[Predictions] NARUTO MANGA 667: Are you ready?

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*Scene starts with Obito sealing the yin kyuubi , ichibi and hachibi chakra inside Naruto.*
Obito with determined eyes and speaking to himself," I was in horrible nightmare. This is the least i could do for you and my comrades, i'm grateful that i could save you Naruto".
Sakura looks surprised and speaks,"thanks obito for saving Naruto" with tears in her eyes...
Obito looks at sakura for a moment and remembers Rin would have done same for him(obito).
Obito with strong high note voice,"okay now i'll go to other dimension. Let naruto rest and you be with him".
When obito began to materilize Naruto suddenly catches his leg and utters slowly,"Obito, i cant rest now coz i have responsibilities to complete. Its just not my time to stay idle". Sakura looks down at naruto that he's conscious now but sakura wants to confirm if naruto's in 100%. She uses her medical chakra to heal naruto and requests Naruto to wait a bit.
/scene turns to Sasuke/
Sasuke Lying unconsciously and a dark image in shadows began reveal slowly.Karin gasps,"we have to hurry. We cant take any chances".
Orochimaru speculates," what is in the mind of that person?"
slowly that smoke reveals his legs which are bare... And his body which is whitish in colour.
Juugo, suigetsu, karin and orochimaru eyes opens wide open when they saw his face. He's no-other than Kabuto....
/scene switches to Madara battle ground/
Rikudo Madara: So another fool joined the groups of clowns, huh, what a shame!!
Gai (exclaims and with narrow eyes) : kakashi, Dont tell me, He's that wrecked up old hag.
Kakashi: well he's our enemy Gai. Are you ready?
Gai: Always ready and young enough to show my shine kakashi!! :D, lets do it...
*Kakashi and Gai running towards Rikudo Madara in V-direction, Minato in the middle and Gaara backing up everyone with his sands.... Scene ends with Madara face in anger and gushing out his auras...*.
**The end**
 

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you missed the forbidden technique that Gai is promised to use!
 

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So so, not good enough
 

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I'm gonna be Honest and say this was horrible
 

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Thanks for your advice... I know this prediction is not good.... Been a long time i've not posted any predictions.... :)
 

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This is very poor. No offense.
 

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This is very poor. No offense.

Seconded.

OT: You need to make it longer. Characterization was good, but you need to describe more scenes, and write more action...
 

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felt very rushed

room for improvement, would like to see a second stab at it
 

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This is a nice prediction. So, I will tell you your mistake. What you have written was 4 pages because it contained too little content. Try to add more content and I believe it will be awesome. =D
 

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Thanks alot for all of you for kind advises and infos.. :)
 
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