Jnchuuriki Chronicles: Missing Nin; Chapter 2

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"kay this is chapter 2 of my fan fic. If you haven't read chapter 1 it here:


Chapter Two

“BY ORDER OF THE FEUDAL LORD OF THE LAND OF FIRE; BY PETITION OF THE FEUDAL LORD OF THE LAND OF RIVERS”

The following person(s) have escaped from the shinobi prison in Tanigakure in the land of metal:
1. Honmalon
2. Takenouchi
3. Koushiro

All are considered armed and dangerous and were imprisoned for various charges ranging from murder to leaking of Information to enemy countries during the 3rd war. They are believed to be hiding within the fire country and a warrant has been passed to all other nations for awareness.

The escaped convicts are to be apprehended and brought back… or killed.

Signed
Special assistant to the Feudal Lord.”

Shizune rolled back the scroll as she finished reading it to Kakashi’s Team. Placing the scroll on a table in front of Tsunade, she bent down and picked Tonton in her hands and stood as she waited for Tsunade’s next order.

“I’m afraid I have to send you on this mission. Considering it’s Jiraiya’s memorial.” Tsunade said as she sat and watched the expressions on the faces of the shinobis standing before her.

“We don’t know much about these three or what they can do. We’ve also lost some valuable shinobis during Madara’s war, that’s why I feel I must send the four of you; considering your strengths and experience.”

Naruto closed his eyes as he thought over what Tsunade had just said. True enough, Madara’s war had put a huge strain on the five hidden villages’ forces. If a job needed immediate attention, Team Kakashi was first on the list; which meant more time fighting, and less time training; even lesser time to spend with Hinata.

Ever since Kabuto betrayed Madara by retreating his zombie army and leaving Madara’s Zetsu army short-handed (thus resulting in Madara losing the war), he had begun seeing Hinata on a regular basis. She would watch him train and later they would eat ramen at Ichiraku’s; of course, she insisted on keeping their dates private.

“What do you think, Naruto?”

Naruto jolted back to reality and realized the attention in the room was now on him. His thoughts had drifted of when he began thinking about Hinata.

“Is it possible to get a team to do a quick research on the affairs of these three escapees while we are out tracking them?” He said, without really thinking about the issue

“Research?” Tsunade inquired.

“Uh, yes research, so we could have an idea about who we are dealing with, the later the research team can bring us the information and also serve as backup for us.”

“Hmmm, that’s actually a good idea, but where could we find such a team that could carry out both tasks.” Tsunade asked openly.

“Uh, Tsunade-sama, there’s a team outside awaiting orders from you.” Shizune said.

“Send them in.” As Shizune left for the door she addressed Kakashi. “If this team proves capable for the task, do you mind sharing command over this mission with the other team-?”

“Not a problem, Hokage-sama.” Kakashi said as he raised an arm. “May I ask for a favor?”

“When Yamato returns from his mission, may I get a detailed report from him?”

Tsunade looked at him suspiciously. “Fine, I’ll ask for a report to be sent to you.”

The door swung open as Shizune ushered in the team waiting outside.


Team Hokori walked in and greeted the Hokage. Then they introduced themselves to Kakashi’s team.

“So you’re the one receiving this mission, Kakashi-san.” Hokori said as she extended her arm out towards him.

Hokori was the Jounin assigned to team 4. A Tom-boy most of her life, she was regarded as one of the toughest Kunoichis in Konoha and also one of the few very powerful Jounins in Konoha. She introduced her team: Takuya, Tatsu and Zeya.

After explaining the matter at hand Tsunade asked. “Hokori, what do you think? Can your team handle the research and provide backup for Team Kakashi?”

“Of course Hokage-sama, as-a-matter-of-fact, I can leave my Team to handle the research while I join team Kakashi in the tracking, they are all chuunins and are allowed to research the villages files unsupervised.”

“Hokori-sensei, do all of us have to do the research? I could accompany you on the mission.” Tatsu protested

“We don’t know who we are going against, Tatsu, so I think you should-.” Naruto was cut off.

“I’m as good as any of you in Team 7, if not better, so don’t tell me what I should do!” snapped Tatsu.

