Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part I

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HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
[Infernal Rebirth]

Act XVII

Surrender

Part I

[Setting Change: Castle room; Tiberiu’s location]

Lulian: (Shouts) I’ve known of your appendages and how that power has helped you throughout all this time!

Lulian: (Shouts) You’ve had them out all this time but what is the meaning!-

Lulian: (Shouts) I’ve always wondered what type of hybrid you are and how this strange power came to be..

Lulian: Don’t you know yourself?

Tiberiu: (Shouts) I don’t and I’ve never really cared-

Tiberiu: (Shouts) So as long as it helps me to crush you!

Lulian: Since you will not answer me I suppose this game will come to an end..

Tiberiu: (Shouts) What!

Lulian: Don’t be so naive-

Lulian: (Shouts) You and the filth you’ve assembled have all been in a game I’ve created-

Lulian: (Shouts) This game began ever since we parted!

Tiberiu: ...a game..

Lulian: Yes! A game of revenge you see..

Lulian: (Shouts) I’m the one who is justified in avenging you!

Lulian: As-

Lulian: (Shouts) I took you in..taught you everything..even our ability to use blood weapons!

Lulian: (Screams) AND YET YOU BETAYED THE ONE WHO LOVED YOU THE MOST!!!!!

Narrator: Once again he strikes the floor with his stake cane with malice as Tiberiu is suddenly stricken with the backlash of Lulian’s ever growing black aura as he is flung against the wall.

Tiberiu: (Screams) Ggghhhhh!!!

Narrator: His body then cracks the barrier placed upon the room’s walls as the black aura rushes onto the mutated vampire and as a result of the impact he is then hurled through the wall and falls several feet to the large room’s floor below.

Lulian: The room below where it all comes to an end..*snicker*

Tiberiu: *Panting* Ven..er.a...

[Setting Change: Castle room; Neculai’s location]

Pureblood Follower II: (In thought) This is the biggest turn on yet!

Narrator: She thought as Neculai decided to commence in piercing their bodies.

Pureblood Follower II: As if I’d allow that-

Narrator: Just as each blade moved in through the user’s body, she then envelops herself in a deep gray colored aura which acted as a great defense.

Pureblood Follower II: I’m impressed you know the blood and or aura will never harm the user..

Neculai: (In thought) Still she was able to intercept that attack..

Pureblood Follower II: If you wanted our bodies to touch all you had to do was ask..*snickers*

Pureblood Follower II: I love my master but after first laying eyes on you I have to say I think I’m torn...

Neculai: (In thought) What!

Neculai: Actually I am attracted to you myself-

Pureblood Follower II: I did not want to hear that as if this isn’t difficult enough-

Neculai: It doesn’t have to be..

Pureblood Follower II: ...

[Setting Change: Castle room; Octavian’s location]

Octavian: (In thought) You were truly a formidable opponent child..

Octavian: (In thought) I have somewhere to be-

Octavian: (In thought) Now for a way out of here..

Narrator: With the battle settled the hybrid Lythimpir examines the room exit and soon learns of the barrier.

Octavian: (In thought) Wait for me my leader..

[Setting Change: Castle room; Attila’s location]

Attila: (In thought) So fast!

Narrator: Disappearing and reappearing; he uses this strategy to confuse Attila.

Pureblood Follower I: (Shouts) You will not falter master’s plans!

Attila: (Shouts) I will if it means getting back to my master!

Narrator: By reforming his weapon; Attila then launches it and collects one of the steaks.

Pureblood Follower I: (Shouts) That will do you no good!

Narrator: Enraged by the elder vampire’s accomplishments; the aura cloaked pureblood reforms his weapon and abruptly appears before him.

Attila: (In thought) This is the only way!

Pureblood Follower I: (Shouts) How-

Narrator: Stunned by viewing the turned vampire’s weapon growing instantaneously as it stretched past his abdomen slicing through in a spinning motion. Though he is able to keep his body in place due to his aura. He then takes the stake and as he attempts to strike his arm is quickly grasped by the pureblood.

