[Predictions] naruto 633 pridiction The heroes

[Kishi Uzumaki]

(Chapter begins with where 5 kage are)
Page 1
(4kage are healed by katsuyu)
A:argh..
Onoki:damn that madara
Gaara:is naruto will be ok.
Mei:where's tsunade-sama
(they sits up after been healed)
Katsuyusad look)she's not good she's dying
Four of themshocked)what
Page 2
Tsunade:it's ok.go help.naruto
Mei:but
Tsunade:it's ok just go
(they stand up ready to go)
Tsunade:Gaara.tell naruto and sakura.i'm proud of them.
Gaarak.(after a long pause)I-i'll tell them.
A:i'm sorry tsunade,i failed as leader of shinobi alliance.
Tsunade:go.help your brother.
(they leave)
Page 3
Katsuyu:Look like i've to go now.i'm sorry tsunade-sama
Tsunaderemembers)all villager with naruto,sakura and shizune.(to herself)dan.i'm sorry i can't keep your promise. nawaki,jiraiya and orochimaru i will coming to meet you.
.......:no.tsunade.
.......:it's not time princess tsunade
Tsunaderochimaru.granpa.(thinks)is i'm really going to die.
Page 4
(scene changes to battlefield)
(naruto,sakura, sasuke on back to back)
(Scene shows juubi clones closing team 7)
Naruto:Wind cutting technique
Sasuke:chidori:spear
Sakura:chakra scalpel
Naruto:Ok.here we go.
(They begin cut through juubi clones)
Page 5
Inoshouts) let's go.i won't lose to sakura.
Shikamaru and choji:Alright
Hinata,shino,kiba:let's go
lee and tenten:this is for neji.
Guy:i'm coming too.power of youth!
(They fight with every thing they got sending clones of juubi flying everywhere)
Page 6
Hashirama:this generations is very good.you've raised good shinobi's monkey.isn't it tobirama.
Hiruzan:it's because of minato.he taught their sensei's very well.
Madara:hmph.enough waiting.
(astoriods crashing down 4 sun barrier in dozens)
Page 7
Hashirama:kages strengthen barrier.(you learn new jutsu aren't you madara)
Madara:youre good not good enough.compared to me.
Hashirama:such arrogence infront of me.
(more big ones coming crashing barrier shatters)
hashi,tobi and hiruzan:shit.
Page 8
Minato:I'll send them all.(i must protect naruto and his friends)
(warps them all away)
(few crashes to the sea.others around the battlefield)
Sakura:wow.your father is great too.naruto.
Sasuke:hah.(he's his father.no doubt naruto looks lot like him)
Naruto:Yeah.are you ready.sasuke and sakura.
page 9
(Juubi begins sending 100 of clones as the barrier shatters)
juubiwooh(trying to break free)
Hinata:i can't let neji's
(begins fighting ten clones alone using Hakke 128 palms but big one try to stab her)
Naruto:i can't make it in time.
page 10
Sasuke:chidori(stabs juubi clone )Hinata right.where your brother.
Hinata:H-he's dead.
Sasukethinking)How in the world that happened.he was powerful as me.(remembers him in chunin exams)
Page 11
sasukelooks at hinata who's sad and says)i understand How you feel.i lost my brother too.
but we can't be sad we have to carry their will.
kiba :Are you talking that traitor itachi.neji was nothing like That.
Sasuke:how dare you talk about him like that.(he walk towards kiba)
akamaru:grrr
Narutocome infront of kiba protecting him)i told you i want let you hurt any of them.
Hinata:naruto-kun
page 12
Sakura:hey.calm down you guys.we're on same side.
Sasuke:alright.tell him not insult itachi or he gonna pay for it.
Kiba:do you think i'm afraid of you.
Naruto:Shut up.kiba!don't talk bout things you don't know.
edo kages:are they fighting.
minato:my son will take care of that.first you take care of madara.second,third and me
take care of juubi for while you return.
page 13
Madara:you're underestimating me and juubi.hashiramma.....h.(where's this obito)
(hashi and madara go distance away from other ready to fight)
Minato :let's go.
tobirama:yeah.
Hiruzan:i'm ready.
(they ready themself to face juubi)
Page 14
(they talk while fighting juubi clones)
Kiba:it's the truth.
Naruto:No.he did that things to protect village and sasuke(throw a clone with a chakra arm)
Sakura:naruto!(remembers)naruto:i'll tell you when times right.is that what you were hiding.
Rest of konaha 11:what?
Naruto:he did that to protect village and sasuke.(remembers his promise to itachi)
Page 15
Sasuke:come on tell them.
Naruto:i can't.
Sasuke:you can't do that after what he did for the village.
naruto:i promised him.i won't tell the whole truth to anyone.
Sasukeremembers what itachi said)Itachi:i'm helping naruto.
Ok.if thats what he wanted.(cuts through one clone)
Page 16
Sakuralooks at naruto smiling after punching a clone)(in her mind)thank you.naruto.

Narutosmiles looking at sakura who's happy)let's finish them all.
Konaha 11:yeah.
Karin:sorry.i'm late sasuke.i had to drag him too.(punches suigetsu)
suigetsu:i told you i can't come here.( karin kicks him in the face)
page 17
Sakura:you're that girl.what are you doing with sasuke?
karin :can't help it.
Naruto:are you a uzumaki.you have a beautiful red hair.
Hinata:huh.
sakuraangry)idiot.what are you saying time like this.
Narutoscared)No.i mean i wanted a someone as family.a sister i guess.(i must make her jealous if i want to win her love )
page 18
Sasuke:you guys are still acting like kids.we have to finish these Clones first.
Sakura:he's an idiot too.
sasuke:did you say something.
Naruto:hehe.
Sakura:no.nothing.(thinks)sometimes naruto is better than him.
Obitowarps in)having fun sasuke.
Sasuke:who are you.
Obito:i'm no one.

The end.
(where is kakashi.what happened to him.)
(next time colour poster of konaha 12)

 

[Zuru]

Some of this was a little weird. For example, Sasuke saying Neji was as strong as him, and Naruto talking of Karin being a sister of his. Overall I thought it was pretty decent. I'd give it a 3/5. Keep trying though, you'll only get better.

Advice: Also, i'd try to make sure everything is spelled correctly, and the grammar is good. People tend to become uninterested when they cannot understand it. =D

 

[FaHaD 5212]

Great Prediction

 

[Black Literati]

loved the intro, except kages wouldn't leave tsunade so readily. Had a few errors here and there. However, it had a lot of action, dialogue and progression. I give it a 4/5.

 

[Apurv Pratap]

Apart from the grammar, really nice

 

[dirklyn]

