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name- kashino uruko
age- 19
personality nice and calm on the hunt seams like he has blood lust.
 

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name- kashino uruko
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personality nice and calm on the hunt seams like he has blood lust.

Elaborate on the personality. 'Nice and calm' is generic. Everybody has bloodlust of some form on the battlefield, why is he so special?
 

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Artemis: follows

Suddenly, a large green dragon lands In the area and screams, claiming the area as hers. It looks over at the carcass, then over at an emerging Artemis. It plants it's feet, and just as it is about to attack, an EZ Flashbomb lands in front of it and exploads, causing it to roar and backpedal into the waterfall.

Syren runs at Artemis in a dead sprint, pointing towards area 5. "Go! It's a Rathian! And it's bloody angry!" and sure enough, the Rathian regains its composure, it's maw alit with flames. It stamps its feet and roars again. An answering roar can be heard ithe distance, filling Syren with dread. He swears and takes Artemis's hand as he runs by, dragging her with him. He pulls out his hunting horn and blasts a three note rally, signalling to the other hunters on the island that a mating pair of wyverns are present.
 

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Elaborate on the personality. 'Nice and calm' is generic. Everybody has bloodlust of some form on the battlefield, why is he so special?
he was born with a strange healing ability. when he meditates and stays still he can heal his team mates automaticly, but is wide open to attacks.
 

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"Welcome to the world of monster hunter! I am your guide. My name is Omni, the Omniescent figure in this beautiful world. If you have questions, just address a letter to me and give it to your local post office, and I shall answer it in due time! I hope for this to become a good roleplay, and thoroughly would enjoy if you thoroughly enjoyed! Please no spamming, trolling, and start off with the basics please! Team up with up to four people and take on ferocious beasts, controlled by the creator of this thread alongside the other mods. If you'd like to become a mod, there are slots open! Just PM Artemis81. She shall deem you worthy or not! Worry not, people, as this is merely a simple message. If you need more in depth detail, we are going to be making a group for this as well! All are welcome to join! Artemis81 will be posting basic tutorials, weapon training, lists of armor and weapons, and a shop exchange for you to buy and create items. There are group threads you can create for your four player team! Thank you for reading, and I hope you enjoy."

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Name : Nevermore

Age : 18 years old

Gender : Male

Personality : mysterious and courage and loves adventure and is quiet evil when it needs to be.

I look like my avatar. Light yagami.

Okay cool my first monster hunter my father was a legend on hunting and I'm excited and ready to hunt down some monsters prepares his sword. Okay I need a squade now *looks for some people who are interested on hunting down monster*
 

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he was born with a strange healing ability. when he meditates and stays still he can heal his team mates automaticly, but is wide open to attacks.

That special power is a tad overpowered. I'd say that he'd have to drain some of his own health in order to heal his teammates. That's what potions are for. Magic isn't very strong, in fact, in the world of monster hunter, it hardly exists. Sorry for being a bit harsh on the personality all of a sudden, a friend thought that they had been subpar and that I should crack down on them. Not to mention I was really grumpy yesterday.
 

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Name : Nevermore

Age : 18 years old

Gender : Male

Personality : mysterious and courage and loves adventure and is quiet evil when it needs to be.

I look like my avatar. Light yagami.

Okay cool my first monster hunter my father was a legend on hunting and I'm excited and ready to hunt down some monsters prepares his sword. Okay I need a squade now *looks for some people who are interested on hunting down monster*

FOR ONE THING, you can't make up a legacy on the spot...you could've asked first, y'know? And also, there's such thing as dialogue. Use these: " because I can hardly read that last paragraph. Also, I have to give you the same treatment with the personality, it's MUCH too generic. Monster Hunters mostly love adventure. You have to have courage to hunt monsters. Mysterious and evil? Then I'd consider your hunter as a bad guy who'd have been banished from the port town. Lastly, I'm sorry to say that without that you're ~Declined~. I hate to have done that. Fix your bio quick!
 

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Name : Nevermore

Age : 18 years old

Gender : Male

Personality : mysterious and courage and loves adventure and is quiet evil when it needs to be.

I look like my avatar. Light yagami.

Okay cool my first monster hunter my father was a legend on hunting and I'm excited and ready to hunt down some monsters prepares his sword. Okay I need a squade now *looks for some people who are interested on hunting down monster*

When making a personality for a template, I would suggest looking up "personality Templates" in a search engine. Also use quotation marks when speaking. Makes it easier to read your writing. Also, using the correct spelling of words is much appreciated. Quiet evil makes no sense, however, quite evil does. The placement of the E determines the whole meaning of the word. Being mysterious will not help your character, and courage is a needed trait in all hunters.
 

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When making a personality for a template, I would suggest looking up "personality Templates" in a search engine. Also use quotation marks when speaking. Makes it easier to read your writing. Also, using the correct spelling of words is much appreciated. Quiet evil makes no sense, however, quite evil does. The placement of the E determines the whole meaning of the word. Being mysterious will not help your character, and courage is a needed trait in all hunters.

I beat ya to it! Muahaha!

Artemis: dashes into the next area, and walks into the clearing, which is surprisingly quiet. She walks to the center, and is suddenly surrounded by three Great Jaggi. "Oh...shoulda seen this coming..."
 

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I beat ya to it! Muahaha!

Artemis: dashes into the next area, and walks into the clearing, which is surprisingly quiet. She walks to the center, and is suddenly surrounded by three Great Jaggi. "Oh...shoulda seen this coming..."

(at least i explained my problems with it little miss artemis. come at me)

Syren sighs and pulls out his dual blades, glinting red in the sunlight. "how about... i take the two on the left, you try to take the one on the right?"
 

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FOR ONE THING, you can't make up a legacy on the spot...you could've asked first, y'know? And also, there's such thing as dialogue. Use these: " because I can hardly read that last paragraph. Also, I have to give you the same treatment with the personality, it's MUCH too generic. Monster Hunters mostly love adventure. You have to have courage to hunt monsters. Mysterious and evil? Then I'd consider your hunter as a bad guy who'd have been banished from the port town. Lastly, I'm sorry to say that without that you're ~Declined~. I hate to have done that. Fix your bio quick!

It's okay man I wasn't really RPing when I posted was more like an introduction when I talk Its usually like this example : Nevermore : etc
But anyways enjoy the RP and have fun. Btw my English isn't my first language and I use my phone most of the time so excuse me if I had some spelling mistakes.
 

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Artemis: "Show off..." she runs and quickly slashes madly into the great jaggi's hide as he was circling. Her movements are quick, somewhat sloppy, but unpredictable, using unusual combos in order to rack up damage quickly.
 

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It's okay man I wasn't really RPing when I posted was more like an introduction when I talk Its usually like this example : Nevermore : etc
But anyways enjoy the RP and have fun. Btw my English isn't my first language and I use my phone most of the time so excuse me if I had some spelling mistakes.
(its no problem. also, if you are talking, but not role playing, please put your words in parenthesis)
 

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Artemis: "Show off..." she runs and quickly slashes madly into the great jaggi's hide as he was circling. Her movements are quick, somewhat sloppy, but unpredictable, using unusual combos in order to rack up damage quickly.

after a few minutes, a roar is heard and a yell of triumph. "one down, one to go." he raises his swords and soul chrges, then goes in for the kill, flashing about in a fury of flame charged slashes.
 
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