[Other] I'll Lay Awake

Waindo

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yeah I know it's not good, deal with it.

Tonight I'll lay awake
Burdened by this fray inside my mind.
And this terrible ache,
I'm burning from the inside out;
All of my intestines are intertwined.

I'm feeling so weak,
And it's making me vomit.
I got no hands, I got no feet,
My eyes are sinking back to their sockets.

 

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yeah I know it's not good, deal with it.

So why you post it. :| You had doubts. When you have doubts, I have doubts.

You can do better. Sounds more like a short story. The person really stressed out or some addict.
 

Waindo

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I posted it cuz I'm stressed out and want to pour it out.
 

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I posted it cuz I'm stressed out and want to pour it out.

I see the perceptive. I cannot feel the emotion. Seems like you were holding back. It was a start tho if that counts.
 

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I have to agree on that...it's lame...
 
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