“What is your problem, what’s with the angry tone?” Naruto asked as he turned to face him properly.

“What’s my problem? My problem is you interrupting me while I’m talking to Hokori-sensei! Just who do you think you are?”

“Tatsu!” Shouted Hokori. “That’s enough; I won’t have any more arguments. You and the others are staying for research and report!! That’s my final order!!!”

“Hoko-. “ Takuya cut him off, “Sorry Hokori-sensei, we shall begin research immediately.” And with that, Takuya left with Tatsu, followed by Zeya who waved at Naruto and mouthed the words “sorry about Tatsu.” before ducking out of the room.

“Sorry, Hokage-sama, Tatsu can be… a real brat when it comes to missions.” Hokori apologized.

“Never mind, please prepare for your departure immediately.” Tsunade said as she waved them out of her office.

“Shizune, cancel all my appointments today.” She said, once they left.

“What!! But Tsunade-sama, you can’t just cancel your appointments. You’re Hokage!” Shizune cried in shock upon hearing Tsunade’s order.

“Don’t worry; I’m just going out for some ‘sake’. It’s Jiraiya’s memorial and I should remember the good times.” And with that she left her office.

Shizune signed. “Let’s hope she remembers that she is Hokage. Tsunade-sama tends to lose track of reality when drunk. Eh, Tonton?” She asked the pet pig in her arms as it oinked in agreement.

Takuya walked down the hall with his teammates till he was sure they were out of hearing-range. Then he grabbed Tatsu from behind and swung him with his back to the wall and looked him squarely in the eyes.

“Are you outta your mind!?” He roared.

“Maybe I am. Why do they have to get the important mission?” Tatsu snapped back.

“Stop it you two, this isn’t cool.” Zeya said.

“You, stay out of this!” Takuya glared at her before returning his attention back to Tatsu.

“You can’t go about disrespecting your Sensei in front of Hokage-sama!”

Tatsu pushed away his hands and freed himself from his grip.

“She’s the one disrespecting us! Leaving us behind in Konoha to do research while she’s out tracking criminals!”

Takuya turned towards Zeya. “Let’s get to the military library and begin the research.”

“What about Tatsu-san?” She asked.

Takuya turned and looked at Tatsu. “You’re on your own, follow Hokori-sensei’s orders or not. I’ve got research to do.” With that he left to the library followed by Zeya.

Tatsu stood and watched them as they walked off. Damn that Hokori-sensei! He thought. He turned and threw a punch at the wall behind him. The pain surging through his fist was overshadowed by his rage and annoyance. Slowly, he let his hand fall down from the wall as he looked at the small dent he had cause on it.

Well, I guess there’s nothing I can do but to head to the library and start researching.


Two white-eyed shinobis stood barely 6 feet from each other, breathing heavily. Veins stood out around their eyes as they watched each other cautiously each holding the same stance.

The male gave a half smile as he shifted and took a different stance. With both arms out stretched, one behind in a raised angle and the other parallel to it, he clamped the last two fingers on each hand with his thumbs.

”Eight Trigrams! 64 palms!"

Almost instantly, he took a step forward to make sure his opponent was in range, and then he began to swiftly deliver a series of quick jabs with that sent chakra through into their target’s body. With his Byakugan already activated, finding the right points to hit wasn’t hard; unless his opponent had a Byakugan.

With a speed matching his own, the Kunoichi began blocking the jabs by placing a flat palm against his wrists and hands; stopping it from making contact.

58,59,60,61,62,63,64!She memorized as she blocked each attack, making sure she stopped all 64 hits. The last she stopped by directing it upwards and above her.

Sadly, she had miscalculated. The last defensive move had left her open; a mistake which he used to his advantage. Shifting slightly, he placed himself at her side and delivered a powerful jab with his flat palm; an attack that sent her rolling backwards about a meter.

He stopped and looked over at her, wondering if he had gone too far with that last attack. He hadn’t. Slowly, she stood up wobbly on her feet, took a few deep breathes then looked at him and reactivated her Byakugan.

