Improvement Spar.

[Kuroh]

-Unofficial
-Rei's R&R
-CJs: Allowed
-CEs: Allowed
-Range: Mid-range
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If someone strong takes this please give advice/tips on each of my moves. xd​

 

[Virus..]

<_> should we finish fight I never finish lol

 

[Kuroh]

<_> should we finish fight I never finish lol

Reply to the last fight you idiot. :| someone else can take this.

 

[Virus..]

I know just felt like spamin>>>jk ok

 

[-Hatake-]

Sure, why not.

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I haven't RP'd in like..... a year, so go easy on me. I should also note that some advancements have been made in my training. I'd prefer if you started.

 

[Kuroh]

It was a difficult day for Lelouch. He said to himself to first person he saw, he would kill. He began to walk around a beautiful grassy field. He noticed a shadow of a man. He continued to get close and he noticed a man with white hair. As they got to mid-range Lelouch said the following "you will die"


I look at you into the eyes as i begin to gather a massive amount of chakra, i channel it into my mouth, after that i release a huge stream of intense flames going traveling at high speed and straight at you. Burning grass as it travels.

(Katon: Gōka Mes****su) - Fire Release: Great Fire Destruction

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Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: A technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire, and then expelled from the mouth in a massive stream of intense flames.

As the fire begins to travel to your direction i start to gather a huge amount of doton chakra. After that i release it onto the ground to create a small tremer that should result in harming you .

(Doton: Yochi no Douyou) - Earth Release: World Shaking

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Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: 30
Description: The user will concentrate and release their chakra into the ground to create a small tremer that can result in harming the enemy target.

 

[-Hatake-]

As I see you staring at me with evil intent, I brace myself for whatever pain is about to be inflicted. I immediately notice a wave of flames approaching quickly towards my direction. I know that I need to act fast, and I do. I suddenly submerge underground without you noticing due to your vision being blocked by your own technique. I make sure to appear behind you; where you would least accept. Right then I notice that you are too busy preparing another technique, so I use your lack of knowledge of my whereabouts to quickly formulate a devastatingly sharp spear of lightning that hastily moves towards your direction, piercing the air in it's wake. I realize that this is not going to be enough to put you away, so I gather up some doton chakra, thus creating a cavern that traps you whilst also leaving an opening big enough to allow my spear to pass through.

(Doton: Dochū Eigyo no Jutsu) - Earth Release: Underground Projection Fish Technique
Rank: C
Type: Defence/Supplementary
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Using this jutsu, a person can hide underground until they're ready to attack an opponent. By utilizing earth-chakra, the person can stealthily emerge from the ground without disrupting the ground around him. This jutsu can also be used to avoid incoming jutsus.

(Raiton: Gian) - Lightning Style: False Darkness
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Descripton: The user after performing the hand seal snake emits lightning in the shape of a spear from their hands whilst kakuzu lightning mask emits it from its mouth, which then pierces the enemy. Its destructive power is great enough to even pierce through rock; meaning it has a high killing potential. The user can increase the number of spears to attack multiple enemies. This, coupled with the sheer speed of the lightning, makes it a difficult technique to evade. This strong attack can be defended against by an equally strong attack of the same element such as Raikiri.

(Doton: Tsuchi Kairō) - Earth Release: Earth Corridor
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will first perform the snake hand seal and then cause the earth in the surrounding area to rise up and over a target and create a cavern, imprisoning the target. The user can leave an opening to allow attacks to go in to strike down the trapped adversaries, or close it up completely to prevent escape.

* Since you asked for advice, I will give you some. Even though I'm not that great. In you're first move you should have used the earth shaking technique first, this would have been quicker and would make it more harder for me to evade your fire attack. It would also cause me more trouble as it would be more difficult for me to escape whilst the ground underneath my feat is constantly shaking. Don't be afraid to maximize your jutsu limit, if you used 3 jutsu you could have thought up more combo's or traps that would have put me in more hazardous situations.

 

[Kuroh]

As i turn around and notice a sharp spear of light moving towards my direction i quickly gather wind chakra and i release a stream of wind onto the ground to boost myself into the air, making the sand/dust to rise getting into your eyes and blocking your vision. As i'm in the air i notice i can't see you due to the screen of sand\dust but i know that you are in the middle of it.

(Fūton: Kaze Ogawa no Jutsu) - Wind Release: Wind Stream Technique

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Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 10
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to change direction in mid-air at high speeds by simply blowing wind out their mouth. The user can also use this technique by blowing it at the ground and causing a dust cloud to rise, concealing the users location and movement.

As i'm falling to the ground, I begin to gather my doton chakra and once i have gathered enough and i fall onto the ground, i release my chakra onto the ground to cause yet another tremer.

(Doton: Yochi no Douyou) - Earth Release: World Shaking

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Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: 30
Description: The user will concentrate and release their chakra into the ground to create a small tremer that can result in harming the enemy target.

As the ground begins to shake, I begin to gather katon chakra. I take out a scroll and as i begin to unravel it, i start to channel katon chakra. Then i use shape manipulation, making my fire chakra take the form/creating a large flaming dragon that flies out of the scroll and going straight at the area where it's covered by sand/dust. Once it gets there and it makes contact with something or you inside the area covered by sand/dust explodes.

(Katon: Bakuryūgeki) - Fire Release: Exploding Dragon Strike

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Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user through use of one their scrolls will summon a large flame dragon that is directed towards the enemy target and explodes upon impact.

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Thanks for the advice.
Btw i don't know if this works so if it doesn't tell me what i did wrong.​

 

[-Hatake-]

I'm sorry, but I don't think that move would work. The first jutsu used allows you to change direction by blowing a simple gust of wind out of your mouth, but the force wouldn't be enough to propel you if you were standing on the ground. The dust cloud would still form, but you wouldn't be able to avoid my attack and it would impale you.

* Try using a better justu to avoid, since I used an S-rank lightning, you could have countered by using a A-rank earth or a more sophisticated escape method.

 

[Scorps]

The report button isn't to have a mod check your moves. Its to report rule breaking. Use the report button correctly please. Also, if its a spar, you should never go to an RP Moderator first. Talk to a sensei to check it. RP mods have tons to check already without having to check every fight and moves.

thank you