[Other] My Revolution

[Xlad]

Another well done poem. The last part somewhat doesn't flow as well. But maybe that's just me. I did enjoy how short it was, yet it convey meanings. I also like the use of metaphor within these lines:

Years have passed, the moment came, I killed my own brother.
Extinguished his flame.

On his deathbed he opened my eyes,
I realized we were nothing,
But victims of lies.

 

[Hori]

Nice poem... I should make you write my English literature paper

 

[Dãrth1]

This is a nice poem

 

[Complex]

Nice work

 

[-ahhimane-]

this is purely superb.

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

It's a excellent poem man !

 

[Waindo]

Wow guys...THANX!!!
I can't believe everyone thinks it's amazing...I...I almost teared up. Thank you for amazing feedbacks and keep em comin'.

@Hori

And I'm not even Englishman/American...XD

 

[Jewjitsu]

I love it! Good job m8.

 

[Waindo]

Thanks Jew!

 

[guts2nevergiveup]

Man... You're good at this haha, very nice poem

 

[Erzo]

''Hooray Waindo!''

This is actually pretty good though, nice job bro c:

 

[Waindo]

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[Wanheda]

Those metaphoric lines o_____o
One of the best poems I have read, hands down.

 

[Tsuki]

I like it, great job! Please inform me if you post more poems o_o

 

[Waindo]

Thanks you two!

 

[Jin]

Great job mate, I really liked it =D

 

[Never]

As much as I hate Sasuke now, this was really great, nice work.

 

[Vega]

Superb poem as always Waindo!
Your emanation of Sasuke is spot-on and precise; a job well done

 

[Waindo]

Thanks guys!

 

[Trúth]

I would be snapping right now if I heard this out loud. Pretty good poem, very fitting too.

My thoughts exactly. Nice job!