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Naruto's Fall Inside The Black
Chapter 1
Konoha's hero, Naruto, has just returned from training. After his most recent encounter with Sasuke during the Kage Summit and his confrontation with his mother, aswell as his mastering of the Nine Tails, his drive is more powerful than ever.
A long stressful day of training has left Naruto exhausted. Stumbling into Ichiraku Ramen, Naruto is greeted a hug by his recently acquired girlfriend, or shy bunny as Kakashi Sensei puts it, Hinata Hyuga.
Hinata: "Naruto-Kun! I'm glad you're back!"
Naruto: "Hinata-Chan, it's only been a day."
Hinata: "I k-know, but ever since...."
*Flashback*
(Pein looks down upon a captured and pinned down Naruto, as a metal rod slides down his arm into his hand, and goes to stab him, but Hinata jumps from the sunlit sky and gets inbetween them.)
Naruto: "W-why?"
Hinata: "Because.....I love you"
(Pein uses his overwhelming chakra to lift Hinata into the air and fiercely slams her down as Naruto looks on in horror. Pein then summons another rod and impales her spine.)
Naruto: "W-why?"
Hinata: "Because.....I love you"
*Flashback Fast forward*
(Pein uses his overwhelming chakra to lift Hinata into the air and fiercely slams her down as Naruto looks on in horror. Pein then summons another rod and impales her spine.)
Flashback End
Hinata: "I can't stand you being in so much pain anymore. When you leave, I'm afraid it will.....be the last time I'll see you."
Naruto: "As a ninja, we all take that risk. And as my girlfriend, you'll have to withstand me being gone. Like you, I have dreams too. So many things are going on now. I actually know who my parents are. I have a beautiful girlfriend. I'm stronger than ever! When I leave, I always return and that's a promise. Especially when it's to you."
(Hinata blushes as Naruto leans in and kisses her, thus causing much more blush to arise on her face, but it's accompanied by happiness.)
Hinata: "Do you r-really think I'm...beautiful?"
Naruto: "You better believe you are. Now, let's chow down on some ramen!"
Hinata: "Okay, Naruto-Kun."
(They both sit down while Naruto and Hinata grasp their hands together.)
Ayame: "Hey Naruto! Wow, you look like you've had a rough day. Who's this cute girl?"
Naruto: "This is my girlfriend, Hinata Hyuga."
(Hinata blushes as a huge smile grows on Ayame's face.)
Ayame: "Kakashi told me you had a girlfriend yesterday, but I just couldn't believe it!"
(Naruto's sighs as his face fills with sorrow.)
Naruto: "Thanks...alot."
Ayame: "Oh, Naruto. Cheer up! I'm happy for you. So, what'll it be?"
Naruto: "We'll have-"
Ayame: "Wait! I have the best idea! Dad! Let's prepare our special couples ramen!"
Teuchi: "Alright! Couple's ramen coming up!"
Ayame: "Hurry it up dad!"
Naruto: "Ichiraku Ramen....Gotta love it!"
(Hinata giggles at this while Naruto smiles at her)
As some experience happiness, some experience pain. Hidden, way beyond the outskirts of Amegakure, is the base of the last of the Uchiha.
Madara, in his mask resembling the Ten Tails, is sitting upon an old weapon fan shaped statue, watching Sasuke train with his white Zetsu clones. His eyes cling on to Sasuke when he is cut by one of the Zetsus, and which he is then overpowered by all twenty of them. Sasuke's eyes bleed as he activates a small portion of Susano'o to remove the clones from his body. Panting, he slowly stands up.
Sasuke: "Madara. Come down here."
(Madara jumps down to the ground, behind the battered Uchiha.)
Sasuke: "How do you expect me to fight every one of these clones if I can barely see?!"
Madara: "You didn't fight my clones. You used your Susano'o to quickly gain an advantage. Susano'o is an advanced and sacred Uchiha jutsu, but you're using it for training purposes because you aren't skilled enough to protect yourself in a training session."
Sasuke: "I am going blind! How can I possibly train when I cannot see?"
Madara: "You may resemble my brother, but you are nothing like him. He died fighting, and he to was blind. He didn't have the luxury of Susano'o to protect him, but yet he took down hundreds of ninja's before dying. You couldn't handle twenty Zetsu clones. And these clones were only at Grade C level. You are a Uchiha. Stop acting like you are so powerful when you are not. The only thing powerful about you is your ego. Act like a true Uchiha! Act like Izuna! Act like your father! Act like Itachi!"
Sasuke: "Don't you dare mention his name!"
