that have specialties?

4) Move those fighting styles to the "other" section and edit them. Something like an "ultimate skill" has to be submitted in the CJ thread.

5) You're a genin, those can only learn up to max 1 element, so why are you saying you know fire and wind? You can only place the first element you want to learn in your first bio.

Thank you and will do...

 

[-Yard-]

I think you have to be born in konoha

 

[AntiHero]

Really? Awe man...

 

[-Yard-]

Really? Awe man...

That's why you have history, explain how he got to Kirigakure.
Just don't say "went to kirigakure to find the one who killed his parents" or something that includes revenge..it's allowed but overly used ~_~

 

[Caliburn]

Remove those D-rank ninjutsu, you only get the E-ranks by default and the Body Flicker is forbidden.

 

[AntiHero]

Remove those D-rank ninjutsu, you only get the E-ranks by default and the Body Flicker is forbidden.

Done and done check it out plz... Needs approvalxd

 

[Scorps]

I'd follow the template provided in here

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by nexus. It's the most easiest way to make a decent bio without forgetting anything.

Also, the whole "fighting style thing" should go. Without training you can't assume nothing about your fighting style.

Check out approved bios to see what you should do, if that helps.

 

[Scorps]

Dude...listen to what all people are saying to you! Go look at other bios...yours is incomplete... and doesn't obey to the template for a bio...

 

[Dean Kaguya]

This thing ain't complete

 

[Caliburn]

Done and done check it out plz... Needs approvalxd

There's barely anything left ._.

 

[Dean Kaguya]

I agree with Cali. U should follow the template and u can look at others for reference.

 

[AntiHero]

I deleted the bio's info by accident... Im just goonna make a new 1 following the templet...

 

[Dean Kaguya]

Gud to know

 

[Taiketsu Yagami]

I would really appreciate if you actually would bother reading the rules.

1) Follow the template, you left things completely out and put other things in it -_- Every single title has to be in there. You removed looks and even your history and then add something like battle styles.

2) Remove the clan, you can't have a custom clan unless you're an official sage and your clan got approved.

3) Remove all your specialties. You haven't had any training so how is it possible that have specialties?

4) Move those fighting styles to the "other" section and edit them. Something like an "ultimate skill" has to be submitted in the CJ thread.

5) You're a genin, those can only learn up to max 1 element, so why are you saying you know fire and wind? You can only place the first element you want to learn in your first bio.

xd He's Bugs Bunny now