Forgive Me

[ikikouchiha9668]

So this peom is about Sasuke leaving the Leaf. Um, I guess the love and dear and honey are probably either Sakura or Naruto. The dirt on his heart is like saying how he's scraping off everything that ever hurt him to gain more power.

Forgive me
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Forgive me, love
For leaving you
Flying like a dove
A scar on your heart
A lovely heart
As I dare to part
Forgiving love you gave me
Pain from leaving
Stinging like a bee
Your face soft
Sleeping gently
As I climb to the loft
Of my brain
Sadly, it is you I drain
Forgive me, dear
I hate to say
That I caused you fear
When you wake
You will know
It is power I take
The upper hand
I have
As I wear this band
Not to hurt
I wouldn't dare
But to clean dirt
Dirt of my heart
Oh! so much dirt
As I do this unforgiving part
Forgive me, honey
As I laugh
I know it's not funny
But I rule
How sad
I might seem cruel
But forgive me, doll
As I take all

 

[MutantWhale]

It's good, but is it just one stanza? I think u should break it up a bit. It was lovely though <3

 

[Sasuke eternal sharingan]

you little.

 

[DARK BEAST ZANZA]

I dont get the meaning behind it but its good +Rep

 

[Ririchiyo]

Nice work
break it up in more stanzas

 

[ikikouchiha9668]

thank you~ <3

 

[Zeref]

i like it rep+

 

[~Dream~]

Lovely poem. <3 ^^

 

[Gèckö]

what he said^

 

[narutogrg]

cute 1 >.<

 

[Rorasa]

beautiful, simply beautiful