Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act I: Secret

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HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
[Infernal Rebirth]

Act I:

Secret

Prologue: A vampire and his followers went out for a night of feeding on whom ever they could sink their fangs into. The head of the group; a wealthy pure blood encounters a harlot walking alone and he decides to make her his. She is dragged into a secluded alleyway as he molests her thinking to himself that he loved biting young woman and men as much as he loved sleeping with them. Fangs enlarge, veins begin to protrude the face and irises change into a crimson vertical slit. He proceeds to bite the distraught female’s neck.

Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pure-Blood Vampire]

Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

Hunger still unsatisfied even after sucking her dry, he leaps onto a building jumping from roof to roof in search of his next meal when he senses an unusual transformation underway. What lies at the end of the felt trail is a male with bite marks across his neck undergoing the process. Veins begin to protrude all over his body as he uncontrollably convulses. His iris begin to slit vertically with one appearing horizontal and turns bluish-black both glowing intensively. The new evolution soon completes as he lies still and silent on the ground. The pureblood vampire is aware that this is a mutation of some sort though even as knowledgeable as he was the exact form could not be identified.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

His followers are soon ordered to transport the wounded male back to his castle. Some hours later, the adolescent awakes to find a man starring out a window at the full lit moon. Given previous thought to the risk of being involved with someone such as a hybrid, the pure vampire turns slightly to the side as he began to falsely instigate how the young male’s life would be lived as a turned vampire. The elder vampiric male Lulian, presents a proposal as he concludes with the decision to make the young lad his. In which Tiberiu; a runaway who felt weak, confused, vulnerable and somewhat in disbelief reluctantly accepts.

[Protagonist Character Insight:
Tiberiu]

Hair: Long, black, kept in a ponytail
Eyes: Blue
Weight: 142
Height: 5‘10
Ethnicity: Unknown
Gender: Male
Age: 19

[Main Character Insight:
Lulian]

Hair: Long, brunette colored, kept loose
Eyes: Green
Weight: 149
Height: 6‘3
Ethnicity: Romanian
Gender: Male
Age: Mid 20-30 (Appearance wise)

He eventually grows possessive and obsessive over his new apprentice as he then places him under a hypnosis through his eyes. The hypnotism can only be enforced by vampires of high rank such as a purebred and it can force the victim to abide by the caster’s commands. In this case, he chooses for Tiberiu to become captivated by him. Unable to combat the induced mental state, he falsely becomes involved with his new master.

His story continues to unfold...

[Date Setting: Dec. 08 1815]

[Location Setting: Sighisoara City, Mures County, Transylvania, Romania, Lulian’s Castle]

*Coffin lid creaks open*

Lulian: Don’t be too long.....

Tiberiu: I understand..

Narrator: The young male slips out of the casket, dresses up and quickly exits the castles right wing window.

Tiberiu: (In thought) Why won’t master fully trust me?

Narrator: Thoughts consumed the mutated vampire as he neared the pub. Suddenly a dark figure appears under a nearby bridge as he glares at Tiberiu.

Lulian: (In thought) What entices you so that you must leave my side?

Lulian: (Continued in thought) You have been watched every time you leave and this is where you end up...always..

Narrator: Paranoia, obsession and mistrust leads Lulian to spy on his apprentice every time he steps foot out of the castle.

Lulian: (In thought) I can trail you until I find the answer however I much rather want to trust you my pet...therefore this is enough to quell my uneasy heart..

Narrator: Blatant inebriated people exit the packed pub as the young hybrid arrives.

[Setting Change: Sighisoara City, Amurg Pub]

*Commotion*

Narrator: All eyes are plastered upon the adolescent as he enters the pub. One seated man in an infuriated state sees Tiberiu and decides to take his troubles out on him.

Pub Customer: Hey! ...hand me your money...

Tiberiu: ...

*Chair falls*

Narrator: Outraged at the fact that the adolescent ignores his order, he dashes into Tiberiu’s direction knocking over his chair as he gets into his face.

Pub Customer: (Shouting) Look at me when I’m talking!

Tiberiu: I’d rather you leave me al-

*Punch sound*

Narrator: His head slightly turns to the side from the hit.

Pub Customer: Haha..is your head made of bri-

*Slap sound*

*Crash sound*

Narrator: Plunged to the ground by the powerful slap Tiberiu inflicts instantly knocks him out. He then makes his way to a stool as the crowd of drunken men and woman continue to carry on with their laughter and whatnot.

Female Pub Server: Here you go..

Tiberiu: Thank you

Narrator: His piercing eyes connect with hers as he unawarely stares.

Female Pub Server: ...Tiberiu..is something wrong?

Tiberiu: ....

*Snapping fingers sound*

Tiberiu: ..Oh I’m sorry...I was lost in your beautiful gaze Lavinia..

[Female Pub Server’s identity revealed]

[Side Character Insight:
Lavinia]

Hair: Long, blonde, kept in a bun
Eyes: Hazel
Weight: 130
Height: 5‘9
Ethnicity: Half Romanian Half Hungarian
Gender: Female
Age: 18

Lavinia: *Blushes* (Whispers) Not now...you know I’m working..

