Epilogue (Very short)/ Reflection

What should I do now?

  • Sequel

    Votes: 5 50.0%
  • Play

    Votes: 2 20.0%
  • Neither (Explain)

    Votes: 3 30.0%

  • Total voters
    10

~Deidara~

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After the immense fire, the young maid took the infant to an inn nearby. She waited for days upon days, but Ama never showed. When she learned of the tragedy, she decided to raise the child herself. She vowed to never speak of his parents in front of him until he was older. She was kind and raised him well. He loved her as a mother. The weird thing was, he had his right a Byakugan and his left a Sharingan!

THE END, REALLY



Alright guys! Since I finished this work, and the Fanfic votes are underway, I thought it was time to reflect. Other than adding more literary quality, what do YOU think I need to improve on? Also, should I write a sequel to this, or a play? See the poll above. Be respectful!
 

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if you plan to continue this, i suggest you draw up a storyline for yourself so you won't have a hard time and rushing certain parts. that way, you'll be able to concentrate on each idea and set the appropriate amount of story time that it should have.
as for what you should do, you could continue this with a sequel or you could make a totally new story.
:)
 

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if you plan to continue this, i suggest you draw up a storyline for yourself so you won't have a hard time and rushing certain parts. that way, you'll be able to concentrate on each idea and set the appropriate amount of story time that it should have.
as for what you should do, you could continue this with a sequel or you could make a totally new story.
:)
Like an outline? I like that idea and agree about rushing. Thanks!


I'm also gonna throw this out there: Do you guys like ction-based like the first two parts, literary based, like the third, or both like the work as a whole? Explain.
 
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I think u should continue with a sequel, because I really want 2 see what the boy will do in the future.....

Also I think you could spend a little more time in developing the fight scenes and the emotional ones just 2 help build more suspense and 2 go more in depths with each characters, I noticed u did a lot of rush work in explaining mainly the fightings u didn't explain and described as thorough as in previous chapters....

But excellent work as always:):)
 
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