FAN FICTION[the adventure of the task force: explosive style]

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EXPLOSIVE STYLE
this is the second chapter of this story here is a link to the last chapterhttp://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=450209
Anne,bistarhh,hazard and akakun(both wolves)runs in the forest 'do you know what our mission is about?' anne asks bistarhh,bistarhh takes out the scroll and throws it to anne,anne catches it with her left hand,anne opens the scroll "deidara toki" she yells as she glances through the scroll and bistarhh looks at her without showing any emotion and looks away "he is a notorious bomber" talking to no one in "so we are heading to amegakure,how come he creates his explosions,is there any clay in amegakure?" she asks bistarhh "i,ve never been there the only thing i know about that guy is that his father once killed the 5th kazekage and took shukaku away but thanks to team kakashi and late elder chiyo,he was brought back to life with a forbidden jutsu,thats all i know" bistarhh answers,they continue their journey "well i also heard that his clays wont explode when infused with lightning,according to Lord sasuke's battle with deidara the former akatsuki member" anne says also while they continue their journey.
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Broly(ninja 2 in previous chapter) arrives at kirigakure and heads to the mizukage's office "i am back lady mei" he says and bows. "how good was my son?" the mizuke asks "he is a skilled shinobi he killed loki(ninja 1 in previous chapter)" Broly replies."okay we didnt make a mistake chosing him to be part of the organisation" lady mei says and dismisses Broly.
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Anne,hazard and akakun stops "stop" anne yells out and bistarhh stops immediately "we are close to the village" anne says immediately she finished talking a large gust of smoke is appeals from afar and rises to the sky.
Four clay birds fly towards anne,hazard, akakun and bistarhh. The birds starts enlarging and explodes in mid range to the ladies and the wolves,before the explosion got to them bistarhh wraps them with sand and protects them from the explosion.after the explosion bistarhh unwraps the sand "nice one" a voice from the woods says.....TO BE CONTINUED
 
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Punctuation... U need to become better with punctuations and paragraphs... U can show me first anytime u come around
 

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Agree with the other two comments and add use a better way of showing the different text like if talking [ it looks like this] if. Thinking wonder what's next or maybe how did he do that find what looks good and is easy for your eyes.
 
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