Naruto Chronicles: Legend of The Crimson Ninja Intro

[Chago]

Naruto Chronicles:
Legend of the crimson Ninja​

Proloduge:​

The story in which I am about to tell you take place in the era of the second hokage Tobirama Senju he created the systematic ranks in the world of ninja in which is still in effect to this day he created genin, Chunnin, special jounin, jounin, and kages he also created a special group of elite ninja called anbu black ops this ninja are in charge of special operations and missions but when the system was created there was another branch within the anbus a darker colder group called Seed..

Seed is a special group chosen at birth without a choice their existence are forever hidden in the shadows and forbidden to ever leak out, they are kept in a hidden under ground base where they train their entire life and at the age of 15 they are able to graduate from the basic bases to actual Seed shinobi where they take on more difficult missions and must work as a team of four.

The Seed members are organize in their own ranks and are lead by a trusted companion of the second hokage a man named “atlas” he places a special forbidden jutsu in each member of seed to exterminate their exisistance if they ever rebelled against the group and now I am about to tell you a story of the most recent trainees who are about to graduate and their story unfold as they become official seed shinobi..



Hope you enjoyed it stay tuned for my next updated which will be: Naruto Chronicles: Legend of the crimson ninja Chapter 1 Graduation part 1.

 

[SakiBombJutsu]

Very interesting, like the direction. Looking forward to what happens next xd

 

[Chago]

thanks for reading I am currently writing the next part hope you will like it

 

[Sir Aaron]

I would like to offer some constructive criticism, and it is necessary for all beginning fanfiction writers who want a continuous story. Your story idea is interesting, however, your English grammar needs some work. I know English isn't everybody's first language, but it's always good to improve if you want more readers. I'm not saying you wont get anybody interested, because that is clearly wrong, but "serious" (and I'm using this term loosely) fanfiction readers will probably leave after reading the first sentence.

Here are some examples:
"The story in which I am about to tell you takes place in the era of the second Hokage (always capitalized): (giving a name after a title) Tobirama Senju. The genius of the Senju was the first to develop the systemic ranks of the ninja world, and ended up creating the special group of elite ninja: ANBU. (last sentence was redundant and ran on giving already known information) This group is in charge of special operations and high-ranked-missions (specify) but when the Black Ops were (multiple people or group) created, there was another, darker, colder group erected named "Seed"..

Again, take that as you will. It was meant to help and lead you in the write (see what I did there? XD) direction.

I hope you enjoy writing, and if you have any questions, message me.

 

[Chago]

Thank you I will try and work on my writing skills I actually just started writing not to long ago any criticism whether it be positive and negative helps and English is my first language I just suck at writing it xD lol for now