new life in a new time chapter 5

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chapter 1:
chapter 2:
chapter 3:
chapter 4:

new life in a new time chapter 5
the three sanin together agin and about to do battle. jeraya and tsunade are side by side as well is naruto, on the other side theirs orochimaru and kabuto and both have a sinister smile. all five are talking untill naruto decides to join in.
Naruto: summining jutsu!!!!
as the fog covers everything you could see the figure of someone holding a staff and as the fog begins too clear yoo can see that the the man is tall and has a cloack on with the same markings as the sage of six paths was sed to have. this man also had on a orange jumo suit with black on the neck, choulders and split in the middle

?????: where am i? (he says to himself)

Jeraya: w-w-what in the world

Orochimaru: i-is this realy happening

the three sanin stand their with a suprised look.
Naruto: w-w-what!?!?!?! i was soposed to summen a giant toad not him!!!!
Jeraya dint even payed attention to narutos stuppidity he kept stairing at the strainger. as jeraya looked at the men he noticed that on his right hand he had a braiclet with the uzumaki crest on the braiclet at the top and on his left hand he had on a braiclet the uchiha crets hanging of the braice let.

Jeraya: theirs no doubt about it he's the sage of six paths.......

Orochimaru: if he truely is the sage of six paths then i wont stand a chance, im gonna have to find a way to escape
shizune comes by running and screaming

Shizune: tsunade-sama!!!! tsunade-sama!!!!!!

Orochimaru: hmmhaha heres my chance
orochimaru goes towerds shizune going for an attack wayell a sword is coming out of his mouth with tromandes speed that jeraya and tsunade couldnt stop him

Jeraya: wach out!!!!!

Tsunade: shizune!!!!!!
the sage raises his staff and slams it back down maicking an eckoing sound.
Shizune: ahhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!
before orochimaru could reach shizune a blue spiritual hand the same size as a human body poped out of the ground and protected shizune

Orochimaru: what?!?!?!?

Naruto: what the hell is going on( he sayes in his head)

New So6p: so you knew you dint stand a chance aginst me so you decide to attack some one untrained to do battle? (he sayes with a loud and calm voice) you should be achaimed because i know youre perent would be, o wait theyre dead sorry, sorry i forgot (he sayes with a small grin) hahaha

Orochimaru: how dare you?!?!?!

New so6p: no how dare you? ( he sayes with a calm voice) i will forgive you this time but if you ever do somthing this cowerdly i wil kill you, now get out of my sight
orochimaru and kabuto quikly leef. the sage slowly walks over to shizune.
New so6p: are you alright

Shizune: yes im alright

New so6p: good now that thats delt with ill be on my way

Naruto: hey mister who are you! were are you going!!!

Jeraya: naruto shut up!!
the sage slowly turns around to face naruto

New so6p: to be onest i dont know were to go as for my name i rather not say it right now

Naruto: oh ok

Tsunade: why dont you come with us to the hiden leaf vilige?

Naruto: yea then you could teach me some moves, what you did back their was awsome

New so6p: i really dont feel like talking right now im feeling light headed, enyways ill be on... my...... wa...
the sage faints and as he was about to fall down shizune catched him. the sage slowly closes his eyes until he blacked out
the scene slowly faides towerds 1 weak from now. the sage slowly wakes up, as he looks around he notices hes in the hospetal and sees shizune next to his bed in a chaire asleep.

New so6p: hey... hey!.. wake up!!!
shizune slowly wakes up and wipes her eyes and sees the sage is right in front of her, she quikly stands up and steps back then blushes

New so6p: whats wrong, are you ok ( he sayes with a cool voice )

Shizune: nothing ( she sayes fast and loud)

New so6p: ok

New so6p: well then ill be on my way
The sage gets up grabs his cloak and staff

Shizune: you should stay longer you're in no condition to leer now

New so6p: it doesn't mater if I am or not. I must finish my mission here

Shizune: so.... You really are the sage of six paths

New so6p: yes I am

Shizune: so what are you doing here

New so6p: I'm on a mission, that's all I can say for now

Shizune: oh

New so6p: I'm also looking for people to join me on my jurny, and I was thinking about taking naruto uzumaki with me.

Shizune: why him

New so6p: I have many reasons but for now ill go check on him to see if he'll come with me, we're is he by the way

Shizune: he's in sasukes room

New so6p: I see,

The sage leefs the room and goes to we're naruto is. Naruto sees Sakura hugging sasuke and crying, naruto starts to feel depress but before he could leef the sage entires the room. Tsunade, kakashi, Sakura, sasuke, jeraya and shizune are in the room.

New so6p: naruto uzumaki!!!!! I have decided to take you as my student and partner on my mission, do you aksept
With an amazed face naruto stares at the sage

Jeraya: what!!!!

Tsunade: what!!!!

Kakashi:( in head: is he the sage of six paths)

Naruto: yes I accept, this is gonna be awesome

Sakura: are you the sage of six paths
the sage ignores sakura and walks towerds shizune
New so6p: eny ways, ah right!! shizune will you come with me to train as well?

sakura:(in head: did he just ignore me?)

tsunade: why do you want her?

New so6p: i need someone in my team to be a medical ninja and since she is one of the best i want to train her to be even grater.

Shizune: but im not one of the gratest, the greatest one here is tsunade-sama

New so6p: i understand that.... (with an eregant voice) thats why im gonna train you. i dont want just anyone i want people i can trust

Sasuke: you trust naruto and youre gonna train him? good luck with that

Naruto: why you....
the sage inturupts
New so6p: well it was between you and him..... so chouced the one with more talent

everyone: what?

