[Adventure] Menma Chapter 2

[HENI]

Chapter 2: Sasuke Uchiha

[Menma throws the Rasen Ringu at Sasuke]

Sasuke: Shit it's coming! [Sasuke jumps away to dodge it]

Menma: it's no use. it'll explode.

[The Rasen Ringu destroys many trees near Sasuke, blowing him towards the waterfall!]

Sasuke: ugh!

[Menma creates another Rasen Ringu]

Menma: This will finish you off, so I can continue my journey for power, you annoyance.

[Sasuke looks up at Menma with shock and fear.]

[Crows flock around Menma!! He jumps away and slashes each of them with his kunai.]

Menma: These crows..

[Itachi arrives!!]

Sasuke: Big brother!

Itachi: It's nice to see Menma is this powerful and is only 13. Are you okay Sasuke?

Sasuke: Yeah..

Itachi: Sasuke what's going on?

Sasuke: Menma wants to see seek the true power of the Sharingan.

Itachi: I see... that power.

Sasuke: You know of it?

[Menma makes his Rasen Ringu really big!!]

[Sasuke creates a Chidori]

Menma: ...

[Sasuke closes his eyes]

Sasuke: I won't allow you to leave this village Menma!!

Itachi: [In thought] Sasuke's Sharingan power seems to be improving based on his chakra control.

[Madara appears near Menma!!]

Madara: Menma you seem to be having fun here.

Sasuke: Who is that!?

Itachi: Madara Uchiha.

Menma: ...

Madara: I'll deal with these two. You can leave first, Menma.

Menma: Alright.

[Menma leaves immediately]

Itachi: Those eyes of his..

Madara: Limbo!

[Sasuke and Itachi are hit by invisible forces, knocking them both through the huge forests!! Several hours have now passed. Sasuke and Itachi walk back to the Leaf Village, injured.]

Sakura: Are you two okay??

Shikamaru: Looks like you failed to bring back Menma huh?

Neji: Sorry I could not come..

Sasuke: It's okay. I'll train and become stronger. I will bring Menma back.

Itachi: What's your plan Sasuke?

Sasuke: I want to develop a lightning jutsu that can stop Menma's Rasen Ringu. I also want to improve my Sharingan's power.

Itachi: Menma is after the true power of the Sharingan.

Everyone: !!

Sasuke: You seem to know something about it, Itachi.

Itachi: It's power is the Mangekyo Sharingan. Losing someone close to you awakens it, through extreme emotion.

[Itachi activates his Mangekyo Sharingan.]

Chapter End

 

[Dark Sonic]

Reminds me of how Anime battles appear to be. I guess this is pretty much a script. As a writer/semi-avid reader from Fanfiction.net, I would like it if you give some background details before the dialogue kicks in. I'll write up an example.



The sky was blinded by the dark clouds as two shinobi stood against each other. On the left was a boy with spiky black hair that is subtly tinted with navy blue. He wore navy blue, short-sleeved shirt with a high collar, white shorts and white arm warmers wrapped around his forearms. He also had a weapon pouch attached onto his right thigh. The boy's face had a confused scowl, which directed towards his opponent.

Speaking of, his opponent was also a boy. Sickening Blonde hair matted across his head along with six whisker marks which aligned on his face. He wore a black robe that had licked orange flames, akin to a certain Yellow-esque shinobi. He also wore a black shirt that has a red spiral design on his chest area, ANBU-like black pants that reached his ankles, and black open-toed shinobi boots.

The black haired boy glared at his opponent. "Menma... why? Why did you leave Konoha?" His visage contorted into rage. "ANSWER ME MENMA!! WHY DID YOU LEAVE US?!" His scowl never wavered.

The now named Menma merely smirked at him. "Hn, still crying like a baby eh ducky-chan~?" His face hardened. "Konoha has hated me ever since I was born for reasons out of my control. I've always hated this village too and I just waited for the right time to get out of that filthy tree-hugging village."





That's the kind of fanfiction I read and just reading a script unnerves me a little I'm sorry if it sounds rude to you. I'll let you keep the example I just made up. It's 231 words by the way. Not bad huh? lol