love is a forrest (poem)

[izinagi54]

whisk your way through the trees
just to see the ocean in the sea
for your eyes are the moon
in the dark and gloom
the forrest for which i live
may i never give
her eyes are the moon
like flowers in full bloom
her hair black as dawn
but her voice is the swan
may i live on
too see the sun
so i can replant
my lawn

-chris

 

[izinagi54]

ok its about a girl

 

[BasedNaruto]

"so i can replant my lawn".. xd i liked the beggining of the poem. overall its pretty good.

 

[izinagi54]

ok time to clarify this to replant my lawn is to try to get her back

 

[Yuka]

Very beautiful and well written anyway keep up the excellent work rep+

 

[BasedNaruto]

ok time to clarify this to replant my lawn is to try to get her back

What about "but her voice is the swan". I thought u meant in this as "her" being annoying. xd but i think im wrong. :shrug:

 

[Seffy]

lol "So I can replant my lawn" what happened to your lawn?