In a way or another (A NaruHina Fanfic) Chapter 7

[Maina Deah]

FINALLY!!!!
And it ws great as usual...

Thanks!!

 

[ZK]

Let me be honest with you, alright?
I like your plot, it's simple and cute, you'll catch a lot of readers with this kind of fluff
On a more serious note, I can't help but question the acts of your characters sometimes. I guess you've made a few personal changes in regards to the characters personalities to make them suit your plot and in itself, you're doing a good job. But I'll have to admit that I find your OC to be a bit too much of a guide instead of a character. She's an obvious rival and I like the base around her, but she's still a bit rough around the edges.
Overall, a simple fanfic that can make NaruHina fans squeal in delight, but more serious readers will probably become weary of the, and I mean no offense, blinkered plot.
Good work and I look forward to your next chapter! ^^

 

[Bisma]

Awesome as always

 

[Maina Deah]

Let me be honest with you, alright?
I like your plot, it's simple and cute, you'll catch a lot of readers with this kind of fluff
On a more serious note, I can't help but question the acts of your characters sometimes. I guess you've made a few personal changes in regards to the characters personalities to make them suit your plot and in itself, you're doing a good job. But I'll have to admit that I find your OC to be a bit too much of a guide instead of a character. She's an obvious rival and I like the base around her, but she's still a bit rough around the edges.
Overall, a simple fanfic that can make NaruHina fans squeal in delight, but more serious readers will probably become weary of the, and I mean no offense, blinkered plot.
Good work and I look forward to your next chapter! ^^

I understand what you mean and thank you for your comment. I take on criticms and I appreciate mostly are the ones who's stating their reasons so I can improve my succeeding chapters or next ff (in case).
Thanks again ^_^

Awesome as always

Hehe..thank you

 

[jcbjcb13]

Do they *** in the end?

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[Jack Spicer]

Do they *** in the end?

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Don't spam/troll fanfiction or in general. (But yeah, probably)

I apologize for commenting on an old chapter, but he bumped it.


Great chapter.

 

[Maina Deah]

Do they *** in the end?

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read it till chap 9 so you'll know

Don't spam/troll fanfiction or in general.

I apologize for commenting on an old chapter, but he bumped it.


Great chapter.

yeah you're right
nah, its okay...thanks for reading