Nothing Is What It Seems Chapter 3

[Firesword]

Awesome! I love it!! <33

 

[Seffy]

Awesome! I love it!! <33

ty

 

[Zombie]

Ty and I'm honored that my ff has impressed you. I hope my chapters can continue to follow the same path it's on

Good work is always deserving of praise and recognition. It's clear that you proof read your work and put thought and dedication behind it. Unlike other FF writers on this site, who merely receive recognition for their fame, even when their writing is absolutely terrible.

Not that I'm going to call anybody out (despite how much I want to).

 

[Seffy]

Good work is always deserving of praise and recognition. It's clear that you proof read your work and put thought and dedication behind it. Unlike other FF writers on this site, who merely receive recognition for their fame, even when their writing is absolutely terrible.

Not that I'm going to call anybody out (despite how much I want to).

I know what you mean

Writing is my passion, so I take it very seriously. I do proof read it mutiple times so I can look for errors and also see how I can make what I have better. My creative writing class I took in high school beat that into me xd lol I'm a little ocd when it comes to my writting works in general

 

[AmaterasuBeastMode]

wow. This story keeps getting better and better, as does, your story telling... I am so amped to read the next chapter... I agree w/ everyone else. Encore!

 

[Seffy]

wow. This story keeps getting better and better, as does, your story telling... I am so amped to read the next chapter... I agree w/ everyone else. Encore!

:hug: ty for the support

 

[iamkawaii08]

wow!! I love this chapter!! see and you're telling me it's not that great.. well if it isn't I don't know what is..:worshippy: I am your slave now.. lol.. but really the fight scene is epic.. but arggh I feel sorry for his meanie dad..

 

[Seffy]

wow!! I love this chapter!! see and you're telling me it's not that great.. well if it isn't I don't know what is..:worshippy: I am your slave now.. lol.. but really the fight scene is epic.. but arggh I feel sorry for his meanie dad..

lol yes I wanted to sway people to feel some remorse for him, but more on that situation is revealed in the next one lol ty at first i thought it was a little sinster, but you have to have those moments in a story, or else it's boring :/

 

[Reborn]

You sounded so modest when you first spoke to me about your Fanfics. Instead of thanking me for reading your Fanfictions, I should be asking you for advice, as I need it.

I loved this chapter, instincitve will to live....lol, my guess on the previous chapter was well...wrong lolxd. However I knew I liked Gabriel's father for a reason. That experience he had in the last chapter, I felt motivated his instinctive will to live, giving him the ability to defeat this powerful man who had taken out his father...it was due to fear (that's what it appeared to be) and the desire to live, which I feel is a strong theme in your story after this point? I don't know, I have to keep reading.

 

[Seffy]

You sounded so modest when you first spoke to me about your Fanfics. Instead of thanking me for reading your Fanfictions, I should be asking you for advice, as I need it.

I loved this chapter, instincitve will to live....lol, my guess on the previous chapter was well...wrong lolxd. However I knew I liked Gabriel's father for a reason. That experience he had in the last chapter, I felt motivated his instinctive will to live, giving him the ability to defeat this powerful man who had taken out his father...it was due to fear (that's what it appeared to be) and the desire to live, which I feel is a strong theme in your story after this point? I don't know, I have to keep reading.

At first I was actually pretty shy about other people reading my works, but I think I have come accustomed to it. The will to live is a very powerful thing The father did play a big part though, I will just see if you can figure it out Yeah it gets better.

 

[Reborn]

At first I was actually pretty shy about other people reading my works, but I think I have come accustomed to it. The will to live is a very powerful thing The father did play a big part though, I will just see if you can figure it out Yeah it gets better.

I'm very outgoing with my work. I know this may sound desprate, but I crave the attention regardless of prais or criticism. So long as you do something to help me better my own work I don't care. I wouldn't even mind much if somebody was to write that my Fanfiction was horrible (if they justified it with showing me what they didn't like. I hate blanket statemtns with now back to them). I just want the attention so I can improve. I love to write too, almost as much as I love to study martial arts. When my sensei yells at me, I don't get that much upset.

