"I'm on my way"

[Shiina..]

I'm on my way #Poem

When you're searching for the light..
In your own right.. Never give in and look forward till you see some hopes in sight!

Here I am.. On my way.. Walking on the street everyday it's the same..

Looking for a moment to sneak away..
Following my dreams...

..
I want to climb on high mountains..
More than thousands!
I want to swim over the whole world..
Twice at least
I want to scream so hard..
Untill you discard!


I want to see my light with hopes in sight..
I want to feel the wind in my hair and breath in the fresh air!

I want you to take care

Please promise me...
Love your life and enjoy your time..
Be my friend and let's search together..
Our hopes are now together..

And you will be my light forever ]​

EDITED: ThankyOuu so much for the "Thanks and Reps" :T_T:

 

[-Logic-]

I know who this is about.

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[SQY]

Amazing.

 

[Narutohokage7]

I know who this is about.

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Me, right? Awesome work!

 

[markdabomb22]

It was so touching :T_T:

 

[Tsuki]

It's a beautiful poem I was smiling while reading it ^^

 

[-Logic-]

If I'm to give my honest opinion, it's that;

Don't like it. Sounds like bubble gum teenage love shit to me. Well put together though, I'll give you that.

Also, please no replies telling me to stop 'hatin'. I'll neg rep you and report you.

 

[xeL0wns]

nice

 

[Narutohokage7]

If I'm to give my honest opinion, it's that;

Don't like it. Sounds like bubble gum teenage love shit to me. Well put together though, I'll give you that.

Also, please no replies telling me to stop 'hatin'. I'll neg rep you and report you.

You're aloud your opinion.

 

[KyuubiUzumaki]

Good poem, all in all. Not my type of style, but it is great that you put some time into this piece of work. There's my english homework done XD

Jks, I wont copy lol

 

[Shiina..]

If I'm to give my honest opinion, it's that;

Don't like it. Sounds like bubble gum teenage love shit to me. Well put together though, I'll give you that.

Also, please no replies telling me to stop 'hatin'. I'll neg rep you and report you.

First of all.. ThankyOuu so much everyone! I'm glad you all like it<3

And now you -logic- ... I don't care.. This is what I feel what I like to write.. Deep in my heart! And if you really think I sounds like a "bubble gum teenage love shit"
Well, it's okay if you think that.. I know myself better than anyone..
So, I DON'T CARE

EDITED: I didn't expect this from you, -logic-

 

[Vasto Lordé]

If I'm to give my honest opinion, it's that;

Don't like it. Sounds like bubble gum teenage love shit to me. Well put together though, I'll give you that.

Also, please no replies telling me to stop 'hatin'. I'll neg rep you and report you.

Stop hatin!!!

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OT: Never was a poet or a critic of such genre, That poem's not my style seems too..... I don't know! but I see some effort put in there, and right at the beginning don't you mean "your" instead of "you're" ?

 

[basegirl]

i love this poem...it's awesome!<3
ps. you're starting to be one of my favorite members here....xd

 

[Naruto UzRinneganMaki]

didn't read, but looks awesome

 

[ll FREESTYLE ll]

Beautiful Work ~


+rep/thankies

 

[Shade Dracova]

Beautiful

 

[Naruto UzRinneganMaki]

First of all.. ThankyOuu so much everyone! I'm glad you all like it<3

And now you -logic- ... I don't care.. This is what I feel what I like to write.. Deep in my heart! And if you really think I sounds like a "bubble gum teenage love shit"
Well, it's okay if you think that.. I know myself better than anyone..
So, I DON'T CARE

EDITED: I didn't expect this from you, -logic-

But that's how I feel as well

 

[zoezoe]

nice poem
+rep xd

 

[Rorasa]

beautiful poem about life made my attitude a possitive one today. good job and please keep them coming ^_^

 

[Roby]

Ah beautiful great work lady <3!