I made this with my friend.. (Viewer Discretion Advised)

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII'm sittin here
killin this beat
chillin with friends
smokin this weed
stealin' your girl
rockin her world
beat you so hard
leave you lookin like earl
she suckin this ****
makin it slick
****in *****es wiid dis big ass ****
Ask Yoo Mom
she'll tell you too
made her so wet
we don't even need lube
we run a train
til the ***** plain
she suck the ****
til we cum on her shit
then we eat her ****
roll a blunt
smoke some loud
now we puffin on these strong ass clouds

*Chorus*
We Two White Boys
Smokin Th Strong
****in *****es cuz these dicks so long
( Background Voice ) *No Homo *
Making Stacks
Smokin Weed
But Everybody, All That's In The World Is Greed

slow it down a bit
and lets get down to buisness
im makin stacks
and fillin racks
as god as my witness
we 2 white boys but we still go hard
we still in schools but we not so smart
we still a success in ****in in bed
layin girls down and getting good head
But when thats all over she spreadin them legs
all for the dough
cuz shes a real Hoe
can't even see
rooms filled with smoke
camera is tapin
she moanin she naked
she love it
she want it
i know it
she got it
**** her till i bust a nut
then slap her on the butt and pass her to the team

*Chorus*
We Two White Boys
Smokin Th Strong
****in *****es cuz these dicks so long
( Background Voice ) *No Homo *
Making Stacks
Smokin Weed
But Everybody, All That's In The World Is Greed


I know we aren't very good and it doesn't flow too well but we are starting off after a LONG break so critique is requested.

 

[NarutAwesome]

I liked it....but the question you and your friend should ask yourselves is what sets you apart from the millions of other rappers in the world.....once you answer that question and do it then you'll know how to rap

 

[RaitonOniKairRasengan]

You're the next justin beiber of rap.

 

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

I liked it....but the question you and your friend should ask yourselves is what sets you apart from the millions of other rappers in the world.....once you answer that question and do it then you'll know how to rap

To be honest nothing really.
Besides how young we are

 

[Sephy100]

This is just awful and really gay.

 

[NarutAwesome]

To be honest nothing really.
Besides how young we are

are you into rap at all.....because it looks like you spent time on it

 

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

are you into rap at all.....because it looks like you spent time on it

I used to be on here and rap with you guys xD

But this took like an hour.

 

[NarutAwesome]

I used to be on here and rap with you guys xD

But this took like an hour.

yeah...I remember you bro.....would you be interested in joining an exclusive group of rappers on NB....I like your style and we can help you become better

 

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

Thanks, and I'm always open for tips.

 

[Sephy100]

The problem is that this has no substance. There's a,b,c 1,2,3 rhymes. No thought process at all. If you're gonna rap about the same thing as everybody then do it differently. Come up with punchlines and metaphors and make us think. Watch some battle rap, i.e Loaded Lux, Math Hoffa, etc..

 

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

The problem is that this has no substance. There's a,b,c 1,2,3 rhymes. No thought process at all. If you're gonna rap about the same thing as everybody then do it differently. Come up with punchlines and metaphors and make us think. Watch some battle rap, i.e Loaded Lux, Math Hoffa, etc..

Alright, I get what you mean and I'll work on it.

 

[King Envy G]

You're style is kind of similar to mine....... But I'm better............

 

[ITACHIUCHIA101]

You're style is kind of similar to mine....... But I'm better............

Lol, it's me and my friend mixed so it's not gonna be too accurate of my style.