i need help with a poem

[Dave]

if you have any ideas on things to change or helpful comments it would help me a lot! its a poem about Bobby Jones that i have to for English


He is the world’s greatest golfer
Young golfers look at him as if he was a god
He is more than just a sports star
He is a LENGEN
In every tournament he completes
There is no comparison to the other players
The golfer who has proven himself in every test
Loved by millions beyond the border of the USA
The world’s unparalleled golfer (dose that sound right?)
Bobby Jones

 

[Nyanmaru]

Maybe it should rhyme.

 

[Dave]

Maybe it should rhyme.

my English teacher said rhyming is for 3rd graders

 

[UchihaBrat]

if you have any ideas on things to change or helpful comments it would help me a lot! its a poem about Bobby Jones that i have to for English


He is the world’s greatest golfer
Young golfers look at him as if he was a god
He is more than just a sports star
He is a LENGEN
In every tournament he completes
There is no comparison to the other players
The golfer who has proven himself in every test
Loved by millions beyond the border of the USA
The world’s unparalleled golfer (dose that sound right?)
Bobby Jones

It is good. I do feel it could be deeper in a way though, not that I know how:shrug: