NARUTOS Rinnegan
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My Topic sentences
Ok, so first I would like to say that i know that I've only been asking help for stuff not Naruto related, but this is the only place i know where everyone will give a quick feedback and that everyone here is smart. And if none of you noticed that's great.
Ok so to my point of makinf this thread.
My teacher said that my topic sentences are all observations. she wants me to change them so that they are not. I don't know how to do this so I need help.
These are my topic sentences for my paragraphs
1. Willy Loman has set an expectation for himself to be successful and well liked.
2. Another thing Willy has set for himself is to be admired by his two sons.
3. Willy tries to achieve the American Dream despite his age and condition.
You can either help me on theses sentences or give me an example of another pne.
Thank you in advance for helping
Ok, so first I would like to say that i know that I've only been asking help for stuff not Naruto related, but this is the only place i know where everyone will give a quick feedback and that everyone here is smart. And if none of you noticed that's great.
Ok so to my point of makinf this thread.
My teacher said that my topic sentences are all observations. she wants me to change them so that they are not. I don't know how to do this so I need help.
These are my topic sentences for my paragraphs
1. Willy Loman has set an expectation for himself to be successful and well liked.
2. Another thing Willy has set for himself is to be admired by his two sons.
3. Willy tries to achieve the American Dream despite his age and condition.
You can either help me on theses sentences or give me an example of another pne.
Thank you in advance for helping
