[Mystery] My Apartment: Chapter 4 Part 1

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My Apartment chapter 4 (Part 1)
"Just to Visit"


Characters:
Polly Levit
=a young 18 year old girl who lives alone after her parents go overseas. She has a long blonde hair. She likes mysteries and solving mysteries.


Stuart Wood
=a young 20 year old boy who lives alone next door.


Edward Strike
=A young 21 year old guy who lived in the room of Polly before.He always wear a black suit.


Mike Mooney
=the person who is following Edward and Polly. But the truth is, he is a policeman and also a private detective.


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Chapter 4 Part 1


Edward Strike and Mike Mooney left the restaurant to search for Polly.


(Inside the Car)

"Where are we going??" Mooney asked ,

"Where?? in Polly's apartment!" Edward responded,

"Huh?!? Are you fu***** kidding me?!? Why in ms Levit's apartment??" Mooney asked again,

"Because if she's not there then she is really in danger!" Edward Responded,

"Oooooh, ok. That's a good idea" Mooney said,

"Then start the car!!" Edward shouted,

"Oh ok ok." Mooney responded.


Then they arrived at the Polly's apartment.
Edward knock and knock the door hardly. Until,



"ms, Polly! ms. Polly!" Edward shouted,

*open the door*
"Whaaaat!?!" Polly shouted,

"Ooohh, you're here." Mooney and Edward said,

"What are you doing here??" Polly asked,

"Uhm, we thought your in --" Mooney said,

"We're just here checking my apartment again" Edward answered,

"Ooh, then come inside" Polly said,


Then, Edward and Mooney came inside and Polly asked,


"What do you like coffee or juice??"

"Just a coffee." Mooney said while smiling,

Edward looks at Mooney and then,

"Whaat??" Mooney whispered,

"How about you Edward?" Polly asked,

"Just a cup of coffee" Edward responded,


Polly went to the kitchen to prepare the coffee while in the living room,


"You, we're not here to have a coffee." Edward whispered,

"Then what are we doing here??" Mooney whispered,

"We're are here to guard Polly." Edward whispered,

"Oh, Is that so??" Mooney whispered,

*Edward facepalm*


Then Polly went out from the kitchen and offered the coffee,


"What are you guys whispering??" Polly asked,

"You heard us??" Mooney asked,

"Uhm, no but--"

"Naah, we're just whispering about your house because it's nice" Edward said while smiling,

"Ooh, I see. Btw, Edward, Who is he??" Polly asked,

"I'm a dete--"

"He's my friend" Edward responded,

"Ooh, I see." Polly said,


Mooney is drinking his coffee while Edward is looking at his surroundings and asked,


"Do you like the color of Yellow?"

"Uhm, Yeah." Polly said, "Why did you ask?" Polly continued,

"Oh, well, I just wonder because almost your things are yellow." Edward said,

"Ooh, Yeah, ever since I was a child, I always wore Yellow and almost my things are yellow too." Polly said,

"Since you were a child?? Why??" Edward asked,

"Uuhm. Yeah. I like the color of it because it's bright just like the sun." Polly said while smiling,



"Because it's bright just like the Sun"


*he remembered something*
"Ooh, Did you came--"

*knock knock*



-To be continued-



Edward remembered something?? What is it??
Someone knocked on the door?? Who is it??



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Thank you for reading. :win:
I change the point of view of the story so that it's not confusing.
 
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Nice chapter but for some reason ...... think its short ( ._.) yeah it is longer than mine but its no fun if it ends so quick (._. )
i AM STILL WONDERING WHAT SHE REMEMBERED :|
 

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Good job, keep up the good work
Nice keep up the good work
Thank you so much~ :win:

Felt lazy to read from 1st chapter... read this one !! Its cool... waiting for the next part :whip:
Ooh, Thank you. I'm glad you like it. :x3:


Nice chapter but for some reason ...... think its short ( ._.) yeah it is longer than mine but its no fun if it ends so quick (._. )
i AM STILL WONDERING WHAT SHE REMEMBERED :|
Yeah, Thank you. because it's only part 1 -.- You think so?? then I guess next time I'll make it longer.
It's HE remembered not she.
 
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great work and I liked it even though I haven't read the first 3 and you just made curious about them now ...=D
dang, now I have search for them huh ...troublesome but curiosity has no limit XD
And Btw I already like Mooney hehe I don't know but he resembles me atleast in this chapter.:bouncy:
Plus rep for excellent and structured chapter looking forward for more :p
 
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