Tiberiu: (Whispers) I know..

Lavinia: (Whispers) My shift ends soon though...

Tiberiu: I see...

[Setting Change: Sighisoara City, Alleyway]

Narrator: To quench his thirst, Lulian locates a loner walking the quiet streets and abducts him.

Lulian: (In thought) Well at least I won’t go hungry..*snickers*

Narrator: Fangs pierce open the victim’s neck as Lulian begins to deplete his blood.

Victim: (Stuttering) Ple..as...I’ll....gi..ve.yo-

Lulian: (Low tone) Save your breath for you have become my pray...I have enough followers therefore you will be sucked dry..

*Squirting sound*

Narrator: Blood gushed out and splattered all over the narrow passageway walls as the vampire continued to feed keeping an ear open for the slightest sound.

Lulian: I hope I didn’t take too long as I must continue to check up on my beloved property.

[Setting Change: Amurg Pub]

*Giggling sound*

Lavinia: I wish you’d take me out somewhere..I mean I love spending time with you but I would like to go out with you...

Tiberiu: ...Forgive me

Lavinia: It’s okay..I love you anyways...

Narrator: The two began making out. Unbeknownst to the mutated vampire, his heterosexual urges began to awaken from time to time and eventually struggled against the powerful hypnosis thus the reasons behind his actions. Eyes widen profoundly as Lulian witnesses something he had long feared.

Lulian: (In thought) .....Has..my spell weakened or is it willpower?

*Crazy laughter*

Narrator: A powerful and violent black aura emitted from the mentally unstable and distressed pure blood.

Lulian: Tiberiu you are my possession..only mine and yet you do this to me? You will pay for this I vow...

Act I End

Tiberiu’s secret has come to light, how will Lulian mingle with this revelation?


[ Monster Encyclopedia ]

The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

† Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

† Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

† Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

† Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

† Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

† Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

† In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

Seemingly only the main title:p


Anyways Kuroi, I loved your comeback my friend!:D A really nice first chapter, with a perfect dose of character intel, story and conversation.

This looks to be a promising story, which I'll follow for sure. Keep up my friend, looking forward to chapter 2;)
 
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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

At first i was like "OMG is he seriously gonna make this story revolve around blood sucking vampires..??"
But in the end i was like " yeh its gonna be a fanfic about vampires ...sigh"
This actually reminds me of blade, i disliked blade 1 & 2 becase there was to much blood sucking but blade 3 was awesome due to more killing and less sucking...
we'll Kuroi nice details on the summary but im still unsure about this one...we will have to wait and see what you have instored for us..
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

Well if you are asking if I am Norwegian the answer is no as I am Puerto Rican lol

Seemingly only the main title:p


Anyways Kuroi, I loved your comeback my friend!:D A really nice first chapter, with a perfect dose of character intel, story and conversation.

This looks to be a promising story, which I'll follow for sure. Keep up my friend, looking forward to chapter 2;)
You know my friend you never know as things are sometimes not what they seem to appear to be. There will always be reasoning behind anything I do so what for it. Thank you for your support and overall approval of my work lol Also, what a relief it is as I thought I did not add enough character depth but with what you’ve stated I feel better now lol I am looking forward to releasing the next one ;p

At first i was like "OMG is he seriously gonna make this story revolve around blood sucking vampires..??"
But in the end i was like " yeh its gonna be a fanfic about vampires ...sigh"
This actually reminds me of blade, i disliked blade 1 & 2 becase there was to much blood sucking but blade 3 was awesome due to more killing and less sucking...
we'll Kuroi nice details on the summary but im still unsure about this one...we will have to wait and see what you have instored for us..
You have almost left me speechless. I am shocked by your post only because I thought everyone would like a vampire story however, much to my surprise there are those who are not too into this folkloric tale. Now, I completely understand as the vampire has been used over and over in countless ways so I know why you said what you said. I am very grateful for your insight as I like to know what people truly think and you did not hold back lol I think my Fanfic will not be displeasing however, we do all have our personal opinions. Thank you for even continuing to follow my work and for the compliments. I think the rest is promising though your feedback will be one I will be looking forward to read as I will be able to know if I’ve failed or not to present a somewhat original vampire story which no lie-was my goal with this Fanfic.
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret



Well if you are asking if I am Norwegian the answer is no as I am Puerto Rican lol



You know my friend you never know as things are sometimes not what they seem to appear to be. There will always be reasoning behind anything I do so what for it. Thank you for your support and overall approval of my work lol Also, what a relief it is as I thought I did not add enough character depth but with what you’ve stated I feel better now lol I am looking forward to releasing the next one ;p



You have almost left me speechless. I am shocked by your post only because I thought everyone would like a vampire story however, much to my surprise there are those who are not too into this folkloric tale. Now, I completely understand as the vampire has been used over and over in countless ways so I know why you said what you said. I am very grateful for your insight as I like to know what people truly think and you did not hold back lol I think my Fanfic will not be displeasing however, we do all have our personal opinions. Thank you for even continuing to follow my work and for the compliments. I think the rest is promising though your feedback will be one I will be looking forward to read as I will be able to know if I’ve failed or not to present a somewhat original vampire story which no lie-was my goal with this Fanfic.
Um, sorry to use this thread this way and I hope I don't get in trouble but you should get on MS sometime, it's been a while bro.
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

Owkay, I had to read thrice and am still lost. Lost about predicting how this would turn out to be. And if there is something I want to foresee, it just means that I'm looking forward to this story. Your writing style is quite unique, I must say. And I'm left hanging and confused about some things. I'm sure I'll find out though in the next chaps.

