[Mystery] Lies & Denial

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The lies and the denial
In the end, it's all the same
Just follow blindly in single file
You can't escape it friend, just forget your name

Love doesn't last forever
But hate seems to always thrive
Just give in and always remember
You're just part of the hive

You can fight the raging torrent
It will take you under
Just follow the current
Whatever caused humanity's blunder?

When did we choose the wrong road?
The road had a great fork
How did we miss it, was it in code?
Was it popping that last bottle's cork?

The lies have us herding like sheep
We're just waiting for the slaughter
God's crying for all the ones' he can't keep
And Lucifer's howling with joyous laughter

How can we stop the lies
When we're buried in denial?
We're all held down like a bird that never flies
But it's because we bury ourselves in only one style..
 
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It seems my poems still have a long way to go.

Well done, I enjoyed reading this one.
Keep working at it. Spelling, Grammar, and how you put together your words are all important. Meaning, being symbolic, and style are not everything, contrary to popular belief. You have to put some real effort into making yourself understood, as well as not making the point obvious to those who don't enjoy thinking.
Though honestly, your poems don't have any issues with the spelling, or the grammar, but their length could be better, and you want to be more... descriptive, while being more cryptic.
I hope enough people read that first half though, because I can't stand poems that read;

"i had a bird name' bart
it cudnt fly or nothin
all it cud do was fart"

The lack of any sustenance, grammar, or attempts at spelling properly, drives me crazy.
 
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Keep working at it. Spelling, Grammar, and how you put together your words are all important. Meaning, being symbolic, and style are not everything, contrary to popular belief. You have to put some real effort into making yourself understood, as well as not making the point obvious to those who don't enjoy thinking.
Though honestly, your poems don't have any issues with the spelling, or the grammar, but their length could be better, and you want to be more... descriptive, while being more cryptic.
I hope enough people read that first half though, because I can't stand poems that read;

"i had a bird name' bart
it cudnt fly or nothin
all it cud do was fart"

The lack of any sustenance, grammar, or attempts at spelling properly, drives me crazy.
I see. I'll keep that in mind. Thank you.
 
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