Heroes United ~ Collision of Worlds! : Enter The Two Heroes of Destiny!

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♆ Heroes United ~ Collision of Worlds! ♆

♆ Enter The Two Heroes of Destiny! ♆

*In Konoha, the Naruto was Hokage.., he married Hinata and had 2 kids Minato and Tsunade [named after the legendary Sannin] Tsunade was the advisor to Naruto. Sakura was the lead medical Ninja in the Village along with Ino and Hinata. Madara and Tobi had died in the War fighting Naruto. Kakashi became the village's Anbu Leader along with Yamato the Vice-Leader. The Village prevailed and flourished for 14 years. Minato was the eldest of Naruto's kids and learns under Iruka Sensei a Jounin now. Uchiha Sasuke returned konoha after the war and married Sakura had 2 kids... Itachi Uch.iha and Shisui Uchiha. *
~ This was from the Introduction.
~ Here's the continuation....
~ I will be continuing from the end of DBZ which means DBGT never happened...... So heres a breather.. - Naruto when 30 years old(after 14 years from war when naruto was 16) = Ending of DBZ timeline...

*Meanwhile in Kame House (House of Master Roshi and Krillin's permanent Home) Goku in his usual outfit comes out with Krillin, Android 18 (Krillin's wife), Krillin's little daughter Marron, Bulma and Master Roshi step out of the house.*

Goku: Okay guys... lets go..

Krillin: Comin' Goku.... Master Roshi take good care of Marron please...

Master Roshi: of course... you dont worry about a thing

Android 18: Yes.. Marron .. be a good girl okay? Daddy and I will be back soon ..

Marron: Yes mommy...

Goku: C'mon we have to pick up Goten and Gohan ... They told they wanted to come with us ...

Krillin: Okay.. 18 come lets go..

* The 3 of them depart from the island and go back to Goku's House *
* Now we go back to Konoha, Kage's Mansion, Naruto is on the roof feeling a little nostalgic and remembers about the past.. suddenly Kakashi and Yamato appear*

Kakashi: Naruto ... bored are we?

Naruto: Oh.. Hey Kakashi Sensei! what brings you two here???

Yamato: Well.. We wanted you warn you that our ANBU has suspected something suspicious going on in the outskirts of the Land of Fire..

Kakashi: The only info we have is that several ninjas were searching for something mystical and of great power...

Naruto: Huh? mystical? thats weird... what do you think it is? do you have any info on how they look like?

Kakashi: they were wearing completely white robes and their faces were covered with hoods...

Yamato: Thats the only thing we could get for now...

Naruto: I guess it would'nt be so harmful .. well they did'nt pose any threat did they?

Yamato: (uh.. he always says that and lets go of work so easily.....)

Kakashi: Naruto ... your the Hokage now you need to understand that its really important.. This is'nt child's play..

Naruto: okay okay ... jeez i just competed my paperwork...

Yamato: (and excusive like Tsunade-sama...)

Naruto: Well.. did you send ANBU units to spy on them?

Yamato: We were going to...

Naruto: Fine we'll standby for their reports and then act okay?

Kakashi: Your wish...

* They poof off *

Naruto: Finally .... I can go back into action *smiles*

* Meanwhile Goku, Krillin and 18 reach goku's house and pick up Goten and Gohan*

Gohan & Goten: Hey Dad! Hey Krillin and 18!

Pan: Grandpa!

Goku: Hey kids ! I'm here to pick you up...

Pan: aw... Daddy and uncle are gonna go ?

Goku: Dont worry we'll be back...

* They leave and on their way they meet up with Vegeta and Trunks*

Goku: Vegeta do you have the dragonball tracker?

Vegeta: Its with Trunks.. i'm just coming with you so that i can have some training beating up those knuckleheads trying to Get those balls..

Trunks: The nerve! they actually thought that they could get those balls for evil!

Goku: Yeah.. King Kai warned us that there was an organisation of people trying to collect the Dragon balls for evil-sake..

Vegeta: Organisation?

Goku: Well not really a huge one.. they consist of 12 people... really powerful ones...

Vegeta: What?! i tagged along with all of you for the sake of 12 people??!!!

Krillin: Dont underestimate them so easily... King Kai said that they have unbelievable amount KI levels...

Vegeta: I see...

*They set off insearch of the Balls!*
* One Day passes and Kakashi returns to Naruto with shocking news..*

Naruto: What?!

Kakashi: Thats right...

Naruto: They actually killed the advanced unit in seconds?? this is huge.. (I guess we have to get serious...) Send word to all the Villages as warning messages about this...

Kakashi: Yes .. will do.. (hmm.. even hes getting serious.. we have to stay on guard....)


Both Heroes are getting ready for something really big! what is it? Find out at the next Chapter!


Chapter 2: Mysterious Organistion


stay tuned for the latest chapter next week!!!!
 

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Alright, HEEEERRRREEESSS REVIEW TIME!!!

What I liked:
Concept was outstanding in the introduction thread. (1)
Use of the personalities (.5)
Organization (1)

What I dislike:
Overuse of (...) (.5)
Description (1)
Overuse of script style (I have nothing against script style, but there is too much so far.) (1)
Roboticness (That's not a word) of everyone other than the main characters. (1)

Total rating so far:

2.5/6

I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to help!
 

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Alright, HEEEERRRREEESSS REVIEW TIME!!!

What I liked:
Concept was outstanding in the introduction thread. (1)
Use of the personalities (.5)
Organization (1)

What I dislike:
Overuse of (...) (.5)
Description (1)
Overuse of script style (I have nothing against script style, but there is too much so far.) (1)
Roboticness (That's not a word) of everyone other than the main characters. (1)

Total rating so far:

2.5/6

I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to help!
np, your review just gave me alot of ideas.. thank you so much ^^
 

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Sorry guys but i might delay the next chapter because i'm really busy in real life and going to face exams so pls wait patiently (not that i have fans or anything)
 
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