Taking a different stance, she clenched both fists as chakra began emitting from them, forming a lion head on each hand. She smiled at him as she took off towards him, leaving a trail of dust behind her and her hair flying in the wind across her mesh shirt.

Unfortunately, this attack had a greater strength compared to its speed. Punch after punch was easily evaded by her opponent, who was very fast. He smiled as he watched her futile attempt to land a punch on him. This attack, he remembered, had only worked on Pain with no apparent reason.

She swung once more, leaving herself unguarded once again. Swiftly, he tripped her left leg and watched her loose balance; but the joke was on him.

Using an ancient Hyuuga technique, she shifted her weight onto her right leg and, using it as a pivot, spun around and landed a chakra covered kick squarely on his stomach, sending him rolling 3 meters from her.

Shock registered on his face as he got up and dusted the sand from his bare chest and looked at her. Her left knee was bent with her foot pointing downwards as she looked back at him. She was smiling at him; probably mocking him. He chuckled to himself as he regained his stance and stared her down; Byakugan to Byakugan.

“Hinata-sama!” Came an interruption.

Hyuugas stopped suddenly, causing a cloud of dust to surround both of them. As the dust settled, each Hyuuga stood almost face-to-face with an outstretched flat palm each pointed at their chests.

“Team 7 has been appointed a new mission!” Her informant reported.

Both Hinata and her cousin deactivated their Byakugans, which signaled the end of their daily training and spar.

“Thank you, Ko-san. You have been very helpful.” She said.

And with that she left into her quarters to refresh herself and change out of her already disheveled clothes, leaving Neji outside in the courtyard, which served as their families’ training ground.

Neji took up a towel from a basin filled with water, squeezed it lightly and draped it over his shoulders; letting the water and the wind cool him off.

Ever since he had seen his father during the war, he felt he had a duty to make sure the Hyuuga family would become not only the greatest in Konoha, but all over the five great villages. His father might have accomplished it side by side with his brother.

His first task was to raise Hinata’s current level; and he was doing well in that aspect. Hinata had proven again and again capable of defeating him; if she could only pay more attention to training and less time keeping track over Naruto’s whereabouts.

“Neji-sensei!” Came a cry from the far end of the courtyard.

“Hanabi-sama, I’ve told more than once. Stop calling me sensei, I’m not your sensei!” He snapped.

Hyuuga Hanabi came up behind him and sat next to him as she snatched away his towel. She was in the newly built Ninja academy and was about to graduate to become a Genin. Already, she had considered Neji as her sensei.

“Is that how to talk to a member of the Head family?” She teased as she pulled at his long hair. “Just kidding!”

She threw her arms around him and gave him a small hug.

“Besides, I don’t want any other Jounin to train me, you’re the best there is!”

Neji smiled as he looked at her. She looked like Hinata at a younger age but with a longer hair. And she wasn’t nearly as shy as Hinata. If at all, she was like Ino; very bold, outspoken and mischievous. She was his second target and so far had succeeded in pushing her far ahead of her mates.

“Ne- Neji-san, I’ll be going out now. Don’t wait up for me. Bye, Hanabi.” Hinata said after emerging fully dressed and cleaned up. She hugged Hanabi and placed a kiss on Neji’s bandaged forehead. In less than a minute she was out of the Hyuuga premises.

Neji closed his eyes and smiled. After the 4th war, Hiashi had made all head family members take an oath never to use the mark placed on the foreheads of the branch family members; signaling the end of such practice. Never again will the branch family live their lives to serve the head. The green mark under his bandages would forever be a reminder of his past life.

“So, what are you teaching me today, Neji-sensei?” Hanabi inquired.

He chuckled as he got up; nothing could make her stop calling him sensei.

“Today’s lesson is based on blind spots.”

She looked puzzled. “Blind spots?”

“Yes, Hanabi-sama, blind spots.”

“Oh, you mean that part of my vision I can’t see with until I move my head slightly?”

He smiled, seeing that she had also realized that there was a blind spot in Byakugan. Hana was a promising kunoichi. The future was very bright for the likes of her.

“Yes, so let us begin.”

‘Okay,” she got up from her seat. “Byakugan!”
 