(Chapter begins with where 5 kage are)
Page 1
(4kage are healed by katsuyu)
A:argh..
Onoki:damn that madara
Gaara:is naruto will be ok.
Mei:where's tsunade-sama
(they sits up after been healed)
Katsuyusad look)she's not good she's dying
Four of themshocked)what
Page 2
Tsunade:it's ok.go help.naruto
Mei:but
Tsunade:it's ok just go
(they stand up ready to go)
Tsunade:Gaara.tell naruto and sakura.i'm proud of them.
Gaarak.(after a long pause)I-i'll tell them.
(they leave)
Page 3
Katsuyu:Look like i've to go now.i'm sorry tsunade-sama
Tsunaderemembers)all villager with naruto,sakura and shizune.(to herself)dan.i'm sorry i can't keep your promise.
nawaki,jiraiya and orochimaru i will coming to meet you.
.......:no.tsunade.
.......:it's not time princess tsunade
Page 4
(scene changes to battlefield)
(naruto,sakura and sasuke on back to back)
(Scene shows juubi clones closing team 7)
Naruto:Wind cutting technique
Sasuke:chidori:spear
Sakura:chakra scalpel
Naruto:Ok.here we go.
(They begin cut through juubi clones)
Page 5
Inoshouts) let's go.i won't loose sakura.
Shikamaru and choji:Alright
Hinata,shino,kiba:let's go
lee and tenten:this is for neji.
Guy:i'm coming too.power of youth!
(They fight with every thing they got sending clones of juubi flying everywhere)
Page 6
Hashirama:this generations is very good.you've raised good shinobi's monkey.isn't it toborama.
Hiruzan:it's because of minato.he taught their sensei's very well.
Madara:hmph.enough waiting.
(astoriods crashing down 4 sun barrier in dozens)
Page 7
Hashirama:kages strengthen barrier.(you learn new jutsu aren't you madara)
Madara:youre good not good enough.compared to me.
Hashirama:such arrogence infront of me.
(more big ones coming crashing barrier shatters)
hashi,tobi and hiruzan:shit.
Page 8
Minato:I'll send them all.(i must protect naruto and his friends)
(warps them all away)
(few crashes to the sea.others around the battlefield)
Sakura:wow.your father is great too.naruto.
Sasuke:hah.(he's his father.no doubt naruto looks lot like him)
Naruto:Yeah.are you ready.sasuke and sakura.
page 9
(Juubi begins sending 100 of clones as the barrier shatters)
juubiwooh(trying to break free)
Hinata:I've to make it for neji nii-san
(begins fighting ten clones alone using Hakke 128 palms but big one try to stab her)
Naruto:i can't make it in time.
page 10
Sasuke:chidori(electricute It)Hinata right.where your brother.
Hinata:H-he's dead.
Sasukethinking)How in the world that happened.he was powerful as me.(remembers him in chunin exams)
Page 11
sasukelooks at hinata who's sad and says)i understand How you feel.i lost my brother too.
but we can't be sad we have to carry their will.
kiba :Are you talking that traitor itachi.neji was nothing like That.
Sasuke:how dare you talk about him like that.(he walk towards kiba)
akamaru:grrr
Narutocome infront of kiba protecting him)i told you i want let you hurt any of them.
Hinata:naruto-kun
page 12
Sakura:hey.calm down you guys.we're on same side.
Sasuke:alright.tell him not insult itachi or he gonna pay for it.
Kiba:do you think i'm afraid of you.
Naruto:Shut up.kiba!don't talk bout things you don't know.
edo kages:are they fighting.
minato:my son will take care of that.first you take care of madara.second,me and third
take care of juubi for while you return.
page 13
Madara:you're underestimating me and juubi(where's this obito)
(hashi and madara go distance away from other ready to fight)
Minato :let's go.
tobirama:yeah.
Hiruzan:i'm ready.
(they ready themself to face juubi)
Page 14
(they talk while fighting juubi clones)
Kiba:it's the truth.
Naruto:No.he did that things to protect village and sasuke(throw a clone with a chakra arm)
Sakura:naruto!(remembers)naruto:i'll tell you when times right.is that what you were hiding.
Rest of konaha 11:what?
Naruto:he did that to protect village and sasuke.(remembers his promise to itachi)
Page 15
Sasuke:come on tell them.
Naruto:i can't.
Sasuke:you can't do that after what he did for the village.
naruto:i promised him.i won't tell the whole truth to anyone.
Sasukeremembers what itachi said)Itachi:i'm helping naruto.
Ok.if thats what he wanted.(cuts through one clone)
Page 16
Sakuralooks at naruto smiling after punching a clone)(in her mind)thankyou.naruto!
Narutosmiles looking at sakura who's happy)let's finish them all.
Konaha 11:yeah.
Karin:sorry.i'm late sasuke.i had to drag him too.(punches suigetsu)
suigetsu:i told you i can't come here.( karin kicks him in the face)awh.
page 17
Sakura:you're that girl.what are you doing with sasuke?
karin :can't help it.
Naruto:are you a uzumaki.you have a beautiful red hair.
Hinata:huh.
sakuraangry)idiot.what are you saying time like this.
Narutoscared)No.i mean i wanted a someone as family.a sister i guess.
page 18
Sasuke:you guys are still acting like kids.we have to finish these Clones first.
Sakura:he's an idiot too.
sasuke:did you say something.
Naruto:hehe.
Sakura:no.nothing.(thinks)sometimes naruto is better than him.
Obitowarps in)having fun sasuke.
Sasuke:who are you.
Obito:i'm no one.

The end.
(where is kakashi.what happened to him.)
(next time colour poster of konaha 12)

hey!!! this is cool

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Thanks for the advice.zuru.

"Honest criticism is the hardest to take specially when it is from an stranger"