Dream Battle #3: Itachi vs Jiraiya (Part 2)

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Whaaaa? You're beast at dialogue. You described the district and its terrain in Wolfe perfectly.
Dude, that totally sucked, I have to re-write that whole part. I think you're somewhat confused about the level of difficulty good writing requires. xd When you get to where I'm at, it's easier to see where you rank compared to the greats, but for me it's like I just now entered the arena for the first time and everyone is ready to eat me alive.
 

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Dude, that totally sucked, I have to re-write that whole part. I think you're somewhat confused about the level of difficulty good writing requires. xd When you get to where I'm at, it's easier to see where you rank compared to the greats, but for me it's like I just now entered the arena for the first time and everyone is ready to eat me alive.
Damn. That's actually scary. Though the first novels of the greats must not have been as amazing as the ones they made after.
Don't falter, man. You got this.
 

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Damn. That's actually scary. Though the first novels of the greats must not have been as amazing as the ones they made after.
Don't falter, man. You got this.
Be afraid...be very afraid. O_O Also, the better you are, the harder it is to improve, but if you ever stop trying to improve then it all falls apart.

It's not me I'm worried about. :p
 

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Be afraid...be very afraid. O_O Also, the better you are, the harder it is to improve, but if you ever stop trying to improve then it all falls apart.

It's not me I'm worried about. :p
Oh.
No need to worry about me, I have lowered my expectations after doing some research. I can reach where I'm making with easy-mid difficulty.
 

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S. Train has talked about some of my concerns. My other concern is keeping things in character. For example-

Jiraiya can't get into SM that fast.

Pa and Ma probably don't know Itachi and they don't fear anybody. They barely gave a crap about the Rinnegan.

SM punches kill if you dodge them.

Jiraiya's sensing should prevent him from getting caught by Susanoo. Against Pain, his guard wasn't up which was why he ended up getting caught by Asura and having his arm ripped out but here, he's in mid battle.

Just sayin' U_U

Good job anyways.
 

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S. Train has talked about some of my concerns. My other concern is keeping things in character. For example-

Jiraiya can't get into SM that fast.

Pa and Ma probably don't know Itachi and they don't fear anybody. They barely gave a crap about the Rinnegan.

SM punches kill if you dodge them.

Jiraiya's sensing should prevent him from getting caught by Susanoo. Against Pain, his guard wasn't up which was why he ended up getting caught by Asura and having his arm ripped out but here, he's in mid battle.

Just sayin' U_U

Good job anyways.
Thanks, but excuses can be made for all of those points except the SM punching thing. Yeah, I forgot about that.
Pain didn't have an identity at that time nor did he have a reputation like Itachi's.
Jiraiya's SM transformation speed can vary, no?
When Jiraiya's dodged the crack, he leaped to the side, and was unable to dodge Yata Mirror while airborne.

I will do better next time though. :D
 

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Thanks, but excuses can be made for all of those points except the SM punching thing. Yeah, I forgot about that.
Pain didn't have an identity at that time nor did he have a reputation like Itachi's.
Jiraiya's SM transformation speed can vary, no?
When Jiraiya's dodged the crack, he leaped to the side, and was unable to dodge Yata Mirror while airborne.

I will do better next time though. :D
Actually it can't vary. He'd have done it quick against Pain if he could. In the ff fight it was instantaneous. o_O

Rinnegan has the greatest reputation U_U

:ghehe: sorry if I sound so serious xd I'm kinda in Vs thread mode xd
 
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Actually it can't vary. He'd have done it quick against Pain if he could. In the ff fight it was instantaneous. o_O

Rinnegan has the greatest reputation U_U

:ghehe: sorry if I sound so serious xd I'm kinda in Vs thread mode xd
Ughhh okay, you win. xd
Though seriously, Itachi was much more infamous than some unknown guy with orange hair and the rinnegan.
Hopefully, I please you and Shinobi Train with part 4. You guys are a tough crowd.:eek:
 
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