Need Help with Lyrics to song

[NarutAwesome]

sup NB, so I'm working on another song and I need you guys help. I only finishd half of the song and I need advice. like is it too boring, too repeating, or too relaxed,. whatever you think would help me is welcoming.

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Foll- Foll- Follow Me...
Foll- Foll- Follow Me.-oh..
Ohhhhh, oh,oh,ohhhh
yeah, yeah
Follow Me Girl, Let’s Fly!
Ohhhhh, oh, oh, ohhhh
Foll-, Foll-
Follow Me Girl, Let’s Fly!

*beat drops as rap begins*

Let’s Go

Theres no other to compare u too
It’s like I can’t spell me without u
if yo love was a mystery
then you can call me scooby doo

you being beautiful is nothing new
got me stuck like we’re playing twister moves
if your love was a question
then you know I’ll always answer you

If I had 10 cent for every pretty girl
I guess I’ll only have 1 dime to pay
cause your smile is so divine
and like the sun you brighten my day

they said angels are from heaven
but I’m looking at one right now I’ll say
so if you grab my hand
and come with me
you can get pass these lonely days
hey girl!


Ohhhhh, oh,oh,ohhhh
yeah, yeah
Follow Me Girl, and Let’s Fly!
Ohhhhh, oh, oh, ohhhh
Follow Me Girl, Let’s Fly!
Ohhhhh, oh, oh, ohhhh
Follow Me Girl, Let’s Fly!

 

[Hipster Madara]

"then you can call me scooby doo"
Stopped reading.

 

[Kuroh]

"then you can call me scooby doo"
Stopped reading.

lol at this

 

[-Punk-]

lost me at fallow me girl xd

 

[SQY]

"then you can call me scooby doo"
Stopped reading.

lol at this

Double This.

 

[Amegakure Madoka Rikuto]

Lol It's not that bad guys. Just self expression. ^_^ What would help if you're making a song is a beat. Is there a beat to this?

 

[Yasuko Sayomi]

"Got me stuck like we're play Twister moves" is a no.

 

[markdabomb22]

Add some tee hee's and shamone's in there.......it always works

 

[Sasuke eats nards]

"then you can call me scooby doo"
Stopped reading.

we all know you don't know how to read. you're not fooling anyone.

 

[Mizutoki]

"then you can call me scooby doo"
Stopped reading.

Maybe if instead of Scooby Doo, "Mystery Machine" idk, it would sound less cheesy to me.



NarutAwesome: I read over it like a girl wrote it. It is Unoriginal, I'm sure you can admit to taking a few ideas.

 

[Valen]

Aw boy

I got a lecture about songwriting 2morrow at my school +_-

 

[King Of Sharingan]

I need a beat to know what im working with

 

[HiddenSound]

No, no, no. It needs to be more like this.

Spoiler

Just copy these guys and your... crush or whatever will be all over you