For my Prince..

[Swati Chan]

Your smile is a boon to me,
Your laugh is a medicine for me.

living without you is like a war anyway,
Its a nightmare when you are far away.

Sunshine appears dull,
My life becomes null.

I wanna reach your mind,
Oh yeah, that's kinda Divine.

So come near me...my dear one,
That's my love for you...you are the chosen one.


it sounds kinda childish..
i hope you all like it..

 

[SamuraiClownSenju]

I like

 

[-Punk-]

when you are in love it doesnt have to make sense ...but its great

 

[Kages]

It's beautiful :T_T:

 

[Snape Uchiha]

Very impressive imagery.

 

[November]

Love Is Dangerous
It's So Poisonous

 

[TruthLover19]

Roses r red,
Violets r blue,
This poem is ****!ng great,
So props to u

 

[Swati Chan]

thanks to all..

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

very nice poem, tho i once wrote a poem of my own, everybody hated it im not sure why lol

here it is

My Star

My Shining Star So Beautiful and yet so Far

Your Beauty And your Light Gives my Heart Delight

Your Delicate heart from which i cannot Depart

your Magic Wonders my mind your words so warm so kind

The richness in your gaze is like a blaze of which i can't erase

All the Wonders the Magic the Melodies on this earth cannot fully describe your eyes wealth

you give me all, your love makes me Whole

since the day i fell for you i have but one Wish, one Dream, one Goal

neither time nor distance will hinder my light to reach your Soul

i love you my brightest Star in a world of darkness

lend me your Divine lips and let me be lost in your eternal Kiss


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i know my english is bad tho lol

 

[ziggyZ]

Dope as poem!!
P.S. whose it for of I may ask?

 

[Dribbles]

very nice poem, tho i once wrote a poem of my own, everybody hated it im not sure why lol

here it is

My Star

My Shining Star So Beautiful and yet so Far

Your Beauty And your Light Gives my Heart Delight

Your Delicate heart from which i cannot Depart

your Magic Wonders my mind you words so warm so kind

The richness in your gaze is like a blaze of which i can't erase

All the Wonders the Magic the Melodies on this earth cannot fully describe your eyes wealth

you give me all! your love makes me Whole

since the day i fell for you i have but one Wish, one Dream, one Goal

neither time nor distance will hinder my light to reach your Soul

i love you my brightest Star in a world of darkness

lend me your Divine lips and let me be lost in your eternal Kiss


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i know my english is bad tho lol

It's supposed to rhyme the way you're writing it, otherwise you'd have to do it in longer paragraphs.

The poem is nice btw OP, good job.

 

[Skylar Knight]

Good work, I like it! ^_^

 

[ziggyZ]

It's supposed to rhyme the way you're writing it, otherwise you'd have to do it in longer paragraphs.

The poem is nice btw OP, good job.

Star -> far, whole -> goal -> soul. They all rhyme.

 

[Yo pappy]

Not gonna lie it does sound awfully childish, but I'm sure whoever it's for will think otherwise.

 

[Swati Chan]

very nice poem, tho i once wrote a poem of my own, everybody hated it im not sure why lol

here it is

My Star

My Shining Star So Beautiful and yet so Far

Your Beauty And your Light Gives my Heart Delight

Your Delicate heart from which i cannot Depart

your Magic Wonders my mind your words so warm so kind

The richness in your gaze is like a blaze of which i can't erase

All the Wonders the Magic the Melodies on this earth cannot fully describe your eyes wealth

you give me all, your love makes me Whole

since the day i fell for you i have but one Wish, one Dream, one Goal

neither time nor distance will hinder my light to reach your Soul

i love you my brightest Star in a world of darkness

lend me your Divine lips and let me be lost in your eternal Kiss


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i know my english is bad tho lol

nice one
that last line was too good

 

[repulse]

Your smile is a boon to me,
Your laugh is a medicine for me.

living without you is like a war anyway,
Its a nightmare when you are far away.

Sunshine appears dull,
My life becomes null.

I wanna reach your mind,
Oh yeah, that's kinda Divine.

So come near me...my dear one,
That's my love for you...you are the chosen one.


it sounds kinda childish..
i hope you all like it..

The only thing I see wrong with this poem is lines 3-4.

living without you is like a war anyway,
Its a nightmare when you are far away.

What's confusing is the third line. It seems to me like you are trying to force the rhyme. By adding the "anyway", you make it appear as if you were talking about the symptoms of a war, or something contradictory to one, before line 3. Try this instead: "living without you makes me feel deranged"

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

nice one
that last line was too good

Thanks

heres another one i wrote lol


pain, suffering, sadness, and mistrust

blowing away the heart, in the sands of time, as nothing but Dust!

is that the cost of love, if so, where is the Just?

An evil Kindness thrown Upon the One who loves!, Guided by enemies of Love, Sensuality
and Lust!

Or is it we who are the enemies of Love, and turn its beauty into a Blast!

So i wonder, how can a heart filled with Love, endure and adjust?

Love, no different from life, life Consisting of Pain and Sadness, Joy, and Happiness, As does a Love that Lives In the heart!, for that, is a Must!

an Endless Universe Of Love, where Love lives and breeds Stronger than any life that breaths!, Immortal in your heart!

Embrace me my heart, fill me with Love, and Merge me with Life!, Make My Soul Complete!, and let us Never depart!

 

[Swati Chan]

Thanks

heres another one i wrote lol


pain, suffering, sadness, and mistrust

blowing away the heart, in the sands of time, as nothing but Dust!

is that the cost of love, if so, where is the Just?

An evil Kindness thrown Upon the One who loves!, Guided by enemies of Love, Sensuality
and Lust!

Or is it we who are the enemies of Love, and turn its beauty into a Blast!

So i wonder, how can a heart filled with Love, endure and adjust?

Love, no different from life, life Consisting of Pain and Sadness, Joy, and Happiness, As does a Love that Lives In the heart!, for that, is a Must!

an Endless Universe Of Love, where Love lives and breeds Stronger than any life that breaths!, Immortal in your heart!

Embrace me my heart, fill me with Love, and Merge me with Life!, Make My Soul Complete!, and let us Never depart!

your words are so beautiful..but you should write it in poetic manner..
but still i love it:hug:

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

your words are so beautiful..but you should write it in poetic manner..
but still i love it:hug:

thank you, and sorry for filling your thread with my poems LOL

i did not write it in such way because i do not know how, i am not a poet, i just happened to be in love back then

she was the love of my life, it still hurts, like it was yesterday lol

anyway as i told her then, True Love makes any man into a Poet, only true love

unfortunately i lost mine

 

[Swati Chan]

aweee..
its ok..^^
you seem a professional in writing poems..
but this one was my first poem..


it just came up when "the one" wrote a poem for me..
so i thought i should make one for him as well..