Pureblood Follower I: *Panting* Gha..

Pureblood Follower I: (In thought) He decided to wait for me to come to him and then trap me *panting*

Pureblood Follower I: (In thought) Master told us about this but I couldn’t believe that a lesser vampire could be a strong as a pureblood if I didn’t see it with my own eyes *panting*

Narrator: The two struggle as they release the last of their aura.

Attila: (In thought) So it seems we're both at our limits..

Narrator: A flashback then ensues Attila's mind.

*Flashback*

Narrator: A hooded male was walking through alleyways in search of food when he sees a kid seemingly dead on the ground.

Hooded Male: You okay kid!

Kid: Uhhh....what happened to m-

Hooded Male: You’ve been bitten..

Kid: (Shouts) What!!!

Hooded Male: (In thought) It appears that you were bitten not by a pureblood like me as you would’ve been dead instead-

Hooded Male: Calm down..nothing can undue this so you will have to accept and live with this..

Kid: No way!

Hooded Male: I was bitten as well a long time ago-

Hooded Male: Say where is your family?

Kid: I don’t have one..

Hooded male: (In thought) An orphan huh?

Hooded Male: I see...well I could use the company if you don’t mind..

Kid: .....Well I have no where else to go..

Hooded Male: So what is your name?

Kid: Neculai..and yours?

Hooded Male: Attila..

*Flashback Ends*

Pureblood Follower I: *Panting* You!

Narrator: Much to his shock, Attila prevails in piercing his heart through the will to live on.

Attila: Its over..

Narrator: His victory is short lived however as the elder vampire's eyes gradually begin to close and his body collapses on the floor.

[Setting Change: Castle room; Rahmah’s location]

Rahmah: (In thought) I don’t have time for this!

Narrator: Her form changes into Earth materials once more and she then races past the Bokor.

Bokor: (Shouts) You think you can escape me!!!

Rahmah: (In thought) The only thing I could do is be alert to any noises..

Bokor: (Shouts) Master will not be interrupted!

Narrator: As she moves throughout the endless corridors what is left behind is a flood of sand.

Bokor: (Shouts) Is this the best you can do?!

Rahmah: (In thought) I've come this far!

Narrator: What enabled him to pass through her sand were swirls of an intense red-orange colored fire that held the form of a phoenix’s head at the end of the blazing stream that quickly incinerated the sand masses.

Rahmah: (In thought) For how long can I bare this?!

Narrator: White colored fire plumes are shot through his pillar onto the Ghoul as she takes on some of the onslaught.

Rahmah: (In thought) This seems like an endless maze!

Rahmah: ...An opening!

[Setting Change: Castle room; Neculai’s location]

Neculai: Run away with me!

Pureblood Follower II: ...What are you saying?

Neculai: I’m saying take a chance on me

Pureblood Follower II: (In thought) I’m in love with master but he has never returned those feelings and he knows how I feel but this one-

Pureblood Follower II: Notices me..

Pureblood Follower II: I would like to but he will not allow this to take place..he decides all of our-

Neculai: You still take us so lightly?

Neculai: Me and my team we’re all here fighting right?

Pureblood Follower II: Correct he desired for us purebloods to fight your team-

Pureblood Follower II: Render you all defeated and chain you up in the room where you could witness your leader’s death..

Neculai: If I’m not dead yet then they aren’t either and our main goal was to take him down and we will!

Pureblood Follower II: You say that so confidently-

Pureblood Follower II: (In thought) He has even let down his attack...it almost makes me not worry..

Neculai: I need to assist my leader in this fight and afterwards-

*Kiss*

Neculai: *Blush* What was that fo-

Narrator: Taking a few steps back; she then raises her weapon and she spins herself around. Her image is blurred by the increased whirled motion as she unleashes intense grayish beam projectiles onto the room entrance. The barrier is soon cracked. She removes her cloak and hands it to him as he then accepts.

Pureblood Follower II: Go then..I will entrust our fate in your hands..

Neculai: Wait for me here..

