first shot at a poem

[Elementalist]

well....here it goes


Looking into the complex system called myself
I see nothing but distant memories that can do nothing but fade to black
Finding nothing but at the same time somehow finding comfort in my own minuscule insecurities
Because they are the only thing that makes me truly myself
Nothing can comfort me like myself
those looking in cannot possibly understand me as well as I can
I who have been with myself for so long
But have only recently realized my own potential
And who has found the true truth that even though you can lie to even yourself
eventually only you and you alone find and accept the answer to why you exist


please review it.

 

[Awkward Linguist]

Cool.

 

[SQY]

Its good, but you used myself to much,

 

[Arcaneos510X]

i loved it man great work + rep to you !

 

[Tsuki]

It's good, I think you've done well in making it sound poetic (unlike my poems T_T)
Keep up the good work and keep on improving ^^

 

[Ldude]

Pretty good, but there's room for improvement (as to be expected). There is roo for improvement for every writer!

 

[Yuka]

its a really nice poem

 

[0neCrazyAngel]

hey, this is good for a first try and u have alot of potential so dont stop writing! cheers :ice: