[Other] False Love

[Espadara Uchiha]

Never tried to do this before. Please, treat me gently.

Darkness fills my vision
but a light comes into being
emanating from your heart.

The warmth swells
And I question this
"Is this love?"

Yet you face away
The light always shone for him
As I fade once more.

I could never be the one you loved
Even though I can reach you
In this world behind the eyelids.

 

[Akame]

It's good. But it doesent rime. Don't get me wrong it's understandable and it's a cool concept but it needs to time moreZ

 

[Otter]

I like it. The first verse feels like a haiku, dig it big time!

 

[FoxesInWonderland]

Nice. I love poetry. Im kind of a poet myself

 

[Goetia]

It's alright for a first try. Try and rhyme, it makes it sound better. It's a bit short as well, it being a tad longer would be better. But good job.

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Writing poetry in free verse is harder than it looks although they doesn't rhyme it takes real effort and yeah ! it depends on personal preference .

keep up ! you gonna get better .