But oh, I had to revisit your picture after reading Tiberiu's description.xdLOL!
 

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I'll wait for the next chapters before giving a further review.
I'm quite unsure about this, i hope you don't pull a teen "Twilight" salad tossing rimming of the ass f*ck freak fangy festival.
The writting is as good as ever, i'm just unsure about the route you gonna take us with this and the character development.
 

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I'll wait for the next chapters before giving a further review.
I'm quite unsure about this, i hope you don't pull a teen "Twilight" salad tossing rimming of the ass f*ck freak fangy festival.
The writting is as good as ever, i'm just unsure about the route you gonna take us with this and the character development.
LOL! A teen Twilightxd That got into my mind, too. But, I don't think this one will be.
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

Hmm... Is Lulian female? Because he/she seems a bit jealous about Tiberiu making out with Lavinia?
 

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I am glad to see you starting a new fanfic, Kuroi :DI liked it so far, but let me see how the next few chapters will develop and then I will give my firm opinion :) By the way, I started some vampire story a year ago but it remained just a few pages of a word file as I had other things to do and then forgot about it, thanks for reminding me :p
 

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Re: Helvetes Fødsel [Infernal Birth] Act 1: Secret

Owkay, I had to read thrice and am still lost. Lost about predicting how this would turn out to be. And if there is something I want to foresee, it just means that I'm looking forward to this story. Your writing style is quite unique, I must say. And I'm left hanging and confused about some things. I'm sure I'll find out though in the next chaps.

But oh, I had to revisit your picture after reading Tiberiu's description.xdLOL!
Thank you for the compliment ^.^ I actually envisioned the main character Tiberiu as how I would like to look lol However, the fact that you had to review my real life picture, made me chuckle ;)

I'll wait for the next chapters before giving a further review.
I'm quite unsure about this, i hope you don't pull a teen "Twilight" salad tossing rimming of the ass f*ck freak fangy festival.
The writting is as good as ever, i'm just unsure about the route you gonna take us with this and the character development.
Thanks for your compliment and I can assure you and or anyone else who suspects that my Fanfiction is based off/a remake of the horrid film that is Twilght lol
I am glad to see you starting a new fanfic, Kuroi :DI liked it so far, but let me see how the next few chapters will develop and then I will give my firm opinion :) By the way, I started some vampire story a year ago but it remained just a few pages of a word file as I had other things to do and then forgot about it, thanks for reminding me :p
Thank you for the support ;) It seems like a lot of this is going around how everyone will have to wait and see for the next chapters in order to get a better feeling about my Fanfic. Although, I am happy to hear everybody’s honest opinions over my work. I just hope that the following chapters will not disappoint. Your welcome for my indirectly reminding you about your past work lol ;)

Edit: Update

Due to some of the viewers having difficulty depicting the genders of my characters I have edited it into this chapter and will be doing so for the following chapters lol
 
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Heeyyyyyyyy I'm not gonna lie, I liked Black Despair better, but that's probably because I'm not the biggest fan of Vampires (I'm more of a werewolf guy >:]) But as always, the writing and character insights keep the story fresh. I'll have to wait for the next editions to make my final call, but it looks pretty good so far! Talk to ya later ~Haka~
 

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Heeyyyyyyyy I'm not gonna lie, I liked Black Despair better, but that's probably because I'm not the biggest fan of Vampires (I'm more of a werewolf guy >:]) But as always, the writing and character insights keep the story fresh. I'll have to wait for the next editions to make my final call, but it looks pretty good so far! Talk to ya later ~Haka~
Well, thanks for the compliment. I hope the following chaps are pleasing lol
Nice:p:) So when might we expect the next chapter?:p
Well, I've just answered that lol However, I will be posting an update over that next.
When might we expect your next chapter? :D Don't you dare rush Kuroi :p
lol

Update: My apologies for the wait. I have been busy spreading the word, etc. I will be releasing the next chapter either tomorrow or the next day after. Thank you all for your patience ;)
 

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[COLOR/]Update: My apologies for the wait. I have been busy spreading the word, etc. I will be releasing the next chapter either tomorrow or the next day after. Thank you all for your patience ;)[/COLOR][/FONT]​
Danivass just won't give me a breakxd

Good to hear, looking forward to it:)
 
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