[Setting Change: Castle large central room; Rahmah’s location]

Narrator: What lies at the end is an enormous room with a gashed up bloodied Tiberiu forcefully on his feet and pinned by Lulian’s aura, two hooded purebloods standing on each side of an unconscious Venera tied up, overhanging on the west wall.

Rahmah: This is our fate-

Narrator: She then defends her back from the white fire magic with an Earth material casing.

Bokor: Master..

Lulian: It appears we have a small audience *snickers*

Act XVII Part I End

Who will survive?


[ Monster Encyclopedia ]

The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

In Attila/Neculai’s case, after having their leader’s aura infused into themselves later on in an emotional state invokes them to awaken heightened abilities as a result to the absorbed aura surpassing a turned vampire thus making them unique. They both in the beginning lose control as the power-up overwhelms their willpower. However, once the initial awakening stage has occurred and passed will they be able to begin controlling their new powers.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

Appearance: In the requirement for more power; Tiberiu undergoes a slight mutation in terms of his body becoming enveloped by a sphere of his own aura and a limb-like appendage that grew on his upper back; blood red in color. The next occurrence results in a second blood red colored limb to have risen and the initial limb has changed into a black color though his aura seems to take a longer time to retract. The following time a third blood red colored limb rises while the previous limbs; the initial turning black and second retaining the blood red color and it has also taken an even longer time for his aura to retract. Tiberiu’s fourth invoke for more power enforces his three appendages to extend; the initial limb black, the second blood red and the final limb which changed into a white color. When the required power had been met it then withdraws.

[Insight: Lycanthrope]

Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

[Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

[Insight: Lythimpir]

Description: Is a self named term Octavian gives himself and is unique to him as he transcended from that of a Lycanthrope by means of drinking the blood of a mutated vampire. It’s power differs by the vampire who offered his/her blood. This hybrid form is unique.

Appearance: His hybrid form is completed as his hair takes on a raven color and grows out above his lower back, bat-like ears replace the lycanthrope ears, the lycanthrope snout retracts creating a more humanoid visage, irises slit in two colored silver and raven which overlap each other resembling an x. He gains vampire fangs. His body from head to toe becomes silver colored and is elongated. The waist down is covered in raven colored fur. Bat-like wings; raven in color protrude one from the right arm and left leg located on the right side of his wrist and from the back of his ankle that spread with a wingspan of about six feet. His tail thinned out and grew several feet in length. His healing capabilities, strength and stamina have heightened.

[Insight: Mahr]

Description: Is a female goblin which rides on people's chests while they sleep inducing nightmares while their weight causes the victim to have difficulty breathing. It’s origin is Germany.

Appearance: Is a female spirit or goblin with a hideous visage. The goblin’s body is yellow-greenish in color, stout and when crawling on its victim which are usually female; will be in a sitting position on the chest area.

[Insight: Dhampiresa]

Description: Is a type of vampire hybrid who is birthed from a vampire father and human mother. Thus is half vampire half human and the male counterpart is named Dhampir. They will usually be carrying weapons and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity. It's origin is Balkan.

Appearance: Her weapons are a crossbow with arrows made of silver and wooden stakes as well as a long pointed end sword made of silver; forged into a close appearance to that of a crucifix thus far have been revealed.

[Insight: Hybrid Dhampiresa]

Description: In Venera’s case, a Dhampiresa who consumed blood of a differing ethnic creature; a Lythimpir thus making this form unique.

Appearance: Venera’s pre-hybrid form causes her irises to gain two extra slits on the bottom perpendicular to each other appearing as an upside down T; glowing orchid color. Her hybrid form completes as her hair grows out past her thighs, hands and fingers stretch five inches as her finger nails grow over three inches becoming claw-like, ankles elongate as her feet stretch out and toenails grow over five inches appearing claw-like as well, two slits join the single irises creating a reversed T glowing orchid in color. Strength and stamina are heightened.

[Insight: Berserk DNA Hybrid Dhampiresa]

Description: This occurred as a result of her weakened body not being able to stabilize the blood changes and thus her own blood combats the Lythimpir blood which invokes her DNA to alter her body. This form is unique to the Dhampir solely.

Appearance: Her body then begins to float and convulses. Hair turning completely red-violet, veins protruding as well as amethyst colored slash wounds mark her entire body, the sclera becomes black in color as the irises and pupils turn indigo and her clothes become tethered. The altering seems to have affected her persona and abilities.

[Insight: Zombie]

Description: Is a corpse reanimated by a sorcerer through a spell. It’s origin is Haiti.

Appearance: The corpse is no one in particular as the sorcerer simply will cast their spell over any grave sight. However, the sorcerer is sure to use a fresh corpse as it will be much more sustainable for the commands than a decomposed body. Although, the corpse will become greatly disfigured through the spell’s process.

[Insight: Bokor]

Description: Is a sorcerer who uses black and white magic to cast spells, curses or to create creatures. It’s origin is Haiti.

[Insight: Ghoul]

Description: Is a desert dwelling jinn possessing the ability to change its form into any animal or human. Their true form is that of a spirit. It’s origin is Arabia.

Appearance: Golden colored mist appearing in the form of a footless demon. Every Ghoul’s true form varies.

[Insight: Wyvern]

Description: Is a legendary two winged, two legged, single tailed creature. It’s origin is Great Britain.

Appearance: It’s body is ruby red in color, completely covered in spikes, having no arms and a barbed tail.

[Insight: Lindworm]

Description: Is a legendary wingless creature with a long body, bipedal and single tail with a venomous bite. It’s origin is Germany.

Appearance: It’s body has a emerald green color, lengthy serpentine body and has parts of its body intertwined.

[Insight: Guivre]

Description: Is a legendary creature with a long body and horned head who spreads plagues through its breath. It’s origin is France.

Appearance: It’s body has a sapphire blue color, long serpentine body, the single tail splits in two at the end and has five horns on the head; it’s forehead containing largest two.

[Insight: Golem]

Description: Is a mythical construct created to serve its creator; either a greatly empowered sorcerer or wizard. It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud; resembling a humanoid. This construct has no mind, soul and cannot speak. It’s origin is Jewish.

Appearance: It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud thus the body will have a brownish color of sorts; resembling a humanoid. It has no mind, soul and cannot speak.

[Insight: Căpcăun]

Description: This is a type of ogre having the head of a dog and body of a man. It is muscular and usually carries a club of sorts. Although, sometimes it can have two heads.

Appearance: A cruel and bloodthirsty creature this is. They can range from giant to dwarf size and are strong. Their bodies’ colors vary but are usually in the brownish area. The head resembles that of a dog and the body are humanoid appearing like a muscular man.

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WOW! The main battle approaches I guess with everyone gathering in the same room :) I liked how Neculai and the pureblood that was sent to fight him fell in love xd This was a truly marvelous chapter, I am glad I found the time to read it with all the stuff going on in real life for me. Do not worry about letting us readers down with chapters, I don't believe that is possible :p
 

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WOW! The main battle approaches I guess with everyone gathering in the same room :) I liked how Neculai and the pureblood that was sent to fight him fell in love xd This was a truly marvelous chapter, I am glad I found the time to read it with all the stuff going on in real life for me. Do not worry about letting us readers down with chapters, I don't believe that is possible :p
That is very perceptive of you. I am pleased that someone actually likes the twist I gave with Neculai and the pureblood ^.^; Thank you for taking the time to read and comment as well as for your compliment which means a lot as I have thoughts about this fanfiction sinking rather than a success. However, with such remarks as you/naruto kyuubi I'm beginning not to feel that way ;)
 

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I don't know if it was purposed - as perhaps this was a build-up since your last chapters are in parts -but I was left a bit hungry after this chapter. It wasn’t bad but some things didn't connect to me.

Firstly, the love twist between Neculai and that pureblood was odd. The kiss scene could have changed the thing though but you didn't detail the kiss. Nonetheless, bravo for the daring twist though cause it was something risky to put a twist in the middle of the battle. While, in my eyes, you could have pulled it off better, in others eyes' it might seem to be a very good twist. You definitely did better twists before in other chapters and even the love interest of Tiberiu and Venera was better in my eyes.

