Not bad at all my friend
I would have preferred the actual battle/attacks to be better highlighted, as in narrated instead of placed in "()" But other than that, it was interesting for sure. Kind of reminds me of my own FFs at times, while at others, something completely else. You nailed the soundtrack pretty good too as well, and the actual fighting was decent at times. I didn't give it a deep read, so it wouldn't be fair of me to judge it more so than this because of it. Hope that's okay.