I'm moving onto the next chapter, seeing as I have time. I thought they were going to be long but apparently they're not that long a read, it's fairly average...I could work on making shorter chapters, maybe that's why they're left un-read :shrug:

Great chapter

 

[Seffy]

I'm very outgoing with my work. I know this may sound desprate, but I crave the attention regardless of prais or criticism. So long as you do something to help me better my own work I don't care. I wouldn't even mind much if somebody was to write that my Fanfiction was horrible (if they justified it with showing me what they didn't like. I hate blanket statemtns with now back to them). I just want the attention so I can improve. I love to write too, almost as much as I love to study martial arts. When my sensei yells at me, I don't get that much upset.

I'm moving onto the next chapter, seeing as I have time. I thought they were going to be long but apparently they're not that long a read, it's fairly average...I could work on making shorter chapters, maybe that's why they're left un-read :shrug:

Great chapter

Idk if attention is the right word to use. As a writer myself, I feel the same, but I would use feed back instead of attention xd. Everyone who does writes, wants to know how they did, weither it's good or bad. Not everyone will agree with the works you do, but it's still nice to see how you can improve to try and expand your viewers, by appealing to most peoples likes and dislikes. If you do need help, I'm not great but I can offer you some advice, just ask lol I think I've told you that before :hug:

 

[Reborn]

Idk if attention is the right word to use. As a writer myself, I feel the same, but I would use feed back instead of attention xd. Everyone who does writes, wants to know how they did, weither it's good or bad. Not everyone will agree with the works you do, but it's still nice to see how you can improve to try and expand your viewers, by appealing to most peoples likes and dislikes. If you do need help, I'm not great but I can offer you some advice, just ask lol I think I've told you that before :hug:

Yeah, that's the word I was looking for, I out of it today...

Don't say you're not great, you're probably going to be one of the more famous Fanfiction writters on the base in a few months. I on the other hand have some ways to go. I do want advice, from anybody, it doesn't matter. I just need to know where I need to improve on. I'm not asking for others to always agree, I only put things out there for people to form opinions and so I can improve.

 

[Seffy]

Yeah, that's the word I was looking for, I out of it today...

Don't say you're not great, you're probably going to be one of the more famous Fanfiction writters on the base in a few months. I on the other hand have some ways to go. I do want advice, from anybody, it doesn't matter. I just need to know where I need to improve on. I'm not asking for others to always agree, I only put things out there for people to form opinions and so I can improve.

lol you have every right to be out of it today as well

I honestly don't even care if my works become famous on the base or not. My whole intention was just to write a good story for others to enjoy. While also taking notes on the feedback I obtain so that way when I do turn this ff into an actual novel, I can improve on things and going ino more detail if need be to improve it so it's novel ready There's always room for improvement, even the most talented of writers, still go back and edit their work and pick up on what needs to be improved. It takes a lot of time and dedication for that

 

[Roger23]

awesome

 

[Seffy]

awesome

lol ty for your continous support

 

[~Elixir~]

I'm amused.....
so much of action in this chapter...

Autocrat Dad dies....
Kid overcomes in dire situations...
Kills the killer....
takes revenge..
Discovers his powers &
makes his dad proud..?

Cant wait for another.

 

[Seffy]

I'm amused.....
so much of action in this chapter...

Autocrat Dad dies....
Kid overcomes in dire situations...
Kills the killer....
takes revenge..
Discovers his powers &
makes his dad proud..?

Cant wait for another.

lol ty xd

 

[SHARINGAN_USER UCHIHA_ITACHI]

lol Great fight.....seriously, i felt like reading manga..!!! xd
Nice efforts...!!

 

[Seffy]

lol Great fight.....seriously, i felt like reading manga..!!! xd
Nice efforts...!!

lol well ty glad you liked it!