My FIRST FC!

Hikari Uchiha Senju

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The Ray Of Sun Ch.I

Freezing Night

It was a cold day and Tsunade was sitting near the window dirnking hot chocholate.As she wached the snowflakes slowly falling she felt a strange hit in her stomach.She laughed and her face got a happy/soft face...
Tsunade: "Wow,she's a little rebel,isen't she,Satoshi?"
Satoshi was her boyfirend,first one after Dan that she loved,but it was a secret relationship...her familly seemed to hete him...
Satoshi was a fair skin,medium height man with long,bushy,black hair.He was calm and nice to everyone.

Satoshi: "Haha,she seems to have your character" he said wits a light smile on his face.As the day passed and they went to bed Tsunade all of a sudden went pale. "What's wrong?" "We need to hurry..." was all she could say.
A fter nearly 5h in the delivery room,the doctor came to Satoshi and congratulated him. "It's a verry healthy little girl" he said. As Satoshi came in the room he saw the two women he loved more than everything,his gf and his daughter.Tears came out of his eyes like waterfalls (lol). As he hugged them and took a gaze into his daughters olive colored eyes the frost came in through the window and the sun came up.
Tsunade: "...Asami..."
Satoshi: "...the morning beauty..."

After a week:​

Tsunade: "No,grandfather! That can't be true!!!!!!"
Hashirama: "I'm afraid it is.He seduced you just to take a revenge on me,you must leave him at once"
Tsunade: "....and I loved him so much...aghhhh,that M@#$$!@&!!! I WILL KILL HIM! AND HIS CHILD! TAKE IT!"
Mito: "But it's not Asami's folt that her fother is such a person..."
Tsunade "I don't care...just take her away from me..."
Mito took Asami to the other room and did some sort of sealing technique. It put baby into a slomber.
Mito: (to Tsunade) " She now has a special seal that's put her in a slomber.The seal will be broken at her birthday 11yrs from now....Go on,take her where you think she'll have the care she needs."
Tsunade: "Fine..."

16 years later:

Asami: " Dady,how come I have red hair and you and mommy both have black hair?"
Shingo Yamamoto (lol) : "You're special,that's why..."
Asami: "....ok,if you say so..."
Asami went to town and looked into shops windows,but then she hit someone...She turned and said rudly "Whatch where your going!" The boy she hit just told her "You shouldent be so rude you can get beaten up...youre werry small"
She was pissed (cuz he called her small) and tried to hit him,but he doged andgrabed her arm so she coulden't move. "Ha,you're really angry arent you?What's you're name kid?" "Asami if you really want to know...now tell me your name..."she grouled... "Itachi,nice to meet you" he said and let go of her hand.She was at the ege of going ROFL (cuz she found his name werry funny) but tried to stay calm outside,she smrked and said "Ok...but just wait till I get to Accademy! We'll se who is stronger than! ;) " "Haha,we'll see...."

1 year later:

"....and now youre guys are going to train with real ninjas! Outside everyone!" Asami was so thriled,she just coulden't wait. When they got out and saw a bunch of gennins everyone was given a pair. She was terrified that she was going to train with that weasel guy (Itachi)....Anyway,after 3h of traning (and arguing) she was tired and looked like she was standing in a huricane,than a boy came to her and told her she had beautiful hair. Asami tought he was making fun of her sho she slaped him and ran as fast as she could to the river,the place where she would go when she was sad.
The next day,she saw Itachi (who she now called Ita-kun cuz it irritates him) again....
Asami: "So,Ita-kun,what do you want?"
Itachi: "Nothing,I just diden't know I iretated you so much yesturday...."
Asami: " o_O (how did he know)...hmph,you irretated me? How funny! "
Itachi: "Well,if you warent irretated you would accsept a compliment my brother gave you...Wouldent you,Asami?"
Asami: "......I'm sorry,I diden't know he was your bro...."
Itachi: "...its ok..."
Asami: "You know,I dont apologise often...you guys better appreciate it!"
Itachi: "Hah,as hursh as always... :) " he started to leave and stopped for a sec..."Btw,if youre so angry that means you have a problem...tell it to someone,you'll feel better....bye now"
Asami: "Bye" she turned arownd and started walking home...
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Pleasce,tell me what do you think about this! Just don't be rude...Oh,and sorry for the grammar :S ^^
 
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I liked it. :D

Tsunade was a little out of character, but I like how you did Itachi. You do well with your descriptions and you have good word choice.

The real problem is your grammar, but you can fix that easily I'm sure. You should continue! :D
 
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