[Mystery] My Apartment: Chapter 1

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My Apartment chapter 1
"The Black Man"


Characters:
Polly Levit
=a young 18 year old girl who lives alone after her parents go overseas. She has a long blonde hair. She likes mysteries and solving mysteries.


Stuart Wood
=a young 20 year old boy who lives alone next door.


Edward
=A guy who lived in the room of Polly before.


Black Man
=The man who always appear in Polly's dream


Notice:
**- sound/actions

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Chapter 1

When I open my eyes, I saw all white and nothing else. "I.. I *slow voice*" I said.. "where am I??" I continued. "-- Polly!!" huh?? "-- Polllyyyyy!!" Wait. someone is calling... me?? I turned around. Someone is there, it's approaching, a man??.. wears black?? "Who.. Who are you?!" I mutter."Me??" he said, "Me. I am the one will take your life!! *devil laugh* hahaha" he sai-- *woke up w/ heavy breath* a dream?? *sigh* thank goodness.

Hi. My name is Polly, *taking a bath* I just transfered here in my new apartment and I'm start living alone *cooking* after my parents went abroad *get the plates* It's been a week since I transfered and still...i'm not yet comfortable here. Right now I'm eating *eating breakfast* after this I will go to school *combing hair* "Ok done!" *locking the door put the key inside the bag* Since I transfered here I always had a bad dream.. about a man who wears black *walking down the street* I don't know who is he. He always says the same thing. "I will take your life" he said.

I heard a rumor that before I transfered there in my apartment someone is already living there but that man is gone one day. It's not that I'm after of ghost, it's just I'm curious about it, I tried to investigate it but they said no one saw him and also I don't his face just his name.. Edward.

*bang* *the car crash in the pole post* "Wha..What that??" people said, "What happen? an accident." Wooh, first time to see an accident. *come closer* "woohh..I'm ok! it's just that my car is damage *Sigh*" he said. "this is not good" he continued. *wang wang* the sound of a police and ambulance?? wooh. *noise noise* "Mister are you ok??"policeman said, "Ye.. Yeah I'm ok, it's just my car.. is damage *sigh*" he said," that is terrible" policeman said, "what is your name mister??" the policeman questioned *noise noise* "uum. Stuart Wood" he answered.

Wood?? Stuart Wood? Did I ever heard that name?? *thinking* hmm. "Where is your house mr. Wood?" the policeman questioned, "Uumm. there *point* in that apartment." he answered. Aah! I remember the one who lived next door to my room. "You!! *point*" I shouted, "Hah?? what did you say miss? *smile*" he said, " You! the one who lived next door that everynight there is a noise that I can't even explain!!" I shouted, "Ahh so your ms. Polly Levit?? What a nice name miss!" He said, " I'm not asking you that you st--" "So Miss, you know this mister??" policeman questioned.

"Of course not!! he is just an old man who is so noisy everynight and no matter what he is kind of person who is not concern about other people!!" I complained. "Ohh, I'm still 20 miss, don't call me an old man, that's so harsh of you, tsk tsk" he complained. "Ok ok now don't fight" policemam said *the public clock strike 8* *ding-ding* "Ohhh! sh** it's already 8.. I'm late for school! I need to go now" I Shouted. "Bye miss. take care!" he said.

*ding-ding*--*sigh* thanks goodness the class is over. It's already late. "I need to go now." I murmured. Ah, it's pretty dark in here. I hope no one is suspicious. *thud* "ah." *turned around* The.. there is something black figure.. I should run! *running* ah. he's still following me. someone.. someone helped me. but no one is here. *heart beat fast* *running* help me!! *thud* ah. I can't run anymore, my feet is numb. what should I do?? he already approached me!


-To be continued-

What will happen to Polly?? Who is the guy in black??

Wait for the next chapter.


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Hi guys. Thank you for reading. :win:
This is my first ever Fanfic. I hope you like it xd


Leave comments if you want :)
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I don't know if I'm correct with the clock sound *ding-ding?* lol.
 
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Nice, but i noticed very few but major spelling mistakes which could easily ruin the nice read. And if you have time check out my fanfic too in my latest threads for ideas and inspirations ;)
 

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Nicely done! Keep up the amazing work you do :)
thank you. :win:

Nice, but i noticed very few but major spelling mistakes which could easily ruin the nice read. And if you have time check out my fanfic too in my latest threads for ideas and inspirations ;)
Oh.. Ok, thank you. I'm not really good with grammars tsk tsk
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btw, I already check and read it :) It's so nice, it's thrilling :win:
 

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thank you. :win:



Oh.. Ok, thank you. I'm not really good with grammars tsk tsk
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btw, I already check and read it :) It's so nice, it's thrilling :win:
You are my new best friend cuz i also suck because i prefer to write fast rather than right clean and proper ;) and fast leads to spelling mistakes ..
 

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You are my new best friend cuz i also suck because i prefer to write fast rather than right clean and proper ;) and fast leads to spelling mistakes ..
Hahaha. Yeah!
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I totally agree!
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And this is the first time I wrote a fanfic ..Well, I wrote this coz' when I'm done reading a manga I started to imagining things lol (I love Imagining things.)

ooh. yeah I forgot to read the your oneshot xd gonna read it now :win:
 

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Hahaha. Yeah!
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I totally agree!
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And this is the first time I wrote a fanfic ..Well, I wrote this coz' when I'm done reading a manga I started to imagining things lol (I love Imagining things.)

ooh. yeah I forgot to read the your oneshot xd gonna read it now :win:
Its not a ****ing One shot :sy: i haven't released the one shot yet ....i released a new FanFic
 

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Its not a ****ing One shot :sy: i haven't released the one shot yet ....i released a new FanFic
I'm an Idiot.
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I thought it's a oneshot coz' you said in the last chap of the sound of that evil that exists. Oh great, I just realize when I read the last part. there's a "Until the next chapter..."
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