Naruto: y-you think... i have talent?
as naruto begins to smile sasuke gets furius
New so6p: ok Enough talk. so shizune are you gonna come with me or not, i dont have time to wait im gonna have to recrut three more people for this as well

Shizune: b-but i-

Tsunade: dont worry ill alow you to go, i mean you will be given the oner to train with the sage of six paths and go on amission with him

Shizune: ok then ill go

New so6p: grait, now i shell begin with youre training...... naruto uzumaki

Naruto: im ready lets go

New so6p: ok then ill train you in the trainig area around here. naruto i sugest you say good by to youre friends

Naruto: why whe arnt even gonna leef

New so6p: we may not be leefing the villige but the trainig im gonna provide you might kill you if you dont sucsede

everyone: what?!?!?

New so6p: ok im tired of talkingif you two decide to come with me i will be waiting at the trainig grounds of team 7 (thinking: i still have to send a clone to recrute the other three members)
the sage vanishis in a yellow flash
Sakura: naruto are you sure youre up for this

Naruto: heheeh no worries i got this

Tsunade: how about you shizune are you ready

Shizune: this is a onece in a lifetime chance to train with him, i will try my best
the scene quickly chainges to the training filds, by this time everyone has heard the news about narutos new sensay and so everyone gathers to see naruto train as well as shizune

New so6p: so you two have decided to come huh

both: yes we did

New so6p: ok then i will start with you naruto uzumaki.... i will teach you three technices first the rasengan and razenchuriken and then..... im gonna show you how to control kuruma or as you know him....... the nine tails
its been at least three months since the training has began naruto is slyping in his house and the sage is slepping on a tree by the training erea. shizune walks up to the sage

Shizune: hmm hes asleep i gues i better leef
shuzune slowly turns around about to leef
New so6p: what is it you want

Shizune: oh sory did i wake you up?

New so6p: dont worry about it i was already awake before you came

Shizune: i thought you were asleep, if you werent asleep then what wer you doing?

New so6p: thinking.... thinking about the past

Shizune: i see, so what are you gonna do once youre done with youre mission

New so6p: onestly i hope i die in battle

Shizune: w-w-wat are you saying, what about youre friends? what about the girl you love?
the sage slowly looks up at the shining bright stars trying to hide his pained look
New so6p: my... friends betraid me long time ago and before i left..... i nearly killed them, as for the girl i love i have no one in mind and i dont think enyone has ever liked me

Shizune: that is not true, im sorry about yore friends but im sure theirs someone out their that must like you

New so6p: (smiles) thanks youre a grat persone shizune

Shizune: (blushing) t-thank you. you seem to be alone how about you come over for dinner in my house.

New so6p: (blushing) o-ok i guess
they both walk to shizune's house and talk on their way their until they arrived. naruto and shizune sit down in th kitchin table to eat
Shizune: you never did tell me youre name, will you tell me now

New so6p: i dont know

Shizune: what? you dont trust me?

New so6p: its not that its just that...

Shizune: so you dont trust me?

New so6p: ugh fine, if you stop bugging me ill tell you

Shizune: alright

New so6p: my name is naruto uzumaki...... im naruto from the future

Shizune: what???
all of a suden you could see a lot of shinobis geting tossed everywere and an anbuarives at shizune's house
anbu: shizune the hokage wants you at her office now, apperently three akatsuki members have invaided the leaf villige

Shizune: what?!?

older Naruto: so they finaly arived

Shizune: what are you talking about naruto!!!

older Naruto: the other three members of our team.......
some were else

?????: all mighty push!!!!
next chapter: young naruto uzumaki vs ????
sorry if their was eny errors, i was in a rush and wont be maiking any new chapters for a long time because ill be away from the base for a sertin time
 
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I don't mean to sound rude or anything, this is honest straightforward constructive criticism, but please proof read your work. Most modern browsers come with spell checks. If English isn't your first language, you can usually add an English dictionary to your browser as well. Especially if you're using firefox. When you see words with red squiggly lines under them, if you right click the word firefox will offer the correct spelling. While it is the internet and these are only anime forums, putting more effort into your writing will increase your credibility and make reading your work more enjoyable. I hope I'm not coming off as too scornful or anything. Good luck to your future writing endeavors.

You might also want to revisit on how certain characters act and talk.

Orochimaru: i-is this realy happening
Orochimaru wouldn't talk like that, ever. ;o

Edit: I should also add something about formatting. The more you accentuate certain things by formatting it with heavier font weights, italics and even bold can change the implementations of a single line or add significant amounts of emphasis. You can always do better. Continue to improve!
 
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I don't mean to sound rude or anything, this is honest straightforward constructive criticism, but please proof read your work. Most modern browsers come with spell checks. If English isn't your first language, you can usually add an English dictionary to your browser as well. Especially if you're using firefox. When you see words with red squiggly lines under them, if you right click the word firefox will offer the correct spelling. While it is the internet and these are only anime forums, putting more effort into your writing will increase your credibility and make reading your work more enjoyable. I hope I'm not coming off as too scornful or anything. Good luck to your future writing endeavors.

You might also want to revisit on how certain characters act and talk.



Orochimaru wouldn't talk like that, ever. ;o

Edit: I should also add something about formatting. The more you accentuate certain things by formatting it with heavier font weights, italics and even bold can change the implementations of a single line or add significant amounts of emphasis. You can always do better. Continue to improve!
alright thanks for tip bro
 

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Little proof reading will do the trick but I got to hand it to you are great at writing and imagining.....
I read all of them and now I very much curious about it ..
 

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Great Story. Too bad I'll have to wait to read the next chapter. Anyways, Keep up the good work!


I like how you add Shizune to the main story, she is never a main character. Or atleast that seems to happen in this chapter lol
 
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