Madara: "Why not? I am more credible than you are at this point in time. He would be ashamed of you if he was still alive, just like I am."
(Sasuke punches the wall, bursting a hole through it, as lightening runs down his arm during the aftermath.)
Sasuke: "I need.....more power."
Madara: "No, you need a new view on life. A new perspective."
Sasuke: "....I need....new eyes. Itachi's....."
Madara: "Sasuke, Zetsu has acquired Itachi's body. When the time is right, you'll receive your eyes, like when I received my new eye. My rinnegan....."
Sasuke: "Why not now?!"
Madara: "You aren't ready, mentally. Zetsu, keep training Sasuke while I go prepare for war."
Sasuke: "War? Already?"
Madara: "Not exactly. With our alliance with Kabuto, and with my possession of not only the seven tailed beasts, but of ten thousand Zetsu clones, this war is ours. Like you, I also lust for power. Some weapons need to be replaced and repaired. I need to check on one of my weapons. When I return, and if Sasuke's dead, Zetsu, you know what to do with the body, I assume?"
Zetsu: (Black Half): "Of course."
(Madara teleports away while Sasuke's eyes continue to bleed as he stares at the thirty Zetsu clones and counting forming in front of him.)
As darkness brews, light begins anew. Naruto and Hinata, holding hands, are walking towards Hinata's home, when Naruto suddenly stops in his tracks and tears begin to form on his face.
Hinata: "Naruto-Kun!! Are you okay?"
Naruto: "Yeah...., but I....sometimes I have these dreams and a couple minutes ago I drifted off and had another one....A nightmare."
Hinata: "Now that you mention it, you were quiet a couple minutes ago, but it was only for a s-second."
Naruto: "No way, It couldn't have been. It had to be atleast six or seven minutes."
Hinata: "Naruto-Kun, the way you're explaining this is like......like you're in a g-genjutsu."
Naruto: "Genjutsu? A genjutsu!? Who would cast one on me this time at night?"
(Naruto smiles and laughs, as Hinata looks on worried)
Naruto: "Don't worry about me! I'm fine! Now, tomorrow, what do you want to do? Go on a date?"
Hinata: "Yes, Naruto.....kun, but can we meet later on in the day? I have a mission I have to do for Kurenai Sensei. I'll be finished fast, but it's a couple hours from here."
Naruto: "Okay then! I'll see you tomorrow then Hinata-Chan!"
(Naruto and Hinata kiss passionately, but Hinata can't enjoy the moment due to her being worried about Naruto's well-being. Naruto waves goodbye and leaves, while Hinata looks on with saddened eyes.)
Later that night.....
Naruto tosses and turns in his bead, screaming at some points. His skin begins to turn red, marking the kyuubi's presence.
Inside Naruto's mind....
Kyuubi: "This is......him. Naruto......Wake up now!"
(The fox loudly growls as he receives no response)
Kyuubi: "My chakra can't disrupt this power of this jutsu. Genjutsu.....What is he witnessing?"
In Naruto's dream....
Naruto: "Stop it! Don't touch him!"
(Naruto's eyes are locked onto a figure who is stabbing his deceased Master, Jiraiya.)
Naruto: "Stop it!! NOW!!!!!"
(The figure turns around, but before it's revealed, Naruto see's something else. He watches on in horror as he sees his parents die again.)
Naruto: "Mom! Dad! No!!!! NO!!!!! ....No......"
(Naruto gets furious, but can't use his fox chakra.)
Naruto: "What is this....? Who's there?!"
(Naruto's sees the dark figure again, but this time he's staring into his eyes. One's a Sharingan, while one is a....rinnegan.)
Naruto: "WHAT ARE YOU?!"
(Light shines down onto the figure, revealing itself being Naruto himself)
Figure: "THE DARKNESS!
(Naruto screams with terror in his voice, waking himself up)
Naruto: "The darkness......darkness....the darkness....WHAT IS THE DARKNESS!"
(Naruto stares at his mirror, and thinks the words "You are the darkness")
Naruto: "I am.....not the darkness!!!!....Am I?"
Chapter End
*Please review. This is the start of my story. Sorry if it wasn't long enough. Please enjoy. Also, my sig is the story, so HINT HINT! xd
Also, this style is so weird to me. I've never written a serious Naruto story. I've written/writing JetZula and my Life In The Akatsuki series in a more comfortable format. This is similar, but I'll admit, it was hard.
Also, should I continue this or not? My JetZula is still under progress, as is my LITA series. This is just something I wanted to do freely.
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