Awkward Linguist
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Hey, this is a new FF i'm starting. I hope you guys enjoy it. 
So what did you think? Good or bad? Why? What could i improve on?
lol, i know it's short but that's how i intend to keep it like, short and interesting.. xd
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Chapter one Part one
Squirrels and odd wild animals were lurking in the shadows of the bushes as hawks were zooming over the sky, hunting for their food. Apart from the usual noises, the remote area was as quiet as usual. A group of birds took off in a hurry towards the sky as a girl walked in the lonely pathway. The wind was blowing on her vibrant red hair. The girl had pink headphones on. The girls deep chocolate brown eyes observed her surrounding. It looked as if she was frightened. The girl had a very light brown skin with a faint reddish cheeks and was wearing a blue tank top and dark grey with orange strip jeans. The girl was also wearing black and orange trainers.
Riko Soatome POV
A flock of birds took off as i walked down the familiar path towards my "Wonder" spot. I occasionally go there to mainly relax and read a book and think about what's going on my life. The full moon gleamed in the pitch black sky of the night, in a distance owls chattered loudly sending chills down sending a chill down my spine. As I moved cautiously through the deserted forest, twigs cracked under my feet placing fright in my every step, beads of sweat gathered on my forehead. The wind whistled over me and I could feel my own fright consuming me bit by bit. I wasn't used to going to my "Wonder" spot at midnight, so it was kind of scary. I blew my red hair out of my face before i hopped on to my favorite branch. It had the best view of the hole village. As i settled down, i observed my surroundings. Anomalous shadows were created as the moonlight rays reflected on them. The atmosphere was tranquil and still. It was like as if time has frozen itself. The air had the usual "konoha" smell to it. The trees lashed and crashed against each other like drum sticks in the hands of a giant.
I took a deep breath before think about what was going on. Life was getting difficult with all my training and education. More homework and training than ever, i've hardly had enough time to spend with my one and only brother lately. I've also didn't get the time to go out with my dear friends in a while due to revision classes. The pressure is building up as exams are getting threateningly closer by the day. I could really do with a break. But hey, that doesn't mean I'm going to break down and fail all my exams. I'm never going to give up and certainly not today.
"Hey!" an unfamiliar voice said behind be, bringing back to the real world.
Swiftly, i turned my head around to see who it was.
No one.
"Who is it?" I said questioningly
No reply.
I then listened out for any noise made by whom it ever was. After a few minutes of failure, i went back into thinking about my daily complications again. Around ten minutes later, i heard a branch crack and someones hurry movement. Without thinking, i threw a kunai in the direction, and waited to hear the person scream in agony or the thump of their body falling on the floor. Neither of those happened. Sweat started to develop on my forehead. I had a feeling i shouldn't have come to my "Wonder" spot today, specially at midnight. Slowly, i got of my favorite branch and got down on the ground and started to explore. After a couple of steps, i was hurled upside down by a rope, and instantly knew it was a trap obviously devised for me.
"Damn it!" I said irritated. I'd been so stupid. I let my guard down at the wrong time at the wrong place.
"Help, someone!" I begged. But no reply came as usual.
I looked around. Unfortunately all i could see was trees.
Suddenly, out of the corner of my eye, I saw a figure of someone approaching. I couldn't make out their face. The thing that caught my eye was however a kunai which the moonlight was reflecting on...
My eyes widened.
"Oh shit..."
Chapter one Part one
Squirrels and odd wild animals were lurking in the shadows of the bushes as hawks were zooming over the sky, hunting for their food. Apart from the usual noises, the remote area was as quiet as usual. A group of birds took off in a hurry towards the sky as a girl walked in the lonely pathway. The wind was blowing on her vibrant red hair. The girl had pink headphones on. The girls deep chocolate brown eyes observed her surrounding. It looked as if she was frightened. The girl had a very light brown skin with a faint reddish cheeks and was wearing a blue tank top and dark grey with orange strip jeans. The girl was also wearing black and orange trainers.
Riko Soatome POV
A flock of birds took off as i walked down the familiar path towards my "Wonder" spot. I occasionally go there to mainly relax and read a book and think about what's going on my life. The full moon gleamed in the pitch black sky of the night, in a distance owls chattered loudly sending chills down sending a chill down my spine. As I moved cautiously through the deserted forest, twigs cracked under my feet placing fright in my every step, beads of sweat gathered on my forehead. The wind whistled over me and I could feel my own fright consuming me bit by bit. I wasn't used to going to my "Wonder" spot at midnight, so it was kind of scary. I blew my red hair out of my face before i hopped on to my favorite branch. It had the best view of the hole village. As i settled down, i observed my surroundings. Anomalous shadows were created as the moonlight rays reflected on them. The atmosphere was tranquil and still. It was like as if time has frozen itself. The air had the usual "konoha" smell to it. The trees lashed and crashed against each other like drum sticks in the hands of a giant.
I took a deep breath before think about what was going on. Life was getting difficult with all my training and education. More homework and training than ever, i've hardly had enough time to spend with my one and only brother lately. I've also didn't get the time to go out with my dear friends in a while due to revision classes. The pressure is building up as exams are getting threateningly closer by the day. I could really do with a break. But hey, that doesn't mean I'm going to break down and fail all my exams. I'm never going to give up and certainly not today.
"Hey!" an unfamiliar voice said behind be, bringing back to the real world.
Swiftly, i turned my head around to see who it was.
No one.
"Who is it?" I said questioningly
No reply.
I then listened out for any noise made by whom it ever was. After a few minutes of failure, i went back into thinking about my daily complications again. Around ten minutes later, i heard a branch crack and someones hurry movement. Without thinking, i threw a kunai in the direction, and waited to hear the person scream in agony or the thump of their body falling on the floor. Neither of those happened. Sweat started to develop on my forehead. I had a feeling i shouldn't have come to my "Wonder" spot today, specially at midnight. Slowly, i got of my favorite branch and got down on the ground and started to explore. After a couple of steps, i was hurled upside down by a rope, and instantly knew it was a trap obviously devised for me.
"Damn it!" I said irritated. I'd been so stupid. I let my guard down at the wrong time at the wrong place.
"Help, someone!" I begged. But no reply came as usual.
I looked around. Unfortunately all i could see was trees.
Suddenly, out of the corner of my eye, I saw a figure of someone approaching. I couldn't make out their face. The thing that caught my eye was however a kunai which the moonlight was reflecting on...
My eyes widened.
"Oh shit..."
So what did you think? Good or bad? Why? What could i improve on?
lol, i know it's short but that's how i intend to keep it like, short and interesting.. xd
