[Predictions] Naruto Manga 661 Prediction

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Hey guys, this is my first prediction so take it easy on me please. I worked hard on this so tell me what you think=D

Naruto Manga 661 - The Final Stand

*Naruto is falling down and Gaara's sand catches him*

Gaara- Naruto!!! Are you all right??

Naruto's friends- Naruto!!!

*Meanwhile in Naruto's subconscious, Naruto is in a white room alone as he hears his friends calling him*

Naruto- What is this.... this feeling... Where am I?... What does this all mean? Who is calling my name??

???- We have much to talk about young Uzumaki

Naruto- *Turns around* You're.....!!

*Back to the battlefield*

Gaara- Tsunade and Sakura. Get over here now

*Tsuande and Sakura start bolting towards Naruto*

Gaara- *Crying* How could I let this happen? You saved me but I can't save you.

*Gaara thinking* I'll make it up to you. I've got to do what Kurama said and fast... but I need time.

*Tsunade starts healing Naruto*

Sakura- Tsunade-sama???

Tsuande- It's no use... He's not going to make it

Sakura- *Crying* No... It's impossible. You haven't even become Hokage yet. You always told me.... you never go back on your word... because that's your way of the ninja

*All of Naruto's friends jump in and surround his body*

Lee- *Crying* Naruto, why did it have to happen this way?

Madara- Heh heh, foolish boy. One down one to go. He was stupid to challenge my authority. It's over for him.

*Lee looks at Madara enraged*

Lee- You bastard. I'll end it here and now.

*Lee gets into his stance and starts loading chakra. Suddenly, Kakashi and Guy appear out of nowhere*

Madara- Hmm? *Looks at Kakashi* I thought that one was dealing with Obito.

Lee- Guy sensei, Kakashi sensei, what are you doing here? I thought you were dealing with the masked man.

Kakashi- Minato sensei is handling it.

Guy- Lee, you don't need to waste your life. Let me be the one to use THAT JUTSU

Kakashi- Guy, you don't plan on....

Guy- Kakashi, I'm sorry but it looks like our rival challenges come to an end today.

Tsunade- What is he planning on doing?

Kakashi- Just watch. Gaara! Don't you need more time to do something. Well here's your chance

Gaara- *Wipes away tears* Right. I'll get right on it

Guy- *Speaking to Shinobi Force* We have let this man take the ones that we love for far too long. Do not let their sacrifices be in vain. Now are you with me???

Shinobi Force- YEAH!!!!

Guy- Good, now let's end this war. Madara your time has come!!!

*Guy gets in his stance and loads up chakra. A huge explosion erupts and the floor starts shaking. You see Guy with a yellow aura surrounding him*

Guy- You will now see the full power of youth!!! The Power of the Handsome Blue Beast of the Leaf! Eighth Gate of Death: OPEN!!!

NEXT TIME ON NARUTO: The Final Revelation: The Gate of Death
 

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It was a hit and miss kind of, considering it's your first prediction.

Next time, try making it longer, and add more subtext rather than dialouge, people want action, not talking.

But other than that, it was good.
Thanks for the constructive criticism

Pretty good for a first time. I kinda know why there is no action but people don't like it. Overall good job.
Thanks for the feedback
 

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Good job capturing the personalities of the people. It was a good read. There's only one thing that I don't get. Why suddenly center things around Lee and Guy? Of all the people on the battle field, I think Sasuke, Minato or Gaara would take center stage in the battle department right now. Sakura and Hinata would take the center stage in the emotions department. Other than that, good job.
 
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