The second thing that disappointed me was the emotional declaration by Lulian. After so much build-up on Lulian and his sick character, it could have been some other vile reason; though the ending was pin-point.

The saving grace of this chapter was the good battle depiction of Attila. Very well-done. I like the turns very much of how this is turning now; especially where Octavia and Rahmah stand now. Also, Rahmah's battle is getting very interesting now. And yeah, your language always highlights a chapter. That unwary talent of yours never really results in a bad chapter. Yeah, in my eyes, this chapter was an OK chapter but far from bad. I’m anticipating a lot now…​
 

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I don't know if it was purposed - as perhaps this was a build-up since your last chapters are in parts -but I was left a bit hungry after this chapter. It wasn’t bad but some things didn't connect to me.

Firstly, the love twist between Neculai and that pureblood was odd. The kiss scene could have changed the thing though but you didn't detail the kiss. Nonetheless, bravo for the daring twist though cause it was something risky to put a twist in the middle of the battle. While, in my eyes, you could have pulled it off better, in others eyes' it might seem to be a very good twist. You definitely did better twists before in other chapters and even the love interest of Tiberiu and Venera was better in my eyes.

The second thing that disappointed me was the emotional declaration by Lulian. After so much build-up on Lulian and his sick character, it could have been some other vile reason; though the ending was pin-point.

The saving grace of this chapter was the good battle depiction of Attila. Very well-done. I like the turns very much of how this is turning now; especially where Octavia and Rahmah stand now. Also, Rahmah's battle is getting very interesting now. And yeah, your language always highlights a chapter. That unwary talent of yours never really results in a bad chapter. Yeah, in my eyes, this chapter was an OK chapter but far from bad. I’m anticipating a lot now…​
I was disappointed to hear that. I mean I know that not all my decisions would be taken in welcoming but if some of my viewers weren't necessarily happy with it-it affects me. However, I am someone who likes those twists and turns and I suppose this one between Neculai/female pureblood wasn't the strongest. Detail is complex for me. When I read your fanfictions, detailing seems to come off naturally for you and for me it is the very difficult. I also seem to forget to give certain areas the details it deserves and the story can suffer some as a result which is what happened here -_- I was somewhat nervous about how I'd go about Lulian's character as the chapters continued seeing as his character was alike the interesting Bokor. I suppose I didn't give his dialogue the attention needed. Thank you for your comments on the battles on Attila/Rahmah and my language ^.^
 

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Ah, Looks Like Neculai Finally Struck Home With That Pureblood, Lol. That's One Piece Of Good News, At Least. On The Other Hand, It Appears That Attila Is Down And Out Yet Again, And It Doesn't Seem Like He'll Be Returning, Either. It's Great That His Sheer Willpower Was Enough To Keep Him Going And Take Out His Enemy Though - And The Flashback You Added As He Was Nearing The Last Few Seconds Of His Life Was Well Thought Out - Its Just Like Some Of The Anime I've Seen Before; Great Work, Yet Again.
 

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Ah, Looks Like Neculai Finally Struck Home With That Pureblood, Lol. That's One Piece Of Good News, At Least. On The Other Hand, It Appears That Attila Is Down And Out Yet Again, And It Doesn't Seem Like He'll Be Returning, Either. It's Great That His Sheer Willpower Was Enough To Keep Him Going And Take Out His Enemy Though - And The Flashback You Added As He Was Nearing The Last Few Seconds Of His Life Was Well Thought Out - Its Just Like Some Of The Anime I've Seen Before; Great Work, Yet Again.
Yes, I received much mixed review from the sudden love between the pureblood and turned vampire lol I'm glad you liked what I did as I think there was more disappointment in that decision but I respect everyone's opinions. Attila was definitely a character that I messed around with a lot lol Thank you for the comparison to Naruto. I enjoyed including his flashback and hoped others would as well ;) Thank you for commenting ^.^
 
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