Naruto Fan fic: The True Shinobi Part 1

milesmccray

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Any feed back will be highly considered! A new chapter should be out every Friday or Saturday (Or before).
Chapters-
Chapter1-
Chapter 2 -
Part 1 Background
Main characters: Takahiro (Me), Shiori (Friend (F) ), Yori (Friend (M) )
Akatsuki (Group).
Backgrounds:
Takahiro- A young brave boy about the age of 14. Has a sword attached to his back that can re direct his fire nature. The sword comes to the length of about 1 foot and 9 inches. He wishes to form his own organization and go by their rules.
Shiori- A young female around the age of 13, was trained in the medical arts by her sensei Sakura. She follows Takahiro as she owes him for saving her life from a stray ninja. She has very little fighting ability, but is very good infiltrator.
Katsuo- A friend of Takahiro, and is only 15 years old Yori is a Jouinin in the Hidden Leaf village. He and Takahiro have been best friends since their parents died in the 5th great shinobi war. He wants to help Takahiro make his wish become reality, and then rule alongside him.
 
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Yokima Yagame

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Seems good to me ,you could add a litlte bit more details ,but that's just my opinion :)
Rep + for the good work :)
 

Vayne

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not bad but it can be better
 

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K! im still a newbie at this. It was a pilot to see if anyone liked it so im going to make the 2nd chapter some time in the next couple days!
 

EL MAGNIFICO

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its good ....give more details to character ....
 
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