[Approved] Evil Onion [Bio]

[Yuse]

Welcome to the RP.

 

[ANiMUS]

Take that clan off and either put Dark or nothing at all. If you're not in a canon clan or a custom clan made by a member, then you're not in a clan. If you use a canon element/release that wasn't specified to be used by a clan, you just put the element next to clan or leave it blank. Although you are a sage, you're an unofficial sage. So put that next to your sage rage. It should say "unofficial sage".

I can tell you right now that this bio won't get approved, but saying you're just going to give up and quit is no way to look at it. You either want to have fun and RP and you don't want to RP at all. There are plenty of people around here to help and plenty of the ones helping didn't have a great first bio either. I know I didn't and now I make my bios on point, as do the rest of the people who were once in your position. If it doesn't get approved, take what we said into consideration and then post it again. It's not hard to make simply changes and then post it again. There is no waiting period between posting a bio again after it gets declined, just make the right changes to where it is acceptable.

Other than him not even being human and being up to about my 9 year old character's shin, everything else is decent. Although I didn't read the history. I'm scared too... If you've linked yourself to any canon characters, take that out and if you said you learned something or found something out that you actually haven't in the RP, take it out.

And welcome to the RP. Don't be a baby and toughen up.

Wait Hozaki is a clan :| it is the same clan that Troll Kage and Suigetsu are from. And are u saying that if I need to put in additional element when I am part of a canon clan I need to put those elements by whatever clan I am in, like this?

Clan: Houzaki-Wind, Earth, Dark

Welcome to the RP.

Thanks =D

 

[Troi]

Wait Hozaki is a clan :| it is the same clan that Troll Kage and Suigetsu are from. And are u saying that if I need to put in additional element when I am part of a canon clan I need to put those elements by whatever clan I am in, like this?




Thanks =D

Yes. Hozuki clan [

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] is a clan in the RP, same as the canon clan. The same clan as the Trollkage and Suigetsu lol. It's Hozuki. Not Hozaki. However, if you mean Hozaki, as in a clan you just made up, you need to take it off as that is not allowed. If you're in a clan, it needs to be a canon clan in the RP or a clan created by an official sage.

And no. No, no, no... You can only have one KKG. Meaning if you choose a clan like Hozuki, you cannot have dark or if you have dark, you cannot have Hozuki. Only one thing should be by the clan section. Just one thing. And it should never be a basic element as a basic element is basic and not a KKG.

Also, you actually need to take dark off since you need to have certain elements completed for that and you haven't completed any.

But you can actually make a Hozuki right now if you want.

Restrictions:

To make a Cannon or Custom Hōzuki bio you need to have at least made 2400 posts.
Must have been a member for atleast 2 months
All Hōzuki member bio's have to originate from Kirigakure.

 

[RuckenTM]

Wel...come to Rp....your sig is a nightmare...anyways...Go to a shop if you're lazy, Jakai is really God's helping hand. Use it.

 

[ANiMUS]

Yes. Hozuki clan [

You must be registered for see links

] is a clan in the RP, same as the canon clan. The same clan as the Trollkage and Suigetsu lol. It's Hozuki. Not Hozaki. However, if you mean Hozaki, as in a clan you just made up, you need to take it off as that is not allowed. If you're in a clan, it needs to be a canon clan in the RP or a clan created by an official sage.

And no. No, no, no... You can only have one KKG. Meaning if you choose a clan like Hozuki, you cannot have dark or if you have dark, you cannot have Hozuki. Only one thing should be by the clan section. Just one thing. And it should never be a basic element as a basic element is basic and not a KKG.

Also, you actually need to take dark off since you need to have certain elements completed for that and you haven't completed any.

But you can actually make a Hozuki right now if you want.

Done, any more critiques?

Wel...come to Rp....your sig is a nightmare...anyways...Go to a shop if you're lazy, Jakai is really God's helping hand. Use it.

Thanks

 

[Troi]

Done, any more critiques?


Thanks

None. Good luck.

 

[Reborn]

That isn't fair Zetsu isn't human

You basically need special permission to not be human. By which I mean Zetsu (requires permission) Gyojin fish people (join the CC), etc.

I'll accept that he's in a transformation jutsu that makes him look like a chibi Jigsaw, your history is hilarious in the sense that you're not even in the RP yet but are talking about counter governments and Akatsuki. Of course you could be residing in your own little standoffish universe for the time being but the thought of matching your bio to everything you said in your history at this point in time is rather funny.

Then again this may be my cynicism for being a bio mod as long as I have and having read damn near every history cliche and trope there is. Anyway, your history doesn't conflict with anything nor does it affect anything so I'll accept it, though when you update, you may wish to evolve it a bit...

Also Kirigakure's Kage is the Mizukage...

 

[ANiMUS]

You basically need special permission to not be human. By which I mean Zetsu (requires permission) Gyojin fish people (join the CC), etc.

I'll accept that he's in a transformation jutsu that makes him look like a chibi Jigsaw, your history is hilarious in the sense that you're not even in the RP yet but are talking about counter governments and Akatsuki. Of course you could be residing in your own little standoffish universe for the time being but the thought of matching your bio to everything you said in your history at this point in time is rather funny.

Then again this may be my cynicism for being a bio mod as long as I have and having read damn near every history cliche and trope there is. Anyway, your history doesn't conflict with anything nor does it affect anything so I'll accept it, though when you update, you may wish to evolve it a bit...

Also Kirigakure's Kage is the Mizukage...

Thanks for the approval and the criticism =D

 

[Troi]

I led you straight to victory.

 

[Cabbage]

I led you straight to victory.

You're a good person Moxxi ;-;

 

[ANiMUS]

I led you straight to victory.

Really thanks for helping me. U and everyone else that helped out were really awesome =D