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It was a nice read.
But you stretched it too long this time.
I don't know why you gave Senjuu Sage mode to Tobirama. He did nothing using it. If you used it for Tobirama to hold the seal then it proves that Hiruzen > Sage mode Tobirama.
Last three pages were totally not required.
Kakashi and Obito's dialogues were too much for their characters.
Other than that, I can't say anything bro![]()
I really like to read your honest and detailed feedback which conatains criticism as well. It help me improve on my mistakes or improve even further some aspects.
Well You didn't list too much, so that mean this predicitons is quite good and well constucted, that what I am getting from your feedback, am I right ?
Thank you very much my dear friend
Now I waiting for your prediction :hooray: don't dissapoint me =D