Dream of a serpant chapter1

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MANDA'S DREAM CHAPTER1

The story took place sometime before the establishment of the five great nations. There are endless wars, cruel hatred and the shinobi world is burning with evil. Many kids were orphaned due to this. In this time there were three friends. They were all animals and were not larger than a ninken dogs. Their name were gamabunta-the frog , katsuyu-the slug and manda-the snake. Their homelands were mount myoboku,forest shikkotsu and ryuchi cave respectively. Gamabunta was currently residing in mount myoboku , katsuyu where she currently resides is unknown but all that is known is she is not at her homeland-(she is damn tired of the bones and shit) and manda being an orphaned does not know the way to his homeland.(Manda's parents were killed in a war). The three friends were playing somewhere when manda started crying. Gamabunta, "whats the matter manda?". He ignored him and go on crying. Katsuyu who was softheart spoke up ,"manda kun tell us your problems and let us try and help you..". Manda gave katsuyu an evil glare and gamabunta who knows katsuyu's idle heart yelled, "MANDA!!!". Then manda suddenly stopped to cry and he who has rude personality and does not care what others feeling blurt out "you foolish frog don't yell at me like that, just because you live in your homeland doesn't mean you can be proud. And you slimy slug is worst than foolish , you have a homeland but prefers not to live there.. Listen you two I swear that i am going to find my homeland and will be a boss summon. I'm off." saying so manda went away. Katsuyu felt very brokenheart but softly spoke, " poor manda I wish i could find his homeland ". Gamabunta was thinking that even though manda insulted her katsuyu was still kind to manda. Then he told katsuyu," katsuyu well manda's dream is to find his homeland and be a boss summon, well we have dreams too..we will go to him and told our dreams and lets see who among us achieve our own dreams first." . Then katsuyu nodded and smile a pleasant smile.

what are gamabunta and katsuyu dream? Will manda act positive to them and react positively? Little do they know they are only going to achieve their dreams only when they work together...

xD hope you like it . If there are any flaws do tell me.
 
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10+1 hehe...will sure to write better. And thanks i feel glad when people told me what they think.
So your 11?

Okay i guess its alright for your age, i was just abit better at your age though xd

Still pretty good for your age group, +rep for effort

( Sorry about that ) :shy:

Also, you should probably split it into paragraphs. It makes it abit difficult to read when its just a wall of text and speech marks, also try to colour the names and split up the speech from the characters.
 
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So your 11?

Okay i guess its alright for your age, i was just abit better at your age though xd

Still pretty good for your age group, +rep for effort

( Sorry about that ) :shy:

Also, you should probably split it into paragraphs. It makes it abit difficult to read when its just a wall of text and speech marks, also try to colour the names and split up the speech from the characters.
thanks and you mean like a drama huh?
 

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So your 11?

Okay i guess its alright for your age, i was just abit better at your age though xd

Still pretty good for your age group, +rep for effort

( Sorry about that ) :shy:

Also, you should probably split it into paragraphs. It makes it abit difficult to read when its just a wall of text and speech marks, also try to colour the names and split up the speech from the characters.
thanks and you mean like a drama huh? Like a drama?
 
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