lier of the hour (a humanity poem)

[izinagi54]

why do we lie
is it so we can survive
live a life of crime and strive
falling in a pit back as night

now your out of my sight
the light has faded
God lies dead and discontent
crying at his mistake
we take for granted our free will
kill kill is all we hear anymore
who will mourn the light that was lost to the night

the pain many childern suffer
as their life get tougher
the peace we call between ourselves is a lie
soon we all die
thats part of life
but no will be there to lye by you
as they take you for scrone
on your only lord

 

[Yuka]

It was a nice fanfic keep up the excellent work

 

[izinagi54]

ok my bad i messed up i put it in the fanfic instead of poetry
come on haters

 

[Mystical Ruby]

you did great! wease:

 

[Rock on]

lack of rythmetic words and you have end up confusing the inner music of poem with external.On reading words appear to rhyme but dont. As such they dont get perfect poem but nice concept and great representation shown by flawless words.

 

[TheDreamShark]

very nice keep up the creativity my friend.

 

[Zeref]

dame pretty good!