G.P. (( siko's mission )) special: chapter 4 ( a snake reborn ) and 5

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about the previous chapters :

chapter 1 : siko got out of his village without his village knowing ( permission ) to the ss mission that was for the most powerfull team of his village garaiam with his friend luna to konoha as the mission was about destroying the nine-tailed .. ( link : )

chapter 2 : they went to konoha and the spreaded to search konoha for its hockage ( naruto of the nine taled beast ) in siko's way he find a bo that encounter siko with rasengans , and in the end the boys name was spoken JARAYIA UZUMAKI . ( link : )

chapter 3 : the battle between jarayia and siko ends with siko winning it and siko passed out .. wake up in an hospital nearby jarayia as jarayia wake up they talked and get to know each other more and get to e friends .. siko told jarayia about the mission .. as jarayia told sik that his father is the hockage and jarayia will not stop siko from his mission and help im as muchas he can which he promosed to do .. then luna join them .. ( link : )

chapter 4
a snake of reborn


In the darkness of a deep cave, there was an old dirty hairy man guiding 4 other men to a circle seal on the earth which they circled around and began forming seals while chanting weird words like (( gutcha lora biotom ladiom )). One of them grabbed a knife from under his cloak and thrust it in the leading ones heart. He then threw him in the middle of the circle, chanting (( gatch lora biotom ladiom sorox frior woqariia !! )) The others kept forming seals like nothing had happened. The dead man kept bleeding, all his blood was sucked in to the seal circle as the murderer keep klling and tossing the others in the middle until he finally made his last seal and said (( FORBIDDEN JUTSU : SNAKE REVIVE )). The circled seal got activated and the men's bodies disappeared to transform into an egg. A gigantic agg that was sealed with blood
(( hahahahahaaaha )) laughed the man throwing his clock away apearing an old white haired man wit an snake like left eye saying (( hahahah ... i knew i was going to revive again you master and this time you are going to rule the earth .. ))
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chapter 5
A battle with the legend of konoha


(( jar !!! )) screamed a man voice from behind the closed door interrupting their laughter
(( dad .... )) said Jarayia excitedly. The door opened and a yellow-haired blue-eyed man appeared with a black-haired woman by his side. The woman looked really sleepy unlike the man who was extremely thrilled to see his son (( JAR ! HOW ARE YOU ?? feelin injured ?? .. anything ??? ))
(( no dad ..and its all thanks to siko )) Jarayia answered
(( Siko .. ?? )) questioned the Sixth
(( yeah i forgot .. this is Siko and Luna from the Garaiam village and he is the sixth hokage, my father )) said Jarayia
(( nice to meet yiah all )) said the sixth with a smile on his face then thought '' Garaiam .. what is this village .. they do look wierd .. i better watch them "
(( hi .. wellcome to the leaf )) said softly the black-haired woman
(( ooo mam how are yiah ?? )) asked jarayia
(( i am well thanks for asking )) responded jarayia's mom
(( nice to meet you too .. bu- )) siko continued wanting to request for a battle but he was quickly stopped by the sixth (( what happened? we found you wounded on the floor with Siko ?? did someone attack yiah ))
(( no we were practising )) explained Jarayia
(( all of this ... practising ... )) said the sixth (( weird practise .. JAR DONT YOU EVER PRACTISE LIKE THAT... WE WERE WORRIED SICK ABOUT YIAH ))
(( ok dad ))
then siko continued (( hokage-sama ... i came here on a mission ... to destroy the nine-tailed demon ... ))
(( what ??? )) said the suprised Sixth (( you wanna kill the nine-tailed beast .. but that's impossible and ... i can't let you do that .. Right you are my son's friend but i have to say no ))
(( i know but i cant return with a no ... so how about a battle between the two of us ))
(( go play somewhere else kid )) mocked the Sixth
(( dont call me that, i am not a kid ...I can destroy you and the nine-tails together .. lets fight ! )) said Siko furiously
(( Siko be carefull )) warned luna
(( alright then lets go outside )) said the Sixth
(( Naruto ... are you gonna fight this kid ?? really ??? )) questioned Jarayia's mom
(( yeah Hinata, i have to )) said the Sixth as Siko and Luna accompanied him out of the building. The mother remained with her son reassuring him (( it wont take long, i will be returning soon , you make sure jar is ok ))
(( alright then .... lets begin this )) said the Sixth preparing for what he expect to be a small battle in the training field.
(( hah .. don?t underestimate me! )) said Siko releasing the power of the pearl. It threw up his sleeping hair, especially the hair over his left eye that contained the pearl. as he thought " to destroy a legend i need a legendary attack " He quickly performed a hand seal saying (( summoning jutsu : legendary dragons )). Five dragons emerged from the lights of the pearl? each adhering to one element. There was a wind dragon, a fire dragon, a lightning dragon, a water dragon and an earth dragon that was made of rocks. (( rise my dragons ..NOW ! )) cried Siko as the dragons lunged at the sixth that was startled by the attack. However, he jumped abruptly into the air and crossed his fingers saying (( shadow clone jutsu !! ))
(( that wont help ! )) responded Siko redirecting the dragons at him but the Hokage and his clones removed from their cloaks swords. Using their wind chakra, they charged their swords so they transformed into giant swords and began slashing the dragons that were getting nearer and nearer to him with their powerful swords
(( there?s no need to fight ... just surrender !!! )) commanded Siko
(( no way ... am not losing to you !! )). One of the clones quickly ran behind Siko . The Hokage used wind element on a rock and threw it at Siko. As it hit Siko and the clone now performed a rasengan and smashed it in Siko's back. The dragons began to disappear (( ahhh !!!!! )) said Siko flying with pain toward the sixth. The Hokage finished Siko with a knock-out kick that left him unconscious...
 

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I read all , and it's pretty good =] Just I don't like how text is placed. It's kind of troublesome to read . I like this structure more :

( Writers speech )
-Dialogue-
( Writers speech )

In my opinion =]

Keep writing =]
 

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I read all , and it's pretty good =] Just I don't like how text is placed. It's kind of troublesome to read . I like this structure more :

( Writers speech )
-Dialogue-
( Writers speech )

In my opinion =]

Keep writing =]
If you order the text structure, it will be good.
 

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I read all , and it's pretty good =] Just I don't like how text is placed. It's kind of troublesome to read . I like this structure more :

( Writers speech )
-Dialogue-
( Writers speech )

In my opinion =]

Keep writing =]

I agree w/ hebie the story is good but the text you gotta work on it!;)
 

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hey this pic is about chapter 5 . my draw , not so great but good i think
this update of picies is going to be in every chapter with picies about it
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