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〜Angel Reborn〜

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My eyes are closed to the world

Yet all I see is you

You’re in my head

In my mind..

Everywhere I look

All I see is you…

Your eyes stare into mine

You gaze deep to my being

Rubbing salt in my wounds

Deepening my pain and sorrow

Why do you make world burn?

Can’t leave me alone?

Memories of the past clashes against me…

How is it things got to where we are now?

Why is it that you hurt me so much?

Thought of moments we had

And that smile you once gave me…

Why is it that my heart beats faster?

I hate this feeling

But why is it that this heart

Can’t hate you?

Even through this hurt and despair

Why is it that still love you….

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Hey guys. This is my first go at writing a poem after ages... PLZ Leave comments so I can Improve. No Flaming PLZ. Cheers :D
 

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Its like depression, instead of hurt. Not many who went through that sorta phase before. Not saying it was me. <LOL> It needs the following changes: it could be more of an enriched vocabulary, vivid description, emotional on a physiological level (more relate-able) centered/structured (optional), and/or longer (optional). Overall, I loved it.

I would "Thank You" or give "+Rep," but I can't at the moment.
 

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Im diggin it.
I like it. ;) Keep up the good work. :D
Thats some good work you have and continue with it.
Its like depression, instead of hurt. Not many who went through that sorta phase before. Not saying it was me. <LOL> It needs the following changes: it could be more of an enriched vocabulary, vivid description, emotional on a physiological level (more relate-able) centered/structured (optional), and/or longer (optional). Overall, I loved it.

I would "Thank You" or give "+Rep," but I can't at the moment.
w0w. Im feeling u. I kn0w what u mean. This is g0od. :hug:
Hey Thanx guys. Kichiro Fujimoto I will keep that in the mind for the future.

N Mia thanx ur the best <3 :love: <3
 
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