Krito Aburame

[Anbu Kirito]

Basic Information

Name: Kirito Aburame
Nickname: Insectotron (parents pet name for him, given due to his obsession with insects)
Gender: Male
Age: 16
Clan: Aburame

Looks:

Kirito possesses black hair, blue eyes, and none much else besides the aburame trademark sunglasses and hoodie are worth mentioning. His height is 5 feet 10 inches, and he weighs 150 pounds. He is a normal sized boy, and his black hair has a purple streak in it that he put there just for fun.

Personality:

Unlike many teenagers his age, Kirito is reserved and quiet, mostly spending his time collecting and practicing his use of the aburame clan destruction beetles. He was born this way, and rarely talks. He also is very smart, and pays attention to detail at a high level.

Village Info:

Village of Birth: Konohagakure
Village of Alliance: Konohagakure



Ninja Rank: Genin
Specialty: N/A
Elements: Earth - needs training
Your ninjutsu: E-Rank





Background Info

History:

Nothing big to note about here, as Kirito had a normal childhood going through the academy and such, and his parents were supportive. Really, he has no deep backstory. He would like to learn earth style due to his obsession with plants, and other living things! The only other thing worth noting is his goal; to collect and observe every insect species in the world. He did very well during his academy days, scoring a 26/27 rank in his class, second to an elite Uchiha child.

Wins: N/A
Losses: N/A

Pictures:

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~Approved~

 

[Klad]

Perfection . Great !

 

[itachixnamikaze]

Bro this is beautiful... May you become legendary and surpass even Nexus o_o

 

[Kirikoe]

Best bio ive ever seen

 

[Prog]

You should ask a RP veteran to fix this up for you, that's how I did it. Nice start I guess.

 

[Jin]

perfection . Great !

bro this is beautiful... May you become legendary and surpass even nexus o_o

best bio ive ever seen

lmaooo xdxdxd

 

[Ōkami]

Very detailed.

 

[Corazon]

You should ask a RP veteran to fix this up for you, that's how I did it. Nice start I guess.

Who you calling a veteran? :nuts: I joined the same month as you O_O

 

[Slowpoke]

tittle and name don't match up

but other than that, great and straight to the point

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[Anbu Kirito]

thanks. who can approve it though?

 

[Cabbage]

Sigh, where to begin with this... let's go over the errors first. You cannot have a specialty, so you have to remove that, then you need to actually finish the bloody thing, so add in a theme or at least the win/loss record (put down n/a for both). You also need to remove the chakra/heath record, as that's actually not needed for any bio whatsoever.

Now for the next part... I can understand the picture situation, dealing as unique characters may be difficult to find pictures to resemble what you imagine for those characters. Given that this may be the case, it's up to you to paint this character with words so to speak. Description will greatly help, even base stats such as height and weight will greatly help paint this character into someone we can imagine. Same thing goes for personality, in fact, this is more important, in my opinion, than a basic description as personality is what gives your character actual life, and truly is the part that exists within the RP. Now, your history is too basic and lacking, even over the other two parts (your personality is actually mostly fine to be honest). Add in more details, how did he do in the academy, what does his parents do for work, who are his friends, what dreams and aspirations does he have, what does he think of the world? It actually doesn't have to be incredibly in depth, hell, both my bios have quite shoddy histories, but there has to be at least some depth in them to paint a little bit of perspective towards your character's ideals and goals, however little this RP may actually need them... the essential point is that if you're not going for a cannon character or a character from another show, then you have to paint the character a little bit more, as we, the audience, have no prior point with which to analyze this character, you literally have to give us a starting point here.

Now for a few nitpicky things, color and symbols may help enhance this bio further, and may, in fact, help people glance over some shortcomings in regards to content.

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has numerous symbols, of genders, elements, villages, et al, that'll help add images to this bio, thus helping out with the image issue mentioned earlier. Also, color, if use sparingly over the titles of each section of the bio, also helps in this regard. Finally, fixing the spacing towards a set medium will help too. There's quite a few issues with this bio, but it's nothing that can't be fixed. Hopefully I wasn't too harsh on you, and that this helps somewhat.

Also, Reborn or Caliburn are the two that approves bios. Don't bother them about doing so however, or else they'll probably deny it immediately. They've been pretty quick about approving them lately anyways, so it'll probably be between a few days and a week or two until it is approved.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

Ok! Thanks for the tips!

 

[Anbu Kirito]

There. Edits complete!

 

[Anbu Kirito]

I added those bits, and it looks better i think.

 

[Cabbage]

Um... now you made a literal error within the history. You cannot actually know any doton (earth) techniques, you can say, however, that you have a curiosity within the doton element and wish to learn it.

Now, when I mentioned the spacing medium, I meant in particular the spacing between the village and rank, and trainings and background information. Those spaces have three spaces between them, while the other sections have a single space between them. Make it one space so then there's a set standard in regards to the spacing of this bio.

Now, a better method to indicate a start of a new section is to bold and then increase the size of a section header, to somewhere between 5-6. You can then indicate a subsection (aka name, village, et al) with an underline, and leave the actual text (actual name, history, etc) normal. As to coloring scheme, that's ultimately up to you as to what you feel is appropriate, although too much color is just as bad as too little in regards to a bio's aesthetic feel.

This image might actually be close to what you're describing:

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, if you're interested in such a thing of course.

Also forgot to mention, you might not want to double post, as that's a no-no in regards to the forum's rules, edit your initial post instead.

 

[Troi]

You need some pictures. It won't get approved without at least one. And thanks JJUif for making my job easier.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

I see you are on JJ?

 

[Cabbage]

I am yes, you need more advice?

 

[Anbu Kirito]

No.. I think i finished.

 

[Anbu Kirito]

I just hope its accepted lols