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Nicely done! I must say that the way you presented that spar between Hinata and Neji was splendid. Including the way you wrote out Neji's thoughts.
Something about the usage of were and where though. Where - is when you refer to a location so for this dialogue, it should be where instead of were.

“Hmmm, that’s actually a good idea, but were could we find such a team that could carry out both tasks.”​

Or, I think you just mistyped it.? ^^
Looks to me that Tatsu is finding a rival in Naruto, eh? And I'm getting an idea that Team 7's mission would, after a year, lead Naruto to go out and search for his mother's sister, Ayane and his cousin, Kante?:D Hmm, that must be thrilling for Naruto: to finally find a real family!
 
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Nicely done! I must say that the way you presented that spar between Hinata and Neji was splendid. Including the way you wrote out Neji's thoughts.
Something about the usage of were and where though. Where - is when you refer to a location so for this dialogue, it should be where instead of were.

“Hmmm, that’s actually a good idea, but were could we find such a team that could carry out both tasks.”​

Or, I think you just mistyped it.? ^^
Looks to me that Tatsu is finding a rival in Naruto, eh? And I'm getting an idea that Team 7's mission would, after a year, lead Naruto to go out and search for his mother's sister, Ayane and his cousin, Kante?:D Hmm, that must be thrilling for Naruto: to finally find a real family!
wow!! you're really good at analyzing storylines!!!
 

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Brilliant Chapter! I love it when i read a fight scene and my imagination makes it into a really detailed animation in my head! Though i am curios as to why you chose the name 'Jinchuuriki Chronicles', am i right in thinking that you' gonna reveal things about the past Jinchuuriki? or maybe even....future jinchuuriki? oO I am gripped with this fanfic, i love it and keep up the awesome work! ^^
 

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Well, first of all, sorry to haven't been able to continuously follow your FF...I was quite busy (I'm barely havin' time for mine even :p)

Anyways, nice chapter again :D

I like the relation you are building with Naruto and Tatsu...It seems that Naruto gained quite some authority in the village as he was quite skeptical over his thoughts on Tatsu and the analysis of the previous war (even if it was just in thoughts)...:p

I also like the team of Tatsu...Their team seems like a mix of Team 10 and Team Samui...
It's definitely getting quite interesting...xd

I'd like to know what happen to Kabuto! You said that he betrayed Madara - so does that mean that he's still on the run...:|xd You seems to have good plans for the villains as you also introduced these 3 criminals which definitely intrigued me more the best ;)

The highlight of your story was definitely the training of Neji and Hinata...You described it in great dialogues and vocabulary. Plus it was efficient!
I wonder what will be your canon characters apart from your introduced ones, Tatsu ect...
Naruto seems to play a good part along with Kakashi and Hinata. I wonder if Neji and Hanabi will also play a big part in your story...Still, it's getting interesting.xd I'll try to check the next ones as soon as I can ;)

Keep going :)
 

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Well, first of all, sorry to haven't been able to continuously follow your FF...I was quite busy (I'm barely havin' time for mine even :p)

Anyways, nice chapter again :D

I like the relation you are building with Naruto and Tatsu...It seems that Naruto gained quite some authority in the village as he was quite skeptical over his thoughts on Tatsu and the analysis of the previous war (even if it was just in thoughts)...:p

I also like the team of Tatsu...Their team seems like a mix of Team 10 and Team Samui...
It's definitely getting quite interesting...xd

I'd like to know what happen to Kabuto! You said that he betrayed Madara - so does that mean that he's still on the run...:|xd You seems to have good plans for the villains as you also introduced these 3 criminals which definitely intrigued me more the best ;)

The highlight of your story was definitely the training of Neji and Hinata...You described it in great dialogues and vocabulary. Plus it was efficient!
I wonder what will be your canon characters apart from your introduced ones, Tatsu ect...
Naruto seems to play a good part along with Kakashi and Hinata. I wonder if Neji and Hanabi will also play a big part in your story...Still, it's getting interesting.xd I'll try to check the next ones as soon as I can ;)

Keep going :)
Thanks alot Bro.... really appreciate it!!!
 
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